Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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I imagine Luna will immediately pick up on this power move and snub it out, because it's HER harem, and SHE decides who senior concubine is.
This will in turn lead to confronting Sun Dancer, who has no right to attempt to interfere in the operations of Luna's harem, and is something Celestia should address with Sun Dancer as well.
It could be interesting as an interlude to have Celestia dominating the dom of her harem as a reminder of such things.
Uh oh. That business near the end I think will probably turn out poorly.
8086579 So you think Thomas actually makes a better leader than Silver?
8086706 After he adjusts, yes, and I will concede that Silver would make a good TEMPORARY Senior Concubine until such time. But that's not my point. My point is that Sun Dancer has no right to influence a member of Luna's Harem in regards to leadership, especially when it's Luna who would be the one who decides it, and that neither Luna nor Celestia should tolerate it.
8086706 I think Thomas at least has the potential to be a pretty good leader if he can be instructed better, It feels like Silver's trying to overstep her bounds too much too soon, especially since she only just was accepted into the herd. That said, he does need to be more open to processing more applicants. An alicorn libido requires reinforcements.
I feel like Thomas should give up his position on his own. It feels like it's being ripped away from when he hardly had a chance to show he's capable really. He should see Luna progressively become unsatisfied with their romps and make a choice to step down because of her unhappiness. Sun Dancer differently has the experience when comes to the leadership role, and she is invaluable in that regard, but she should've talked to Thomas, not Silver. It looks underhanded even if the intention is pure.
The chapter and I loved it.
Silver as I understand it and become effective members of the Harem Luna.
But like the other author said. The thing that I liked a lot and behaved as if the sun dancer. But I understand that she is senior concubine harem Celestia should not have any say in the decisions of the Moon.
After all the wings horn-moon has made Thomas even senior concubine to have more with it than to work to satisfy his hunger back .. But Thomas understands that should learn a little better its role. we'll see what happens.
Luna should be picking up some very intresting dreams, such as the one where teh mare is lording it over everyone where Thomas is relagated as she requires, stuck to the back of a door of a closet, to be swung out for use as required, then closed away out of sight when done.
Maybe someone should give a real example of Power Play?
8086865 All fair points. I'll see about addressing them as the story goes along.
I think Thomas should start coming out of his shell. Especially once he notices that Luna may not be entirely happy with her current roster. Another option is to ACTUALLY have Silver and Thomas lead the harem as co-rulers, it sure seems to work for Celestia & Luna.
Bottom line is I DO NOT want Thomas to lose his position, you can never grow if there is no reason to test yourself.
8087130 Been listening to everyone's thoughts on the matter and getting a better idea of where I want to go with this plot.
I just remembered this:
Start at 8:20. You'll see why.
-Ru
8087215 honestly i see where Thomas makes a bad lead but Sun dancer still needs to remember he is literally alien to the planet instead of underhandedly telling silver to talk over , especially considering the 'Sexual revolution' was brought by Said human she is undermining
8087393 Thank you.
8087545 You're welcome!
-Ru
I think Luna will very upset about this because silver is attempting to undermine her decision not knowing the bigger picture
and think I Thomas will be good leader he starting open up and bring new ideas and technology and he started a sex revolution also silver risk losing respect and trust from everyone and risk getting kick out of the harem and the herd because of it.
Like others, I'd like it a lot more if Thomas just got taught how to lead instead of being kicked from the position.
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Whether Thomas wants out or not of top job, ultimately it's up to Luna to decide if a change is needed. It depends also on if Silver will choose the right applicants that Luna will agree with or not. The only plus I see, would be that maybe the populace at large, especially the nobles, would be calmed a little by a pony being in charge of the harem on the public relations side of things. Not that it's really their concern as they don't benefit by their choice but by Luna's choice, as a happy princess is a good princess.
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One final thing, a question on the silly side, So we might see things batmare ....(umm something, can't recall the word..on tip of my tongue....eh wuteva) crazy?
8088989 As always, thanks for the catch. To be honest, I hadn't expected the reaction that this got and its made me rethink some things.
8089047 If you get a lot of good comments with helpful suggestions, you're doing something right.
Great chapter, what an interesting situation we find Thomas in.
It seems a little bold (Read: foolish) of Silver to be trying something so underhand so soon. Even if it's meant with the best of intentions the fact is that she's been in the harem less than a few days an is already trying to undermine both Thomas and Moonlight. It just seems wrong. Coupled that with Sun Dancer meddling with Luna's harem, which I think is pretty dodgy of her, and we've got a great situation. Personally I'm hoping it all goes awry and both Silver and Sun Dancer get some serious reprimands.
Similar to what some people have said below, I think it would be devastating to Thomas on a personal level, to be removed from his position just as he's gaining confidence, not to mention having it done by someone he only recently opened up too and accepted into the harem. Ideally I think Tali should alert the Moonbutt and let things roll from there.
Oh well, just my thoughts.
8091249 Damn. It continues to impress me just how strongly people feel on this. I'd actually been planning this for a while now, leaving little hints here and there about Silver's disgruntlement. In hindsight, I suppose I dropped this element of her planning a little too early. Might have worked better later, after more concubines had joined up. But, things as they are, nothing to do but roll with it and hope the readers don't hate me for it.
Can Silver chill out a bit? She rolls in out of the blue and starts making power plays like she runs the damn place.
Really hope Thomas keeps his position. It feels like him losing that would largely invalidate all of that confidence building they did with him. A shared or mentored position with Silver might be advantageous tho. A little cultural contamination from Thomas introducing concepts of democracy or some such...
I REALLY do not like what they are doing, talking behind backs- and wanting to 'Demote' Thomas. Perhaps i'm seeing it the wrong way, but as i said- I'm not Hapy >:I
This was a was a great read but the part with Silver going for Tohmus plas in the harem tics me of a bit,and I hope he can fix this soon .Other then that it was all sweet /awesome.
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You and everyone else. Definitely a mistake on my part.
I'm going to gloss over all of the Harem political aspects of this chapter, and focus on the sword fighting. I believe that Thomas would be better suited to a spear or naginata as a weapon of choice due to his small stature. A spear like weapon would help offset his small size by affording him longer reach. This is just my opinion but maybe I'm biased towards spear since I mained Dragoon in Final Fantasy XIV.
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Don't apologize for this. Silver making a play for Thomas position is both reasonable and logical. You have certainly portrayed it well and both silver and Tali have make these observations chapters ago. Likewise it is reasonable for Sundancer to make the finale encouraging push for silver to do this, as she has the manipulative streak and certainty of her own rightness to believe it is necessary to interfere this way. In no way have you miss-represented any of the characters in this fashion. I look forward to seeing how you resolve this.
I wonder if this little "power play" will work to clear the air ???