A Thief with a heart of a substance better left unsaid wakes up in Equestria after a unlucky turn of events. How will a jaded, world weary human get along with cheery, naive Ponies?
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51 thousand words?! Don't you think that's a little excessive? Here I thought Backround Pony's 43k chapter was long. Seriously this and chapter 25 could count as their own stories
You know I don't quite see how Max doesn't see what's going on I mean he did implant nightmare moon's soul into Noir and however he tried to change it just didn't work and nightmare moon is probably the one behind this.
Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes new chapter
So the Phoney War is over, now the real conflic begins?
Max really shouldnt have eaten that Turkish Delight. I mean, Frys extra special ingredient?
And it was stated as well. He did something only Discord would do, and immediately swept the thought away as minor. Thats the point about exponential increases. That first crack means the things failed, patching it only spreads the stress around more weaker areas which all can break when stressed again, leaving a gaping hole instead of a increased crack or total fail.
Oh well. Until now Id have to say teh story was more like Carry On. but from now? Its more like Pre Fallout or something.
So, going for the whole Stephen Baxter existance is ending so why are you still alive stick, or the Arthur C Clarke where things never make any sense but theres at least a way out due to laws of reality or something?
Theres a trick to handle the end. Max has it, but Discord doesnt.
Oh look, Elements are disabled early. How nice.
just keep piling on Dashs fear of losing by demonstrating shes a failiure and youll never have to worry about her being in a fit state to weild her Element ever again.
:Discord:Just how many worlds do I have to destroy before the Heavens let me back in again?:Discord:
Legacy has a chapter thats 95k words long and Im sure Ive read one over 120k words long somewhere?
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Man, I just write the story. I didn't mean for it to come out as long as it did, but I wanted to cover the holiday in one fell swoop and I did that.
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Chapter long as fuck. I probably should have split it into two, and the next two chapters are a little on the long side too for being a part of a mini-arc
Damn you! I want to know what happens next! I can deal with cliffhangers, but this one.... this one I can't do that.
Save the cheerleader, eat my ass
This is the best early Christmas gift ever
fucking nmm.
This new dilemma has Nightmare Moon's stink all over it. Noir would never strike at Max like this.
How could she do that to him even if it was Nightmare Moon I don't think she should ever come back he should get Nightmare Moon put her somewhere or kill her and Noir should never come back.
I love loong chapters. There is nothing better than that. Especially with stories like this one. If I could, I'd gave you more likes, but the system doesn't let me do that. Keep up the great work!
Helper: Hello, sir, my name is Rajesh and you have callled to have a problem read, what can I help with?
Customer: Yeh, it's this story here, tell me what you think.
*Document Sent*
Helper: Ah, yes a fine piece of art if I do say so myself.
Customer: Any improvements? Any critical thinking?
Helper: No
Customer: Well that isn't that useful....
Helper: Wait, sir, wait! Um... I didn't expect the end!
Customer: The argument between Max and Noir?
Helper: Yes, that!
Customer: Well was it bad? Could it be improved?
Helper: No.... But if you have a problem with one our actual products I'm more able to help with that.
Customer: Yeh, whatever, cya Raj.
Helper: Oh, goodbye.
Conversation Ended
But seriously, another good chapter. I don't know why people complain about long chapter, do they know you can bookmark? If they're commenting they clearly have an account as well.... Anyway seems pretty great although I was actually quite surprised when Max decided to mind r*pe Noir.... Seems like that goes against every single moral he has, personally I would've just taken her horn and stuck her on the moon but hey I'm sure he has his reasons (Maybe Discord is corrupting him? Maybe Nightmare is corrupting Noir? You'd think she'd be a bit more careful what she does to a god but hey....) So yeh, interested to see where this goes keep it up ;)
P.S I found when writing this bloody manuscript that if you hit ctrl + space on my browser it sends you to the homepage so FiMFiction the real MVP for saving my comment....
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If I could like your comment or pin it to a thing of some sort, I would do it. I wonder what Rajeesh thought now.
Max considers the act of mind-raping someone to be utterly evil, absolutely despicable, but that was the depth of Noir's betrayal. She, who had been a loving matron, cuddle-buddy, battle-sister (mindscape and reality), mentor, and much more (I'm not lazy), fucked him hard and deep for doing something partially done in the sake of impressing her. If Max had a chance to ask one thing of his closet confidants, it would be that they never betray him. Noir fucked up bad, thus she got fucked up in the worst way Max could think of barring tearing her apart physically. Y'know. Small mercies, and all that.
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Huh, yeh I think I get it now actually. Didn't really consider the sheer amount of time together they had and love Max had for her... It would sure as hell hurt to be betrayed after that. In hindsight, probably would now have done what Max did. :P (I've been a pacifist all my life thus far so maybe the idea appeals to my 'darker side'.)
P.S Glad you liked the comment I'd realised I would have some trouble conveying an accent through text so I just did what I could.
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The accent came across just fine.
Skidaddle Skidoodle you are now a noodle
Well it seems Noir Fucked up Badly and her mind may never Recover. It also kinda shows that Celestia will try to let ponies off easy even if they do something Indescribably cruel like what Noir did.
I scroll down after finally finishing the chapter and what do I see? The third comment and I cringe. I also didn't expect max to do that to noir
YOU GONNA DIE
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What part of FUCKIN' GOD don't you understand? (Well technically if he wasn't immortal as fuck, he would have died, but whatever.)
Zachary Quinto was a badass in that show... Psychotic, but badass.
"With the bird I'll share
This lonely view"
Time out. What was Noir trying to accomplish? Cause she knows Max well enough that whatever she just tried to pull was ridiculous. I have a feeling its got to do with her master, but wow was that out of absolutely nowhere.
Max is a little bit of a cry baby isn’t he, I mean he has logical reasons ( to a point ) but he does break down every 10 chapter at least. (Btw wasn’t he bitching like a couple of chapters ago about not being recognized) Also he’s kind of a Doormat most times when it comes to Twilight ... who am I lying too, he’s more whipped than a slave in a cotton plantation.