Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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I love your portrayal of Twilight Sparkle, especially her interaction with Talon. Likewise, it's interesting to see that Thomas' knowledge of the future isn't as accurate as expected, though I think he's going to blame himself for not stopping Snips and Snails due to wanting to keep the continuity intact. Anyway, excellent chapter as always.
I suppose he could just cheat and give Twilight the solution.
6616818 Always happy to induce squeals.
6616856 Happy to hear.
6616872 Certainly one possibility.
I hope Thomas can manage some damage control, not only with the Ursa but with Trixie's outcome. Obnoxious as she is, Lulamoon doesn't deserve having her reputation and lifehood destroyed.
6616904 You'll just have to wait and see.
Its almost af if those three episodes were occuring backewards in sequence? Or just out of sequence? then again, the show isnt exactly known for showing episodes in a coherent manner.
At least Twiligh hasnt started getting intrested in the what and why of Concubines and asked Pinkie if she would help her.
I mean, who between Pinkie and Spike, has the longer tongue.
soooooo gooooooodddddddddd!!!!!!!!!!!!
Actually, some Bronies already noticed cues in season 1 that some were run out of order and the stacking never corrected, one example being Fluttershy using "Hop, skip, and a jump" to clear a short gap BEFORE the Dragonshy Ep where it was taught to her. Some brony did a full map of the errors on Canterlot.com as a suggested "corrected season 1 timeline" but bucked if I have the specific link atm...
6616917 This will be a matter of contention later.
I'm pretty sure Twilight already knows a lot more than most. Even if she doesn't know everything, she probably knows enough to think she does and won't press on those matters. However, she's still very interested in how Thomas might compare to other stallions, but purely for scientific purposes.
6616973 Still, having just realized this, it means events could happen in any order and there's really no way to properly prepare.
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Its amazing just what scientists get up to behind closed doors.
That was a awesome first meeting with Twilight ,And getting to learn more about her and Talon it was a awesome all around read.
6617347 Appreciated.
Loved the line about Spike "already having" a "smartycorn", I was curious as to how that would play out around Twi and it was funny and satisfying.
I always did like "purplesmart" for Twilight anyways.
Oh poor Thomas, you should maybe have realized you were in an alternate universe from the show so your timeline might not match. Well, he knows now, just a matter of working with it.
Also, this is your "real life" now, you can't trust a TV-Y rating to make sure everyone stays safe. Heck, just the fact they are all anthos without clothing and obvious "bits" makes it TV-MA: S off that bat, pretty sure the V is going to be added as well.
Welp, you live through this you learn from it and be better next time.
Talon and Twi make a cute couple, how long until they bang? <*Insert Cloudkicker meme image here*>
I'm with hs0003 on this one. He should tell Twilight what to do to stop the Ursa, and maybe give Trixie a little talk while he's at it. Then when all the girls get suspicious about how he knew how to stop Ursas, Doctor Whooves (or Pinkie) can pop out of nowhere and say, "Spoilers!"
This could be really good, or really bad... Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
"average height, skinny figure, moderately sized breasts, and a surprisingly round backside."
sounds like my kind of Twinkels
....the last few hours of waiting for Fallout 4 is killer
6617694 Hell of a time to figure it out though.
Happy to please.
6617979 In the words of Marge Simpson, we're just gonna have to wait and see.
6617995 This is the episode where a space bear attacks. That's almost never a good thing.
6618148 Keep in mind that when he says average, he means by pony standards, which is significantly taller than humans.
6618201 Yes, but changes have been made. Are they good changes, or bad changes? I guess we'll find out.
Oh DAMN!!!
Here comes the Ursa!
nice going thomas now twilight don't know about ursa bear stuff. can thomas tell twilight, moonlight and talon the turst about he know and help twilight beat the ursa bear?
6619593 You really think the ursa's gonna give them the time for that?
Yesssss, yesssss !
I wanna mooooore akwardnesssss !
that's a neat twist
6620893 Cool.
So. The events as Thomas knows them are not happening in the order that he knows them, but may not happen as he knows them. If he survives this, he is going to need to have a talk about this to the princesses.
6618208 like i said my kind girl
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And also, his mere presence interferes with the established timeline he knew from the show.
6627451 Isn't that normally the case with humans showing up before or during the beginning of the series?
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Not necessarily, so long as they are aware of events and don't interfere with it. Sure, the presence of another intelligent creature is already universe-breaking, but other events can still play out as normal so long as the timeline isn't changed.
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Seeing Thomas choosing whether to help or not, which might result in changing how the future episodes of MLP will play out, remind me of this quote of a recent episode of Doctor Who:
It seems that Thomas might have to slightly alter the MLP's original timeline and slightly changing the future of the MLP's original resulting in different outcomes farther down the line.
6628759 Hmm. That actually gives me some ideas.
6628807 That's never a good sign...
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Maybe Thomas might help find a way for a peaceful solution between the Changelings and ponies?
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In the grand scheme of time, Thomas's sudden appearance in this version of Equestria is already a tidal wave, but I believe that Twilight becoming a princess is a fixed point in time. Nothing can change it without ripping the fabric of the space-time continuum, though it can be bent.
The events leading up to her princesshood are ripples, but were she not to become a princess, that would cause a tidal wave.
6629210 See this is the point where the writer has to be very careful. When you start using time mechanics like fixed points, it can be very easy to screw up if not done just right.
Are you sure about that? Because I'm pretty sure he and Thomas had a nice bonding experience.
Yep, there it is, look at all that bonding!
Wait, what? But Twilight was listening to him talking to Thomas that whole time!
Trixie boasted, demonstrating a few tricks to earn get the audience excited,
Needs more words or delete 'earn'.
I was always partial to Starbutt.
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Suddenly, orgies?
The
crownrank insignia of Captain Obvious has been passed.Uh ... what exactly does a spanking cutie mark look like?
Comma
Smooth, Twi.
*breathe
*overrated. No space.
Comma
8119258 Glad to see you liked it. Also, that 'breath' one was especially embarrassing as I so frequently correct it with others.
OMFG. I know you already wrote the rest, but I really hope that this isn't a big deal. Seems like such a weird gimmick to add to a perfectly fine story.
Dude I love you right now.
And the ending... ooooooooh boy, this'll be fun!
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Wait. So was Spike with them and talking with Thomas, or was he upstairs and eavesdropping?
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The gimmick, as you say, mostly plays into Thomas' personal development. It's also part of the development of this world by emphasizing the difference in events. This means, as is emphasized next chapter, that not everything is automatically destined to work out with no lasting harm.