A Thief with a heart of a substance better left unsaid wakes up in Equestria after a unlucky turn of events. How will a jaded, world weary human get along with cheery, naive Ponies?
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Well. He literally just created a personal hell. That's not going to help his sentence in the real pit.
Not sure I entirely agree with the force lack of free will. It seems so out of character from the Max we saw a few chapters ago, but I guess it’s a sign he’s changing as a person.
I’ve got a feeling that he’s going to confess to Twilight and this will either start some sick D.R.A.M.A or he’ll be forced to go back to Earth and see the monstrosity he has created and have to fix it.
Well, that went about as should be expected. Granted, I hadn't seen him going with mindrape, even if it should've been obvious, given the structure of the epic thus far. I did guess the internal agony and confession aspects of his revenge, but certainly not all that was said and done, after he mentioned that he wasn't going to kill him.
Overall, this was a fulfilling chapter to read; the fuckery Noir pulled was interesting from the outside, Will and Bea's reactions to Revenent Mindrape was to be expected from... their walks of life, and I'm intrigued by what Reverend Reverent learned of his True Magic.
I look forward to seeing how his reintegration to Equestria goes, and Celestia hearing of his brief sabbatical on the Dark Side of the Force.
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I believe Max always had the ability to do so, ever since he didn’t slay Crimson. I feel like he’s been peeking down Celestia’s path, though he’s afraid of the power that comes along with it.
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I feel like Max giving everyone his verbal sausage straight into their ears was a little strange for him. I’ve been waiting for someone to bring up The Seal on his chest or it’s possible influences on his actions, but it’s not all that important, I guess.
As for the rest, I don’t feel like I can comment without giving major spoilers, sadly, though I’m excited to no end to see where the next leg of the journey takes me. Chapter 40 is already complete, and 41 is in the early stages.
Yeah morals got stepped on here. But if you look at the world as it is now, would anyone honestly say that if they could change something they know is bad that they wouldn't do it?
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In regards to the Seal, I hadn't brought it up, since it didn't seem relevant; something that detects emotional distance from an emotionally stimulating moment, is tangentially related to the situation (at best), since he's certainly feeling emotions at the time he did his brain bending. After all, the Seal only determines if he's becoming dead inside, not evil.
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Did you really just copy a wall of text and put it into a comment? Really? And then put one line under it of your own writing?
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Max’s true magic is going to be interesting, indeed. Just the thought of how ridiculous it’s going to be is getting me really excited. I have a couple of guess on what it will be based on the way Noir worded a few things but I am keeping these things to myself for now. Sometimes I like to be proved wrong, and with this story, it turns out to be really fun.
What Noir did to Max is something akin to psychic driving and then made extreme. If that was going to go on any longer, I shudder at what would happen to Max. He already questioned himself once about him being Celestia. I just find that a bit scary.
Doesn’t the seal on Max’s chest becomes cold when he starts going down the road of a true revenant? So why has it not acted up more now? Shouldn’t he feel the changes? Maybe I’m missing something.
RevenantReject, I feel like we can grab a group of people and debate what Max did ‘til the end on whether it was right or wrong and we would get nowhere. I feel like we are already fucking up this world so badly that we will not make it to 2200. What Max did is a godsend. Look at it this way, God does the same thing every day, we are chest pieces to him that he likes to ‘move around’ at times, and the rest of the time he just watches what happens. The one thing that’s different is what Max did has benefits, what God did is neutral.
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It’s going to be interesting, but it’s going be a left fielder for certain
Noir considered it fair play considering what Max did, but I thought it was a pretty brutal way to get one’s point across.
It’s supposed to act up when Max is experiencing emotional numbness or a general lack of feeling. It’s basically what you said.
That’s a different take on the situation that I didn’t consider in depth. Then again, I think there are too many interpretations of the Capital G to really agree on anything about Him/Her other than ‘Them’ being the creator in it’s most absolute form. Hell, in my view, I don’t even technically think the one who created the Earth is necessarily the end game, just a sub-boss.
Holy fuck mothering fuckbuckets full of fuck! That was dark as hell.
Not that that's a problem.
Mmmmmmmmmmmmm Mm! I loved me some of those spicy storytelling skills and punishments. This is gonna be one of my fav chapters for this story
Shiiiiiiiiiiiiit, this chapter is dark as fuck. Holy hell Graham's punishment...
This story is way too addictive. If your aim was to be unnerving, 20/10 mission accomplished
Fuck mate, He’s the good kind of evil, the worst kind of evil. This is so fucked up, I hate it BUT I love it. He has truly lost it mate.
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Ah, your reaction is delicious! I love your comments man, keep em coming
Read half of this chapter, really pissed me off. Couldn’t read the rest.