Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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Not sure if should be frightened or excited by this development.... Totally cant wait to see what happens next!!! Eeeee!!!!!
6346169 I too am not sure... I myself do loveth when two females link in eternal bliss....
OH!!! And just so you know the Clop in this chapter was good... Atleast I thought it was... I could even picture it quite well in my minds eye.... Very sexy stuff here! Hope to see more of it in the future giggity... lol
I kinda wonder what Moonlight was thinking about all of this while it was happening... She is just standing there most of the time guarding them I bet she is totally Jelly; she knows whats going on behind them doors and illusions..... allright!
Really like this early surprise and I'd love to see that hypothetical scene about Celestia and Luna arguing like that.
6367714 I'm pretty sure he was referring to gay stuff between Thomas and Blueblood. Not too many fans of that sort of thing.
6367726 I'm sorry to say, but that giggity was not earned. However, I hadn't really considered that when writing this. Gonna have to correct that next chapter.
6367768 Happy to hear. Something like that has been written, but I imagine it's very different from what you imagined. Might have to add another one.
Eigh, a bit too many metaphors for my liking, also "only saliva lubricant anal" is something that totally breaks my enjoyment of a sex scene. The only thing worse is no lubricant, at least when both are played straight, that is to say not being troublesome.
Saliva evaporates quickly and if even if it didn't the anal walls would absorb it, same with water.
I'm a bit harder on this bit of a sex scene when it comes to any sort of story that has magic, especially if the participants are stated to do it often; not too much trouble to cast a lubrication spell first.
You shouldn't feel pressured to add anything into the story that does not serve the story itself in some way.
That having been said listening to what your readers want to see is a good thing. It is a careful balance that must be stuck.
6367870 That sounds interesting. Hope to see that scene someday. BTW, what do you mean by having to add another one?
Hmmmm, if they did get a mirror how would they react if Celestia enchanted it to 'watch' their bedroom romps? Maybe curiosity on how her sister's coltfriend is performing.
6367868 Im glad could help even if I did not giggity properly...
6367932 So much yes
6367905 You'll forgive that I don't know all the ins and outs of anal sex. Thankfully this can be easily rectified.
Meh. I think it's gonna work out pretty well.
6367918 Another argument between the two sisters. One is already written, but it's a bit too one sided.
6367932 Luna would most likely be able to detect such a spell.
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Research, and reading about people with real world experience talking about it. This point of fact gets mentioned often in male/male fics so it is something that sticks out to me when it shows up in any sort of paring.
I see what you did there... .
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She would most certainly find it, the real question is if she would care rhat it was there or not.
6368212 To quote Talon, that wasn't intentional, but I make no apologies.
I don't think Princest is in the cards.
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Accidental puns are best puns.
While I am a fan of incest that is not quite what I was going for with the comment. Luna might just not care that Celestia is looking in on her, even if it is during a sexual act.
In fact Luna is coming off as something of an exhibitionist to me so she might even enjoy being watched.
I could just see it now, Celestia sets it up as a kind of "movie" for her and her consorts to watch and next time Talon meets up with Thomas she makes and offhand comment about something he did during his and Luna's sexy-fun-times and he's totally horrified about it.
6368377 You're a hypocrite. First you say I shouldn't let other people dictate what should happen in the story, then you go and say something that sounds really good that I now want to add. I hope you're properly ashamed of what you've done.
6368421 Appreciated
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Nope! No shame at all! And I never claimed to not be a hypocrite.
But, what I said before covers things that readers want that don't serve the story in some manner, which only you as the author can really judge.
Love this chapter! I need more soon!
6368613 I'm already increasing the rate of posting.
6369591 Happy you're enjoying it
6368060 ah but detecting it and doing something about it are two different things
That was awesome.
Don't let the peer pressure get to your nerves now, my friend. Your story is yours after all and we only wish to give you all the support you need. Good chapter, though.
6370417 So you don't want Thomas to end up with Moonlight? Fine. I'll do that then.
Oh my goooods !! Luna got the stand "The Death" who can enter dreams of others !!... Huh ? What ? She can basically do that on her own ? Oh... Sorry then, forget what I said... o_o
You say you're better at sexe scenes and that's true. BUT ! But I find that the building of the orgasm was not as good as ever... Maybe that was intended to increase the urge of doing that in a restaurant but... You have writen better "finish him" moves ! But I'm always happy to read you and eager to have the next chapter.
Sooo... You will do some things that your readers claims for ? Hu hu hu hu huu...!
We want clop with Moonlight, no matter who she is or isn't ! We want soapy romance ! We also want slopy romance !
And with that I'll take french-fries with a double milkshake ! (By the way, why are you calling that french-fries ? The Belgium guys are builing rancor for that ! Jean-Claude Vandam is comming for you !!! Beware ! )
Well, more seriously, I think that you'll master the plot (free pun) no matter what you decide to do.
Keep being (Joestar) fabulous !
6370942 Neat.
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That's not what I am saying. If you want to write stories with what readers want, then that is totally up to you.
6371708 I think I mentioned earlier that his feet are enchanted to be more durable because nopony makes shoes for feet like his.
6371760 Dude. Calm thine horse titties. You're taking this way too seriously.
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I'm calm... I always am. ;)
And what can I say? I always take things seriously. I'm tired of being always gullible when people like to pretend to be serious and make me look like a fool. I'm sure you had your share of that lately in life.
Isn't this idiot a brony? First, there Pinkameana Diane Pie, and second, there's Princess Mi Amore Cadenza. Balloons for one, Crystal Heart for the other.
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Please...tell I wasn't the only one to think about that...
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Roasted Grapes with Yogurt Cream
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7349528 Pinkie's name is an acronym of various traits, that's why she is so...special!
P is for passion, your fire!
I is for inspire, others seek your guidance.
N is for neatness, your orderly way.
K is for keepsake, you treasure your memories.
A is for accord, the harmony you spread.
M is for mirth, your laughter.
E is for excite, your spirit is catching!
N is for nice, need I say more?
A is for admirable, you certainly are!
7896147 Again, thanks
This would be one big conversation of Noodle Incidents. I like it.
Your ill tidings are stripped naked? That's ... oddly fitting for the story, actually.
So I wonder how long it will take until our human accidentally knock her up somehow.
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Eight years later and it hasn't happened yet, so a while.