Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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6493346 And according to other people who have depression, this is actually a fair depiction. Perhaps depression is a thing that manifests just a bit differently in everyone with some being professional comedians like Robin Williams while others have to be forced into social situations they would normally avoid because of their lack of social skills and confidence, or maybe I'm just an awful person who doesn't deserve you as a reader.
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I've got depression too but Thomas does have a support structure namely luna, moonlight and talon that's going to midigat the worst of the effects of depression.
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Those are exactly the parts they couldn't help with, because no amount of support structure can fix a screwed-up serotonergic system. That's what they give you the medication for. They could help someone with being unable to stand up for themselves, though.
Anyway, nevermind. I can tell when someone doesn't actually care enough about improving to really listen to criticism. I guess I'll leave you guys to it.
You know, you only went on about straightening the feathers. I'm a little surprised you didn't go more into cleaning them with shampoos and brushes as sometimes thing's get stuck in the feathers. I mean normal preening is fine but I figured Thomas needs to know more about wing care. Hell you could always go about the whole feather detail that some winged creatures would take a healthy feather and give it to either a friend or a love one as a sign of affection towards them. In Luna's cause her feathers could me far more resilient which could be explained with them talking about Celestia's feathers. Maybe more teasing from Talon talking about some moments with Celestia. Would be kind of funny if you have said princess show up right after hearing all this in ear shot. But hey that's just an idea.
I got to say that I liked this chapter. It was funny to see Talon being made putty in the hands of Misty and Thomas via a preening session. Hope to see how Thomas would use that knowledge on the Friday chapter.
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Lack of medication is a big problem true i've been there was a time Where I couldn't afford my medication and I realied heavy on my support structure. It wasn't perfect it wasn't fun. But doable..barely pure hell..
I love this chapter! Doing this with Talen! FANTASTIC! I envy him so much right now!!!
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Be glad, then. You can count yourself lucky, because I've known people who were completely unable to function without it and only barely with. It's common for the worse cases to kill themselves after being put on medication, you know? It gives them the energy and drive to finally do what they wanted all along, but couldn't bring themselves to actually go through with. "Regular" depressive disorder is bad enough, but major clinical depression? Calling that hell isn't doing it justice. It's like you're already dead. Your body just hasn't caught up with you yet.
I would love to give your fic another like, but I can only give one per story, sorry.
That was a awesome read ,It awesome he finily knows how to preen wings and he can only get better and better at it ,I can't wait intel he shows Luna what he learned.I also can't wait intel he learns how to do not only horn jobs but hurn fileing,gaess thay mite have to use a sertin unicorn.And Thomas and Talon friendship is also getting better and better for how much she trust him with her wings,And that big bad Talon turned into a kittin under there hands.
6493404 Damn it. Those are all really good ideas. I wrote this based on a couple other preening stories and none of them went into that level of detail. Oh well. Live and learn.
6493793 Glad to hear it, and here's hoping.
6493832 Give it a little bit, and you'll down right hate the guy.
6493390 I'm open to criticism, just not taking away Thomas' symptoms because they don't match your personal experiences. That said, I do sympathize with the idea of liking a story but hating the characters. Ever heard of Felarya? That stuff is messed up. The characters are all psychopaths and monsters, but they and their situations are just so compelling that I keep reading.
6493894 It's a bummer. I know. A shame you can't give likes for each chapter. That way I'd really know what people like and don't like.
6493941 Indeed. Quite adorable.
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I suppose I can respect that. I wouldn't ask for that anyway, though, at least not on that basis. I was just criticizing your reason for it. I'm advising changing it up a bit because no justification would make the character any less grating to read about, at least to me. In all honesty, until you brought it up, I didn't even actually have the slightest inkling that the character was even supposed to seem depressed. He just doesn't act it in any way that I would have recognized, from rather extensive experience at that. Horribly negative self-image and outlook, yes. Depression, though? Just kind of not seeing it.
6494606 Oh I already do LOL!
The only complaint I have for this story is the chapters are too short. Other than that, I love this story!
Wahou ! Intensive ! 8D
Can't wait to see Thomas using his new skills on Luna ! 8D
6495003 Yeah. Been working on that one. I try to get them around the 3,000 range, but maybe I'll try for longer later.
6494600 well there is always next chapter and if you wish you can contact me if you need more details about anything. Like if you go more into horned creatures I can help provide more details.
6495432 Actually, yes. Any advice or recommendations for stories with good detail would be good for proper horn care.
6494619 If I could give a like to every chapter it will be like.
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6496027 Please don't. The sentiment is appreciated, but this person annoys me greatly.
6496100 Who Oprah? Lol ok
6498139 Kinda. This story was originally meant for another site, which I hadn't entirely planned on continuing, but it sort of took on a life of its own. Don't worry. The chapters get longer and more natural later on. Some day, I might just go back and see about fixing what I had originally done, which was admittedly rather clumsy.
So if their wings are that sensitive does that mean that Rainbow breaking her wing is a level of pain one can scant imagine? Reminds me that it is medically possible to 'break' a penis. That poor mare.
6498576 Basically.
I would have thought that those masseuse ponies would have done something with her wings?
Anyway, the first time Thomas preens Luna ought to be very interesting.
6506309 There's a difference between hygienic preening and sensual massaging. Both are desirable, but for different reasons.
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Wing Boner for Tali.Naughty Thomas.
You sure Talon's a griffin and not a turian?
Ramen!
Needs commas after 'that' and 'Talon'.
But two measures would be too much. A whole sonata is right out.
"Ah?" "No, Ah!, in surprise or alarm." "Oooh!"
If you don't capitalize unicorn, alicorn, or earth pony, you probably shouldn't capitalize pegasus. (I know, it's probably an autocorrect thing.)
8118077 Thanks again. Also, auto correct can be a bitch sometimes.
Misty may have won by default, but she can't beat the quality of the human hand.
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Which, even in anthro world, seem superior to pony hands. Who knew?
Don't mean to be a downer, but if any flying creature had wings this sensitive, they wouldn't be able to fly!
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Shhh, don’t ruin it