A Thief with a heart of a substance better left unsaid wakes up in Equestria after a unlucky turn of events. How will a jaded, world weary human get along with cheery, naive Ponies?
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Another brilliant chapter, I just can't get enough of Twilight's and Max's relationship and interactions. I also love Max's jokes and pranks their just brilliant.
I had three guesses when it came to Max's true magic (Well, two since the last one was really weak):
Those were the abilities that came to mind, but you blew that out of the water by giving him something so much more powerful. I didn't quite expect something so strong. Though I have to say, it's going to be interesting.
And there it was. The one thing I was actually worried about: The War. I thought it would start much later before the whole thing with Max going to Earth, But since you decided to skip a bit longer than expected, that thought crashed and burned pretty quick. I'm just hoping shit doesn't get too messed up for the grand finale.
I have to say it's quite interesting to see Max fall apart like that without Twilight. I saw that coming(for a different reason of course) and I have to admit that I am a terrible person for thinking it was fun to read....
"If I get strong enough, I’ll do my best to help keep [Shining] alive..." I thought that was a weird thing to put in at first but if you meant it as foreshadowing, you did well since Max can steal time for Shining now. The little things just really keep me going.
Fucking finally. It was a long time coming and I'm glad you finally managed to squeeze in the question. It was glorious and adorable. Now I just have to wait for the main event to be as happy as a clam. You made my day with the long-awaited question.
As Noble Balance said, you really know how to make the relationship between Max and Twilight interesting and quite amazing.
You have given me quite a few things to think about as always, so Imma do that. I need to start on my predictions for future events and such since Max's power messed up some of my predictions. Anyways, great chapter and I'm looking forward to the next one.
8244047 You son of a bitch, always guessin' shit. The reason I gave Max something so powerful is because literally grasping concepts is going to be both hard to learn and explain and I don't really want him to just be able to 'get it' out of the blue. It's going to be a hard power to learn, first and foremost, and an even more difficult one to actually master.
Shout out to Sylar for fucking people up and digging through brains tho. I figured Reincarnation No Kaben would be a better base since I liked the concept. While MAx will be able to steal and borrow powers, he's going to have to learn how to use them until further notice, which is going to be a bitch all its own.
The thing is, things seem to be moving more quickly, to be happening a bit more suddenly than one might expect, but The War is still a ways off and it'll definitely be a multiple chapter event. Dicksword isn't making his move just yet.
Twilight just brings Max a ridiculous amount of stability in his fractured state of mind. When she doesn't want to be around him, he doesn't want to be around himself. He can function without her and may even do so rather well, but having Twilight be mad at him strikes his reasoning and his general will to do anything productive.
I mentioned it because Shining is the only member of the Royal Family who isn't immortal. Seriously, being a dude in MLP is a one way ticket to getting screwed, just not in the fun way. There may have been other reasons, but I'll keep them to myself for now.
I was worried about Max popping the question at such a sketchy time, but I felt like Max would have felt incredibly pressured to ask before he became a prince, before he felt like he was forced to become fake and ingenuine.
To a point, I think yourself and Noble Balance might just be sadists in that seeing Max and Twilight argue is amusing. I don't necessarily like making my characters unhappy, but they're not perfect by a long shot. Shit goes down, and there aren't even any DM's in Equestria.
I hope you enjoy the next chapter. It struck me as an odd one since I had to do a lot with it and I fucked up the time scaling in a few places, but it shaped up well in my opinion. As Always, Enjoy.
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The thing is The biggest dick explained Maxs powers and what he can do. Yes, it will be tough to learn it but Max already knows what is possible with his powers now which should speed up his training.
First things first, Max is going to steal sinbad and probably give it to Twilight.
I don't lile how Max and Twilight fight, but it is interesting to see how you will resolve their arguments.
I think how Max popped the question is actually quite nice, yes there was no massive build up. But you kinda ruined the build up by having Max be gone for so long.
I cant wait till Max starts to fuck around with his power now, I'm already shaking just thinking about it.
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Knowing what you can do and being able to do it are very different things. You might know the theory of doing a backflip and have seen multiple people do it, but it's never that easy. Things will be explained a bit better in Chapter 42.
He was going to be gone for a long time in any case, but as I've said before, the length was the only issue. Still, it was kinda fitting in its own way
The dickery is going to be intense, I'll say that much.
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Yes, but knowing the theory of doing a backflip and then doing said backflip would be easier than not knowing anything about a backflip and then trying to do one. If capital G said only that he can steal anything and left it at that, it would take Max a much longer time to even begin to comprehend his full abilities.
On top of that, I just finished reading that manga--sucks that it isn't complete--and if Max knows everything about that Manga then he has a pretty good starting point. It is basically like not only have you seen people do backflips you have also learned the techniques and the perfect position for it, the only thing left is to just get strong enough to jump as high as it is required. But, I can see what you mean. In the end, to get enough strength to 'jump' that high it will take a while like a fat guy trying this.
Well, I'll just have to see your take on this in chapter 42. I really can't wait to see that.
finally i caught up it took so long cause you kept updating too fast
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You say that like it's a bad thing
Giggles are becoming a more common occurrence and I like it
His dependency on Twi in getting out of control, it’s everything but healthy and it may even push Twi away, At least it does it in RL.
Pd: Loving the story, regardless of what Max does I always end up fucking loving him
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Ah, so the curtain begins to fall away.
Twilight isn't the only one Max is dependent on