Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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Hmmm, I think this was a missed opportunity. Having Talon teach sixty-nine to a couple of mares sound super hot and could have been a nice extra 1k words of porn. I really like seeing the teaching parts and imagining Talon teaching awkward human positions makes me think it be super kinky.
Aside from that good chapter as usual. Creeplestia needs to stop showing her hand, if your going incognito, don't reveal yourself the first time someone name drops you. Seriously she should have just told him she is a trusted confidant of all the princesses and that he was welcome to speak to Celestia personally. Then when he goes to speak in front of her day court she could hammer his balls to the wall for trying to use her to win a petty squabble. Make all of Canterlot think twice before trying to name drop her ever again.
troll Tia is best Tia.
on another note, why you have some charters (Talon for instance) say Thomas's world then have some other charter (like Moonlight) say Thomas's country in few of the earlier chapters. Shouldn't all but Tia and Luna not know he is from another world let alone another dimension? is there something I missed?
Not, it wasn´t. In fact, it was so painfully obvious than Thomas himself should have seen throught it the moment he laid eyes on "Bright Sun".
I thought trenchcoat was Lyra, but then Im probably just getting my Bon Bon stories confused.
The best one is always, Theyre right behind me aint they.
While the mistress is away, the good emplyees train like crazy, to satisfy her on her return?
Okay, I liked this chapter. It seems Talon is making Silver go through the same ritual of preening as Thomas did, but Silver seems to be far more bold given that she and Misty tried out a human technique (wont lie, I agree with Kamunari and admit that watching the incredulous reactions of Silver and Misty when Talon first describe the technique only to get pleasures silly until the end would have been a hot scene). Thomas and Moonlight were also adorable especially how they comforted each other in the lizard room/insectarium, their talk about literature from Gulliver's Travels, Moonlight's weirdly creeped out by horses, and then those two messing with Latte (man, that guy was a tool). I liked how Celestia put Latte in his place and it's nice that she exchanges mail with her former concubine (Moonlight's dad) as I thought that he left on bad terms. Anyway, I loved this chapter.
Hmmm.. A equestrian expedition to capture lonly nerdy humans from the wilds of earth. Too give them nice homes in equestrian......
tWaves hand take me take me...
7362472 Agreed.
Glorious chapter, I purse my lips and wait for more!
I lost, I thought Cadance was the stalking princess.
We shall trade our sex knowledge for.....I got nothing.
Oh shit this is war....a sexy one *Drama intensifies*
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Hmmm... well we are already a consumer of their merchandise. We could trade our hentai for their magic resourses like gems and mythological animals. But imagine mail order dating scene, and bunch of lonely horns men all sitting around waiting for love. Then a bunch of lonely horns mares flood the dating pool... I think the market alone would finance the interdimensional travel fees
7363974 world peace achieved XD
I love how there is a constant build up to ponies wanting to go to the human lands and thomas will likely be faced with two options. one confess he's from another universe. two, lie and say something like humans are a violent race that hate any form of change and if equestrians tried to make contact they'd be attacked by their military. actually the second one isn't that far off but i doubt they'd consider humans a threat going off of thomas as point of reference.
either way i look forward to that moment.
Awesome chapter! Jeez! What do these ponies want with Thomas exactly? What was that douche Latte's deal? I hope to find out soon.
P.S. Are you ever gonna write a chapter where Thomas and Twilight communicate via "Dragon Mail?" The chapters with Thomas interacting with Moonlight, Talon, and Silver are good, but it's starting to get repetitive. I'd like to see Thomas interact with one of the Main Six, at least.
7362472 Perhaps, but I prefer a bit more space between my clop stories, especially with the one coming up soon.
I love it was so cute and funny. whale reading that part with TrollestiaI was thinking of thar video Now you fucked up from youtube .This just keeps getting better and better and Itottly called that it was Tia before she reviled hersalf.
7362481 Where did someone mention Thomas' world? I just checked and there didn't seem to be anything. Please give me the line so I can correct the typo.
