A Thief with a heart of a substance better left unsaid wakes up in Equestria after a unlucky turn of events. How will a jaded, world weary human get along with cheery, naive Ponies?
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If Kaid Gadai was voiced, what would he sound like?
Holy shit. Those kobolds had it coming. Great chapter dude. And freakin long to boot. What dare I ask brought you your inspiration for this?
i hope you fix the italics problem, but other than that its a damn good chapter
Great chapter. I got to say that I liked how Max interacted with Velvet and Celestia, especially when they talked about their relationships. Max interacting with Rarity and getting etiquette lessons was entertaining and it was good for him to be on good terms with RD. His chat with AJ was very interesting, but my favorite part had to be his interaction with Fluttershy. I liked how she and him have so different ideas on who was right and who was wrong, yet it lead to both of them becoming closer together. The clop scene was extremely hot and I wonder how Fluttershy's relationship with Max will change in the next chapters. Lastly, watching Maximus and Lupa kicking murderous Kobolds' asses was very cathartic.
I would have introduced the entire village how creative humanity can be with inflicting pain... the men and women watch, as the children are put through the horrors first. Then the women. Finally, the men. One of each will be sold to the Diamond Dogs. The rest will each be given their own desperate tortures. I would not leave until they had all died. And the most horrific rapist? He'll suffer as William Wallace did, as he had inflicted upon the mare, even if I had to put some other kobolds to gunpoint.
There are few things I can't tolerate, considering my Neutral Evil alignment, but rape is the biggest offense.
The torture was cool. They totally deserved it Great chapter fam. Keep up the good work
7889442 However you want to think of it is fine. I often think of him as somewhere between tenor and baritone, a little off setting for his stature but not drastically so.
7889512 The chapter's length was inspired by not wanting to start another one. Continuing a chapter is easier for me than starting another one, and when my thoughts keep me up at night, I think about ways I can make the story better for my readers.
Other than that, I just have a handful of overarching ideas that I want to build towards. The only inspiration I get is the motivation to keep going, and I've had it more often lately.
7891108 Pinkie Pie is a creature unbound from the laws of physics, as I will explain in coming chapters. If overhearing things is your beef then I apologize, but that's how shit happened. Fluttershy often goes unnoticed because she lacks presence, which is why Applejack didn't see her upon joining the conversation, and Pinkie just didn't mention it because no one asked. I wasn't trying to hand wave the issue, I just thought Pinkie using her freaky powers to bring up a problem would be a fine way to do so at the time. I don't think so now, though I do enjoy toying with the possibility of Pinkie being pseudo omnicient.
Celestia, as the ruler and icon of Equestria, couldn't indite Applejack because of her status as one of the Element Bearer's unless she wanted to undermine Symbols themselves. Celestia is a kind and loving ruler on the face of things, but she's been doing dark, unlawful shit for thousands of years to preserve the peace and her own image. If the Element of Honesty was jailed for attempted murder, it would mean that the Elements are flawed. If they're flawed, then maybe they're not as powerful as they've been hyped up to be. In my early chapters, I wasn't good at keeping shit straight, so again I apologize. I should have gotten that point in there somewhere, but it never left my mind and found its way into the story, and I don't want to shoe horn it in now.
TL;DR Pinkie is terrifying, Fluttershy lacks presence, Celestia is corrupt.
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What do you mean Celestia is corrupt? She seems fine to me.
7892115 Amiamera was right. In most places, Applejack would have been jailed, but Celestia did nothing, and Max got away scot free after killing fleeing combatants in Gryphonia. No just ruler would let that slide, no matter the authority they were operating under.
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While I understand that Applejack not being incarcerated is questionable, those "combatants" in Gryphonia were asking for trouble and were about to mug and kill Max, who acted in self-defense. Of course no one was there to witness the latter.
Celestia may not put AJ in jail due to her being connected to the Elements, it doesn't mean she is corrupt. If she is, then the nobility of Canterlot is no better.
Better her and Luna ruling the nation than them.
I googled floods eagle, BLOOD FOR ODIN!!! UNLEASH OUR BERSERKER FURY UPON HIS ENEMIES!!!
RAHHHHH!!!
Excuse me, I just don't know where that came from!
I hate necrophilia
Those kobolds will be exterminated like they deserve!
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7934718 dirty kobolds stealing our jobs. Put them in camps and get the gas
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It's also known as Angle Wings, but you need to deflate the lungs and break several ribs, arranging them without completely removing them in an artistic fashion to resemble primaries, to do it properly.
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What if it's a sexy zombie lady like Rottytops or Squiggley?
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They are capable to give a consent, so they doesn't count.
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*screams of terror*
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Still necro, just not rape.
Wait, do they know about the warbling blade?
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Do what?
i get that maybe you were trying to avoid a Mary Sue protag, but this dude is just an asshole lmao.
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But to your nay, I say yeet for my brethren.
Damn i know it's unintentional but that went kobold (goblin) slayer real fuckin quick
Todavía no me queda claro en qué punto de la cronología se encuentra
I really enjoyed the Applejack part, felt a liiiiiiil' rushed due to all the ponies telling him to go meet her in such a short span of time. The part itself is solid however. The Fluttershy one was a bit... weiiiiirddd.
But hey!
EsTrUS
Also, amazed that Celestia has no locks on her windows, or barrier spells. BITCH PROBS WANNA DIE
#NeverChangeLuna
The only good Kobold is a dead Kobold. NOW LET'S MAKE THESE KOBOLDS GOOD!!
My worries proved well warranted when the Manticore turned our way.
That is not a manticore that is a chimera manticores have scorpion stingers chimeras have a snake as its tail
Gotta ask where did this name cane from tho
So apparently it came from an erotic French painting from the nineteenth century, which depicts two women a dude ready to go for it
(Who knew there's an erotic museum in varsovia, this is so going to bucket list)
Would she? I guess he doesn't know Rarity as much as he thinks he is.
no not a kobold I've been playing D&D kobold for years and now he has to kill one it makes me feel sad
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Kobold's versus Goblins: War for Most Despicable mob
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when I'm playing D&D with my kobold it has to be a bard and has a tendency to flirt with all different types of gender and species and she is absolutely stunning for her I actually have plenty of Art that was made for her and top it off some kobolds are very cute It's just sad that some people just think they're worthless what I think kobolds are the Underdogs the species that you never expect to play as but you have to admit it is fun to play sadly it does have a -2 strength and +2 dexterity to play as this character also if you ever think about it if you ever do DND someday in your life play as a kobold I will tell you that you will enjoy it also pack tactics is it God said
ALRIGHT CHANGLING WHAT DID U DO WITH THE REAL RARITY. SHE NEVER GOES ANYWHERE WITH LESS THAN 7 TRAVEL CASES WORTH OF STUFF
he says to a PEGASUS, ‘ight, you funny fucker, XD
long and short of it,
Hearth’s Warming Eve = Christmas,
Hearts and Hooves day, = Valentines Day,
Nightmare Night, = Halloween,
and yes, such foul creatures needs to be purged in holy fire, and removed from the face of Equus,
Very good chapter
By far my favorite