Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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stayclassy
Midnight Chain is going to do something stupid and the only thing I can think of is, She will go to Blueblood and they will setup a nasty Surprise for Thomas. The Chaos that comes from that Surprise releases Discord ahead of time but doesn't do anything because nopony is around to see his Grand Release.
6484218 Will try.
6484272 Not likely. That kind of conflict isn't really my thing.
6484018 Sorry, was half asleep when I wrote that. Was too tired to go back and recheck the name of the pony. My point still stands. She's adorable.
As for character submissions, it's when people get to submit characters for use during another author's story.
And the ship left the port, never to return again!
Moonlight becomes the next member of Luna's harem or at least a 'second girlfriend' for Thomas. Or she ends up as 'Guardian with a crush'. Anyway, awesome chapter!
We wonder how moon and talon would react if he let slip he knew the future? Talon may want to have him use that knowledge to spin bets or make a situation better, Moon might be worried about others foalnapping him for their own agendas. Though we would think that most ponies would hate him because he's the senior concubine to Luna, except most likely Threstals who praise her night and would cater to him because the goddess favors him in a more 'religious' sub text. Hmmm, if that were so or near point. Wouldn't many Threstals show their interest in him?
This chapter was nice. I got to say that I didn't expected Midnight to react so badly. The tidbit with Discord's statue was interesting and I'm happy that Moonlight is developing feelings for Thomas and bonding over their love for books. Keep up the great job.
Intriguing shift again, having Moonlight being an amateur writer, something Thomas used to do as a hobby, and the two bonding over the mutual interest. Heck, with the bonding they're doing, I can easily see Luna connecting with Moonlight's softer side (and softer parts) as well.
Still lots to play with, regarding Thomas acclimating to herd practices. I look forward to when that end of things finally registers in his head.
And Discord...hmm... There is so very much that could happen with that, depending on how his personality functions. If he's more frivolous loon, but generally benign, he'll tend towards annoying miscreant with too much power. If he's darker, it could get very ugly, and leave Thomas scarred mentally. I imagine it depends greatly upon the desired feel overall, and desired feel at the end.
So, just when in the series are they at the moment? The last time I remember reading was 'Swarm of the Century'...I think.
Not really sure, but maybe you meant "so our schools make sure".
Never underestimate stupidity Miss Eye. Really, don't. You'll always have people that think they can get away with it, I mean shoot, Blueblood thought he could march into Luna's room and yank Thomas out and throw him in chains! You already know someone dumb enough to anger Luna, there will be others.
I want tactical sperm deployment to be a thing now. The word you actually want here is testicle.
Also, was not expecting Discord to be a hermaphrodite, because it actually makes too much sense for "him" to be not be only male, and, as the spirit once said himself "What fun is there in making sense?". You'd kinda expect a being of chaos to either not be any gender or all genders so he's only one gender, for the sole reason of messing with your head. What gender he is at the moment though, now, that is subject to change... .
Town.
The only two that don't already know.
I do like how Thomas just kinda shrugs off the homosexual sex and gives constructive criticism about it. He may not be into it himself but at least he's not overly disgusted by it.
Just what sort of story is Seven Stallions hum? Is it Seven Samurai ponyfied or something bit more risque?
Another good chapter, really looking forward to Moonlight telling Thomas how she really feels about him. Luna need to tell him the shame as well.
I also want Talon to get in on that action, maybe a lateral move from "Celestia's concubine" to "Luna's concubine". I think catbird likes sunbutt too much though. There have been hints that Celly and Lulu do some stuff together at times, maybe once Luna's harem gets some more members there will be a joint-harem-fun-times chapter, and as a buffer for the stallions that want to "get to know the human" Talon takes him for a ride. Also a good means of getting smartycorn laid by a stallion as well, after she's been with Thomas and Luna first that is.
So, what are we going to do next time Gray?
I love this chapter it was a awesome read .And Im happy Thomas and Moonlight are getting closer to each outher ,even finding that they have readingand wrightting in comin.to bad about the maid and how Midnight took it so hard,I hope they all find happyness in there new placement of inploy.And I hope that this Discord will be one of the good ones that at the end of the day ends up being a awesome guy and friand his jokes mite be anying some times but they are alot of they time LOTF funny.
I ship it, that is all.
6484306 What'd you have in mind?
6484415 Me thinks me shall have to include 'ship' in the title of a future chapter.
Thank you.
6484672 Could be, my friend. Could be.
6484773 Thank you, and I shall do my best.
6485089 Agreed, but you'll just have to wait and find out.
The chapters are already written. Give the first a couple weeks, though.
