Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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Yikes, we got some kind of reality warper on our hands. I'm curious about the correction though, almost seems like resetting the day, thus undoing Luna's mood and Thomas's confession. Unless that paper stack she had was supposed to be for the next night and the corrections fellow didn't fuck with time there.
7029168 All I'll say is that time wasn't the thing that was altered.
If im right its smart if im wrong im an idiot
Yeeaaaaahhhh....pointing out the tonal whiplash doesn't make it any less jarring, just so you know.
You've gone from a character story about herds, relationships and social interactions to...well, whatever the heck that is. It sounds like something straight out of a sci-fi novel. You've not given any prior hints that I've seen that there might be a larger plot and yet here we suddenly are at chapter 55 with reality apparently being rewritten.
Now having, for example, Discord step in and tinker with her reality would be in keeping with the established universe.
But hey, not my story, so not going to even pretend to say what you should and shouldn't write but, at least for me, that seems really out of place. Guess we'll see what you do with it.
It's satisfying that Thomas informed Luna about his condition and that they both helped each other to overcome their self doubts. Still, I do feel curious about that voice telling Perfect Measure about errors and if it would play another role in the story.
7029195 Huh. That's almost deep.
7029203 Yeah... Sad thing is, I agree. I'm a strong believer that there is something in MLP that just lends itself to slice of life over any other kind of story, with very few exceptions. Yet there's still this compulsion, in both the fans and show writers, to insert more action into the formula. Oh well, hopefully I won't take too long in elaborating on stuff.
However, hints have been dropped suggesting to something. They're really underplayed, so I'll understand if most people miss them. However, they will be alluded to later.
7029208 Glad you liked it. Also, there's just no way someone can introduce a thing like that and not expand upon it later.
Okay... Now I'm both worried, and pissed. One: I'm pissed because of the bitching ass Nobility. Two: I'm worried because of that damned machine, or whatever the fuck it was suppose to be. Who's to say that thing isn't in league with the Stallion spying on the group last chapter!?
The way I see it, this new batch is playing everyone the fool!
A wild plot device appears. Looks like the next chapters are gonna be interesting.
7029301 How can it be playing everyone for a fool when we don't even know who knows it even exists?
7029316 I appreciate your optimism.
7029343 Who's to say it even needs to 'exist'? In all honesty, I don't trust that damned thing.
there is from a human perspective a single truth that you can always believe in, those who hold power over the mind or perception of reality cannot be trusted.
It can be very easy to say, or even read it but putting this into practice? That's the challenge of a lifetime, how else can others have free will when another who say of Discord's level can flip the table on you?
For him, he's either subtle or blazingly out there. As for this 'other' supposed type speaking of 'Errors', who cannot say it is darker than even Discord's brand of 'natural' disharmony? There is another saying as well, which may fit for what could happen because we get a feeling this 'Error' intoning voice will come upon Thomas sooner or later and try to remove him as said error. Perhaps driving himself to suicide as the ones with Depression balance on a dangerous knife, we say this from personal experience in the matter as it is seen each day in the mirror.
Though funny enough we also consider 'Cutie Marks' to be dark, being told thy destiny is 'this' when we believe it should be 'this'. Though that is part of living in a version of 'Harmony'.
7029390 Nicely epic. I'm glad people are impressed by this.
I was kind of freaking out when the "Error" keep repeating.
Because what happens when an error is unable be compatible to being corrected?
Delete! Delete! Delete!
7029577 A valid concern, but one I will neither confirm nor deny.
Well, its not Discord, Hound of Tyndalous, or Langolier, but something, possibly automated that keeps an eye on fractures in reality, and then uses minimum ajustments to induviduals to realign their thinking, behaviour?
Given we havent seen R Daneel Olivaw or Giskard, for the time being, given how old my notes are on neural logic etc is, Im going to go with The Tree.
At least Luna has Thomas to help her calm down. Shes going t have to call him her My Little Quozl at this rate. Either that or shes going to have to switch night court to an inertial confinement reactor vessel. That way she can at least get Some worth out of the nobles, if only as fuel pellets.
I wonder if this will end with Thomas getting some sort of superpower. That'd be neat.
7029730 While some of those references went over my head, you do seem to be the closest in figuring out what this is.
7029847 Just gonna have to wait and see.
aww dang it all some pony beat me to it. DR WHO CyberMen.
this is a really good chapter and this story is going to get even more interesting.
