Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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Poor Tommy! Excellent chapter I think everyone's interactions meshed up rather well.
You may have had a hard time with all the interactions but I think you did pretty well with them.
6731205 It warms my heart to hear you say that.
I wonder, if Luna likes the illusion magic effect, in order to read Tommy more easily, that she can use a variation of the spell, like a scanner, where she overlays the human, in her eyes only, with a pony illusion, like having a HUD with an advanced polygraph or other emotion reader display?
Cheaping on mares night is how common?
6731293 Interesting idea.
Less than you'd think.
I liked the interaction between the group and I find the talk about gender change interesting, though I still think that Luna shouldn't have seduced Thomas into accepting a mare illusion when the guy was so uncomfortable. The ending was nice as it seems that Thomas is going to think about his duties as a Swnior Concubine and maybe have a nice long chat with Luna about how he feels about harems. Keep up the great job.
6731433 Will do.
Hmmm, if pressed enough. How might the world react if Thomas quits being this 'senior concubine' job leaving luna due to one event or multiple smaller ones piling up, because humans are rather focused on their identity physically. Wouldn't it be unsettling how 'easy' it is for him to be changed here in Equestria? That could bring up a thought of, 'if she could change me so easily physically, what about my mind'. there is also the fact how no one looked at him with disdain or even a second thought, proving how much more accepting they are of him as a pony then his true self. That could get some implications towards changeling mindsets too if he brings that up.
He if angered or otherwise could spit out that what she did to him is no different then what changelings do to hide from others, which could put a new bit of trouble for the royal image of sneaking about. Though since the changeling invasion has not yet happened, evens are out of turn also could mean that even now there is Changeling spies in the guard ranks preparing also keeping a good eye on the Special human concubine senior of Luna's harem. It would be hilarious if they could be accepted by him and get love and lust more easily from him without harm then they do a pony, since he's not magical without resistances.
this might be our more 'conspiriousy' side speaking aloud here, because a invasion takes a lot of preparation time and intelligence. Though there is a threat that he could be replaced too, the only member of his species present, a unknown foreign power for them to learn about. The funniest joke of all could be if Chrysalis sought to court him, he's intelligent, can get into the mindset of generally how Changelings can be like and possibly level with her unlike most other species could.
6731755 All interesting ideas worth exploring in the future, but I haven't really thought that much into it, especially Thomas encountering the Changlings early. It's definitely worth considering.
6732110 From day one they could have known about his existence, just not how he got there or what he knows. Anyone he could have met outside the normal group at the castle could be a Changeling, which only raises the bar higher. Would be rather funny if one smelled him when he had sweated though, that whole 'a pony in heat' comment brings new light to that.
In the next chapter can you have Thomas accidentally walk into the stallion bathroom since he's a mare right now. It'll be funny.
6732307 I'm thinking
6732341 Meh. Close enough.
6732588 Also on how he wasn't officially greeted like other foreign guests may make the more Paranoid or conspiorouy type beings go, 'this is new, why hasn't there been a delegation of these humans came to speak to Equestria? Why Only send one individual whom somehow wormed his way into good relations with Equestrian's Royalty? By the makers they are attempting to subvert and invade EQUESTRIA! Such brilliant but evil minded beings!' *coughs.*
Might likely be another red flag for the changelings to see about that, though other species definitely could work on seeking him out. Especially at the Gala, it is THE biggest party the Castle throws. He'd be in attendance with the Royalty, Luna who could be used to get to him.
As already pointed out, the interactions are well written, and flow naturally. Yet another great chapter.
I feel really sorry for, and annoyed at Thomas for being made to/letting himself be transformed even though it's clearly very uncomfortable for him. Comes back to the issue of communication, and Luna not reading him very well I guess. The incessant teasing didn't help, and the combination of none of them noticing or caring how much he dislikes it and him not speaking up can have some consequences in the long run.
Sure as heck made me wrinkle my nose when I was reading it at least.