7362691 Happy to serve, as always.
7363591 Magic and stuff. Obviously.
7364544 Seems the other universe confession would be safer. Fewer radicals wanting to take action against the prelude to an invasion that'll never come.
7365262 It is as he said. He thought Thomas was a zoo animal and was indignant about the challenge to his perceived authority.
Unknown. The whole reason I cut back on posts is because I got a second job. I'm not even going to get a single day to write this week, and who know what'll happen next. It's all very tiring.
7366207 i wonder just how far the idea of finding the human continent would go with the ponies, especially the nobility before thomas decides to tell them.
7366180 it's in older chapters. i don't mind looking for you but it would take a few days as i am a bit busy
7366440 Maybe I'll look later, as I am also tired.
7366312 It's an interesting idea. If nothing else, Thomas is an exotic and intriguing specimen, one other ponies in power might want to acquire if only for the sake of novelty.
I fully expect Discord to be the one too spill the beans on the truth of the human world.
7366778 and mix that with misty's comment about buying a herd and thomas might grow concerned on the specific point of "bringing back males no matter the cost" (should he ever hear that in another conversation). though i wonder if ponies are even familiar with the term of slavory? i mean yeah there was sombra but that was more a tyrannical rule not treating ponies as property. i bet that'd be interesting to talk about the darker points in human history to the group.
7366218 that's ok take ur time my friend
So I've had this story in my bookmarks for months and finally read the whole story in a day... I can't for the life of me figure out what took me so long!
(I couldn't help but notice that there are lots of little mistakes here and there. Mostly just missing or misspelled words, but there are some incomplete thoughts as well. Would you like me to go through and make note of/make a list?)
7380668 A day? A quarter million words in a day? I find that doubtful, but am willing to accept it on the grounds of appreciation.
I'm always in the market for editors to help improve my writing. I think I'm mostly good on typos, but I'll be the first to admit that this story was written with no real plan and is terribly clunky. If you can spot these incomplete ideas and offer suggestions for corrections, I'd be most grateful. If I like what I see, I'll credit you as an official editor.
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Let's just say I have a lot of spare time and really like reading
I'm probably going to work backwards because your writing style and direction has changed quite a bit. I Just finished tweaking Chapter 70 with Word's awesome "track changes" feature. Would you like me to pm you the link?
7381486 Note me, Google doc, or whichever you see fit.
7385812 dont you update every monday?
7386747 He had to alter his schedule due to getting a second job. (among other things.)
7387032 oh. any idea when the story will update next?
7387053 He said he would try to keep it at every other monday but couldn't promise anything.
7387063 k
7387072 Yeah. Every other Monday is the hope.
7391743 ok
7391743 As long as this doesn't end up as one of those "Forever unfinished fics" take all the time you need.
It's been awhile for me. I remembered Silver Belle but who's Misty Breeze?
7660751 One of Celestia's other concubines and Talon's friend.
Snerk...love it, gonna be a lotta happy Hermans soon!! (Damn My names not Herman)
Mine is! ↓
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Adventure Time Reference confirmed
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7904170 Clever.
A loooot of grammar fixes on this one.
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No capital she
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Yep, needs a comma
And another one
Ditto
Nope! Because I'm betting Talon's making it all up.
Comma after offered
But the snakes look so cool!
Hey, a missing period this time!
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Comma after 'right' and 'head'.
Comma after 'pardon' and 'emphasized'.
No capital
Really, Tia? This is the best alias you can come up with? Fire yourself.
Comma, no capital. Also, no, it's an utterly shite disguise. Detective Hard Boiled of the Detrot Police is ashamed of you.
Burst her delusional worldview!
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No it doesn't.
Of course not - that's what Ministry Mare Rarity does.
I'm going to stop you right here - you do not leer suspiciously. You glare suspiciously.
"I don't know, go punch a few of them and find out."
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I think I mentioned the capitalization of pegasus about ... 30? chapters back?
I don't think that would have ended well.
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Yeah, I'm sure you'd love a site rip of derpiboru.
8120530 Damn. Just... thanks.
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Just make him a proof reader already.
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Pretty sure the offer was made.