Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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IDK, Celestia is a big voyeur. That's kinda common thinking, so her living a married life vicariously through her servants seems par for the course. But Voyeurism is a thing because we covet what we cant have. Celestia can't have a simple married life with all the trappings like kids and whatnot. But what of Luna? Her actions and intentions are still rather mysterious, from cannon we can assume she wants to be loved. We know she treasures Thomas but to what end, is she covetous of exclusivity? Is this perhaps a test of his dedication to her? As a near slave he has no opertunity to be tested for such things, maybe this is a test to see if he will stay faithful. Or maybe Celestia fears that if stays faithful and Luna seeks him as a mate that his passing will cause her pain and suffering only Celestia could know.
6173652 Wow. I'd been thinking along those lines, but not quite so eloquently. I've been debating with myself how quickly I should reveal the true nature of their relationship, and reading what you said makes me want to draw things out a bit more. Unfortunately, stuff is already written so now I have to doctor it, which is a lot harder than starting from scratch.
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Yes I understand, changing what you've written is hard. You want to like what you've done but going back over it makes you second guess your self. I kind of thought my words were projection of where the story was going, but most of the characters are probably ignorant of these things so you can probably save it for later
6173738 I made some last minute changes so that Talon is the only one of these three who knows. The chapters I've written seem fine as they are. I just need to write a bit of filler to space them out.
Wow, I really like the interactions between Moonlight, Talon, and Thomas. Their reactions when Thomas narrates the cushion incident were hilarious.
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Cool I'm glad I could help, I really like these three. There dynamic plays off each other well. I kinda thought his guard was a bit too informal, but that just gives her a rookie vibe.
6173754 Happy you enjoyed it.
6173760 It's actually funny how things work out. Her getting such a prestigious assignment despite being a rookie actually ties in to some later stuff.
There Is a question that remains unaswered
If Ponies are ok with sex outside the herd if it is for profesional reasons (job, work, etc.).
What if a stallion or a mare have casual or regular sex with some else outside the relationships? Will they be ok with that too?
I am talking about sex with some random strange, a friend, or a job companion.
6173962 Good question. I just made an edit to the beginning of the chapter to explain that.
6175599 Appreciated
6175740 Nice, Thank You
6179123 Maybe.
6192515 That's the theme I've been going for.
6192592 Cool.
6194878 I'm happy you enjoy this so much.
That was a awesome read .You can't say he doesent have stamina .I can't wait to see whats nex.
6195155 Damn. You've just been powering through these.
6196123 it was just that good.
6196126 Cool. I try to post every Monday.
I like these three together. However, I am a little curious if their relationship will develop into something more.
All three of them need to remember that there is some major culture clash going on for Thomas and the things he says. Talon seems to get that a bit more than Midnight but even she failed to take that into account on his "you can go to the club" statement.
You first dip into his first person thoughts are not in italics, might want to fix that.
Also, two hours? Thomas earned his position with that little stunt.
Ha
I think more communication in the realm of cultural differences is in order.
That has to be the most truest, scary thing, for any species.
Ride em cow
girlponyalicorn, yeehaw7895805 I know. It's one of those things where there's no substantial proof that it exists, but everyone is pretty sure it exists anyway.
Love the prance story lol
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Been so long since I posted this, I had to reread to remember. Thanks, though.
That moment Moonlight and Talon decided to be passive-aggressive bitches would have been the moment I just left back to the castle. You don't want to be honest with me and play stupid manipulative mind games with me? I don't want to deal with you until you decide to apologize to me. Misunderstandings that destroy all kinds of relationships are caused by that kind of nonsense.
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This is why I eventually got an editor.
I like this story a lot. But there is another one I am reading with a male named Talon and so I keep having to remind myself this Talon is female
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Glad to hear, and hopefully that'll get easier as both stories go on.
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What story if I may ask?