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1.) Sorry
2.) I know right?!
So.... No boring fic here!
For that end, I can only say one thing...
Ok, one thing I want to point out. Wether or not a business can extends operational hours or not and still be profitable relies on many factors. Chiefly the biggest factor is operating costs vs profitability. Even if a business is used to getting say 100 costumers a day. But 20 stop coming because they switched to a night shift, a business isn't going to makeup the profits by extending hours. Having to pay employees, extending energy costs, as well as losses from spoiled product that many food service businesses face, are all going to effect profit. So while the night court is good for some businesses it's not good for all.
But that's a problem too, Night court is good for business. So shutting it down is going to hurt the economy. The extended hours creates jobs, more working ponies means more buying ponies. So while individual business might not do as well the blooming economy is beneficial to everyone. So Perfect's proposal will kill the economy.
But all this assumes that this little simulation even considers actual economics. :P
7030604
I have three words for you.
DING DING DING and the best discrption for depression and asperger syndrome goes...
*drum rolls*
Typist Gray
7030778 It's pretty much like you said. Some businesses will suffer but the economy as a whole benefits. However, when it's your business in question, it's harder to care about the whole.
7030969 A collage of various things suggested to me combined with my own feelings on the matter, but thanks.
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Well nearsightedness of individual business owners I no excuse for bad business sense. Is simple numbers, more people working means more potential costumers. Less people working means less potential costumers. If alot of people suddenly lose their jobs the market takes a big hit. Suddenly families who wanted to buy things have to save in order to make sure they can make ends meet. Less people spending money means less business, and that is across all sectors. To make up for lost profits business have to cut hours and lay people off. This feeds the collapse since even more people are out of work. And down it goes. This is basic market reaction, any decent business owner should understand this. Better economy equals more business, bad economy equals less business. It gets way more complicated when you have to consider what is driving the economic boon. If the night court was operating purely off tax revenue, and the boon it granted was far less than the cost then maybe it's benefit could be called into question. But this falls closer to political science than business. That's why people in the real world can never seem to get it right.
Dr. WHO references, and more, abound. This can only mean one thing. The next few chapters are going to be must sees. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
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I read almost the very same description on Wil Wheaton's blog. He suffers from depression as well.
Such a warm and tender moment, and then the ending NOPE NOPE NOPE XD
I am intriged to see what happens next
7032623 Happy to hear.
Luna and Thomas; very sweet and informative. Perfect Measure's night-time encounter; confusing...very confusing.
This corrective measure thing, what if it starts thinking Thomas needs to be "corrected" right out as the changes build and build?
Also i was pissed as hell at Perfect Measure's bull and the business partners behind her and those who talked behind luna's back.
Now other writers have done the same in the past and come off cheap, ruining the effect.
you pulled it off perfectly, got me invested and pissed at who deserved it. thats good writing right there.
That was a awesome and wonderful readIt'sso sweet how there there for each other when theyneed it the most.It just keeps getting better and better as it goes.
7032795 Yup.
7033753 Awesome. I really appreciate it.
"Error, error, error..."
Oh my god ! Perfect Measure has been chased after by a Windows OS ! A unicorn named Blue Screen !
Anyway.
Nice moment between Moonbutt and Thomas. Very cute.
Making cute out of depression... What an artist you are. 8D
7037042 I won't say what the Error is, but it's not that scary.
Thank you.
7037725 My joke was hilarious anyway ! :D
( Where my imagination goes)
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Luna Here, Have a Snickers, You are not you when you are Hungry....
Nightmare Moon: *eats the Candy bar*
Better?
Princess Luna: Yes
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hello 7037725 I really hope you do not go to say that everything is a virtual world and that tomas Is in some kind of coma
8180324 Nah. That's overdone anyway.
Funny enough, of off everything that I read, the one thought that I said was "holy shit, that's racist"
And yeah, this was cute. Love seeing these bonding moments between Thomas and Luna. And of course, I'm very intrigued by the error fixer.
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For some reason, I don't remember the rule, but I think "he" should be capitalized
economics, and, of course, intercourse
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Thomas told Luna of his depression because of Perfect Measure.
However, because that was changed; does that mean he didn't tell Luna?
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Been a while since I've seen this chapter. I'm fairly certain Luna knows, though.