Well Aspergers is notorious for making people who have it differcult to communicate with.
Don't like this, don't like it one bit.
Is it odd that one of the larger questions I had from this chapter is will he enter the correct restroom? I sense an awkward moment coming up. Not that they have been few in number.
I am usually greatly turned off by gender change in stories, but I might be ok here since it's only an illusion.
I'm sorry to say that as soon as they were stopped at the restaurant and Luna and Talon had those evil grins, I stopped reading. Not a fan of gender transformation, even if it is an illusion. Let me know when Thomas is of the male gender again.
6732771 Yeah. I know. Like I said, this stuff should end after this night.
6732876 Don't worry. Should get better next time.
6732880 I sympathize fully.
You would think that a society that was mostly female would have a stallions night instead. But then we wouldn't have Thomas under a female illusion.
Not a whole lot to say about the chapter. But, I don't know if you caught this or if you really care about it or not but I took a screenshot with my phone... .
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Yep, that's the front page feature box. It was only there for a little while, but, no telling how many people saw it in that time. So, if you got a bit of an influx of readers, well, know you know why.
6733700 I already wrote that on the front page.
well he blocked my other account, so I'll just use one of my 20 ULTs to comment from now on.
also- genderbenders
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This chapter had me LOTF, with Tohmas becomeing a girl you can call Tammy ,and it was a awesome read .whale I guess the cat is out of the bag and Tokmas finlly knows abot Talon is timporarily in the herd now ,And Moonlight going to hav to finlly realize sohe loves him .8
6733700 illusions are really not that hard to alter even if they are not your own.
6732880 Given his (distraught?) state of mind, I wouldn't think that he'd likely have his mental faculties focused on entering the correct bathroom given his illusion, especially since as a human who had gone the majority of his life without experiencing such a thing. Plus he must be feeling very confused and perhaps insecure, that his gender (even if an illusion) has been altered. It may cause him to question his identity and value as a human and a man. Especially given how he's so easily descends into self-doubt and a downward spiral of negativity.
...... gender bender fun...
with princess luna..
TYPIST GRAY YOU'RE MY NEW HERO
Hah ! Miscommunication ! Scourge of love !
I hope it will be resolved quickly.
We want Moonlight ! Stop going bucking kudere and go for it ! You stupid sexy orange boobed mare !
6741094 Just wait.
6741226 I've waited long enough now !
We all did !!
Since we now know that Luna can change Thomas' gender (or at least make it appear so), will they change him to a female human so they could see what one looks like?
im just gonna take a stab before I move on to the next chapter, but im gonna hazard a guess that while our dear boy is wrapped up in his thoughts hes going to walk into the guys rooms xD
7804309 Close, but no cigar.
Now that one sticks in the memory.
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Daw, poor Swift is left out!
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(Eh, close enough.)
Ummm, in Equestria? How bout paddleboat, extra meaning, especially for Tali's warped mind.
Can't wait to see his reaction to Luna asking him to wear a thong.
And then, the next morning, Thomas discovers he's pregnant. With twins.
This sounds somewhat less than sincere.
Bet the bartenders figured it out already, and are smart enough not to piss off a Princess.
El Goonish Shive called, they'd like their plotline back.
And now we get into some real pronoun confusion.
Next chapter needs to have some stallion start hitting on Thomas. Here's to hoping, eh?
All I'm going to say is; Worst. Date. Ever.
I pleadddd for a clop scene with him in this form
I feel like alot of the people who made comments about the genderswap kinda ignored this part of the text and alot of it aswell, and merely focused on the beginning and skipped the rest. This shows that luna can comfort him normally into the position, therefore allowing future scenes using this figure. I would really love to see it in the future very soon, because his female form is pretty hot+adorable.
I wonder if he knows, he will have to use the little fillys room ?
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Sorry for the late reply. I guess I just missed this one. However, now that I remember, I'll let the idea bubble and see what happens.
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That would be an awkward choice.