Not really feeling the darkness for this story. I'm usually pretty good at it, but it just doesn't feel appropriate here.
6485266 Will touch on that directly in a future chapter, but for now know that the Gala has not happened yet.
6485350 Thanks for the catches and kind words.
Because of this, I'll tell you the title of the next chapter. "The Magic of Preening"
6485542 The bondening approaches.
As for Discord, I also hope he turns out well.
6485599 Appreciated.
6485624 My OC, honestly. That's usually what character submissions are. If you're interested, the picture of her is my avatar. She's a guardspony in the lunar guard, uses twin katanas as a weapon rather than a spear and prefers Luna over Celestia (She has something of an issue with Celestia, but she doesn't let it interfere with her guard work). If it interests you, I could give you more details, but I'm not going to go into a full, in-depth analysis of my OC if she wouldn't appear.
i forget, how advanced is the tech the ponies have. like the show or more advanced?
6486625 I'll think about it, but I'm not really sure at this time.
6486835 Show.
6486982 Well that's all I can really expect of you. The fact that you're actually considering it is a lot better than a flat out 'no'.
The saddest thing about this story is, if it wasn't basically still porn and instead just comedy, it would be utterly hilarious. The whole nudist angle is pretty funny and some stuff, like Griffons using their crops as a wallet, is just inspired. But, under the bottom line, it's still just a vehicle for bad porn and that kind of ruins the rest of it. It's a bit of a waste.
6487477 That's a mildly dickish thing to say. I wouldn't call this a "vehicle for bad porn." The porn parts are usually funny and don't distract from the overall narrative. Frankly they could be completely left out and the story would still be fun. It's just a happy kind of inclusion like when you're watching an action movie and then boom, romance scene.
6488238
Maybe. That doesn't make it wrong, though. It doesn't help that I didn't even get that far in and the main character still already looks like the biggest pussy I've seen since... well, you probably don't want to know that. There's only so much of that that a story can take before you want to smack a character up the head more than you want to keep reading about them.
6488258
6487477 Sorry you don't approve, but that aspect ain't changing any time soon.
6488173 lol Everyone was freaking out over that and I find it hysterical. I guess I'm better at cliffhangers than I thought.
6488258 There ya go. Blame the guy who suffers depression for feeling down on himself. I'm certain this is just the sort of thing he can just magically get over.
D'aaaaaaaaaw !
Moonlight and Thomas' relationship as increased by 5 points out of 100 ! 8D
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That a interesting take on Discord's anatomy, I can see Discord having mismatch testicles and I can see him with both type of genitals, having both a vagina and a penis.
6488625
I wasn't blaming him, I was blaming you - for writing the main character in a way that makes him the least fun part of the story to read about. That's always a bad decision. Then again, so is getting tetchy when a reader points out this kind of stuff to you, so I'm frankly going to assume you don't even actually care.
6492925 Meh. If you hate the character because he has depression, then I guess that's your problem.
6493336
Imagine me rolling my eyes at you right now. I've met people with depression. I've had depression. As a general thing, it doesn't translate into "being a pushover with no spine whatsoever." It does, however, commonly mean having no libido whatsoever and being unable to keep to any regular activity schedule, pretty much exactly what this character isn't.
In other words, don't blame something like depression for your bad writing decisions. It's not only insulting to people with actual mental illness, it makes you sound like a conceited ass to boot.
man, i really, REALLY hope Thomas realizes he has some damn good friends...
6493336 I say you are doing fine drawing out the characters personality along with his depression, and while I'm sure you may have heard it, even his autism. Makes me feel like I can relate to the character in a lot of ways.
7143157 You can relate to a guy who gets sat on by amazonian anthropamorphic myths? That sounds interesting.
ch28
One word too many.
The sisters must be blind at what this trio has together or they would be pushing them closer subliminally to help Thomas. (The last paragraph makes me fell like I'm Thomas at the moment?)
*bared. If she bore her teeth, then either she's drilling them, or carrying them.
7144176
y does that book sound a lot like brokeback mountain?
7144176
Plans for discord? Bride of discord kinda route or something even better?
9779605
Unfamiliar with bride of Discord, but I'm planning my own thing. The focus will be kept on Thomas with only minimal Discord involvement. Mostly with our human dealing with the aftermath of Discord's world breaking.
I find that I would want to put a lamp shade on his head and a balloon filled with something unpleasant in his mouth. I think that he would appreciate it.