A Thief with a heart of a substance better left unsaid wakes up in Equestria after a unlucky turn of events. How will a jaded, world weary human get along with cheery, naive Ponies?
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As expecting, the landing was rough, but things are smoothing out, damage has promise in being repaired, and future events look grim.
I can understand AJ and Rare's hang ups, if only because that's the majority of their characters, but Rarity bitching out of business felt just a wee bit forced. Not in any overtly noticeable manner, but in the same way that fringe horror starts, where something vaguely doesn't seem quite right, but you can't put your finger on it. I suppose her history with him could help to contribute to this result, and my obsessing over this minor detail is nitpicking at best.
I'm beginning to suspect that RD is only cool with Max, finally, because she's grown to count him as part of the group, so that inspires a bit of her steadfast loyalty, even if she's a shortsighted fuck up, who'd rather pretend her problems don't exist in her self-delusion.
I'm not particularly surprised that Pinkie knows about Earth's events, but Max and I eventually need an explanation for her having a Fourth Wall to break, assuming she isn't divine or psychic or Chaos Magic. On that note, friendly reminder that Max and Pinkie need to have a chat with Pinkie some time.
On a similar note, I note Max didn't get around to discussing his punishment of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named with Celestia, like he considered not long before.
With Earth still on mind, it hasn't been stated, one way or another, if he's even begun having a legit discussion with Twilight about keeping his tech charged with magic, beyond an offhanded mention during their introduction to her. Is that a mistake, deliberate, or an example of the Unreliable Narrator writing style?
I noticed that Noir's suspicions on the nature of his True Magic has slipped his mind, if that's a clever little trick Entity X (God) pulled, then good on him for confirming the right track for us.
I find myself worrying over the Discord/Tirek situations, but I can only hope Noir has a plan for that.
Speaking of Noir, I look forward to seeing what Luna has to discuss with God's Chosen. I can only imagine that Celestia has told her that Max has True Magic growing inside him now, which only going to tempt her.
On True Magic, I'm rather looking forward to seeing whatever Cosmic Force he learns to tap into. Could it be Dimensional Energy Manipulation? Will we see him pulling some Vibe/Reverb shit out of Flash(CW)? What other potential power could he gain from the mounting energy, building up steadily?
How will Blue and Onyx go? Speaking of Blue, is her love life going to continue as it did, or is she going to have to find someone new to father Prince (more on that) Maxwell?
On that note, I look forward to seeing that play out, now that his vengeance has helped with some of his deeper wounds.
Glad to see his sex life is getting something positive out his experience on Time Dilation (can't wait to see him ducking about with True Magic, once he gets that shit diagnosed, and undergoes some training with his budding ticket to deityhood).
Not sure how I feel about Spike seriously growing up while we were gone, but I'm sure that'll change once I see more of him.
Also, You'd think Rairty would be a bit more sympathetic with him trying to get rid of a drug problem, with her experience on a certain stone tome in the Everfree.
Speaking of the Everfree, how is Zecora? I don't think we've seen hide nor hair of her in a good long while, all things considered. Has something happened to her?
In any case, this was fun to read, and I was ecstatic to see it on my feed. I look forward to next chapter addressing only some of these, since I'm sure there's something big planned for some of the others, tans the rest just happening somewhere inbetween.
Either way, I look forward to seeing what happens with Pinkie.
On the Rarity end of things: She's straight up pissed that Max was gone so long, missed so much and had the nerve to come back like he'd only been gone for a month. She's hurt that she and her friends had to miss him 23 times longer than he had to miss them, but once Chapter Forty-Two is done, things will start getting expanded upon. As it is, Rarity feels betrayed, just like Applejack does, and neither of them have precedent of letting perceived slights against them or their friends pass without recourse.
It's nice to know that someone understands my Rainbow Dash. Once she and Max get their time together, we'll see her character grow a bit.
Pinkie Pie has True Magic, which drove her insane pretty quickly. When she lived on the rock farm it was dormant, but something triggered her magic.
It's because Max can charge it himself and it seems to work fine when he does it. Since I'll probably only mention it in passing, he gave Twilight one of the MP3s, though there are already Pony headphones that she can use by linking them with magic. There really just hasn't been much time between cuddling and talking for Max to whip out his tech to others.
Max hasn't really mentioned her suspicions on his new power because he doesn't think she's right.
His power is already set in stone and it's from a Manga that I read by chance. The power just struck me as the most fitting for him, even if it isn't necessarily the most overpowered thing. Trust me when I say days of headaches and deliberation went into finding something that fit Max well enough for it to make sense. I honestly spent too much time on it, but some things bring out that ugly perfectionist streak I believe we all have within us.
Spike's growth... he's going to be a little different.
Rarity can be a hypocrite beyond all others. Keep in mind she's trying to be a noble, a person who is supposed to uphold the morals of society more than any other. In my world, most nobles are power hungry assholes. Hypocritical power hungry assholes.
As for Zecora... Straight up? She's not even in my character roster, and that shit has pretty much every name I've ever come up with or borrowed from the show. She's just not that important of a character for Max's current endeavors, but I can think of something she'd be real good for... Heh. Heh heh.
As always, it's good to hear from you. Glad to have you back.
I was preparing myself for Max being gone for 2-3 months max, but you really blind sighted me there with 2 years. I guess I shouldn't be all that surprised with these events but that just moved a lot of things forward by quite a bit that I don't really want to think about just yet.
I don't really care whether or not we get an explanation on pinkie's fourth wall breaking abilities. It's being overdone now and I doubt he can find a way to explain her that has not been done yet. I just say leave it at that and keep having Max say things that make Pinkie give him those black looks, I find myself enjoying them since I have not seen that done yet.
I get why Max told Celestia about his true magic but this will cause Luna to go after him if Celestia tells her. Hopefully, Celestia keeps that info to herself, then again, a confrontation between Luna and Max could be quite interesting to read. Can Luna even touch Max if he is still useful to big G, can anyone?
It was pretty heartbreaking to see Blue like that. You don't recover from that so quickly, it will take a lot of time before Blue is normal or anyone for that fact. 2 years is still a really long ass time, of course, it's easier to see past that if you're older since time doesn't really matter too much after a certain point, but when you're young 2 years is huge. I am still quite surprised Twilight is handling things so well, even absolute faith can waver and it becomes harder to hold on to. I'm thinking she is still thinking it's more of a dream that she will wake up from. Then again the necklace is always with her so it's not too hard to believe.
From what we have seen so far, Noir hates Discord, and even a mere mention of his name is enough to make her lock up. So, the best way to introduce Discord would be to have the girls completely forget about telling Max about Discord and have him appear before Max, that should be entertaining.
I'm left wondering what would happen if Max gets his magic drained by Tirek. He is mostly held together by magic after all. I'm just left with so many questions about how that episiode will play out. It's pretty major so you probably will be writing it in, but how many events will change?
The next few chapters are going to be jam packed from what I see, can't wait to read them. Over all great chapter but you have given us so many more questions that need to be answered now.
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It was only supposed to be a year at first. Then it was a year and a half. Then I wanted something fucking staggering that would be a challenge to get over. In a sense, I shot myself in the fucking foot, but in another sense, I feel like I did something few writers would have the palle to do.
The thing is, I don't really want to explain Pinkie's magic. It's a part of who she is, and even when she and Max do finally sit down and have their real time together, I'm probably not going to go into depth about it. Pinkie is just as secretive as anyone could possibly be within reason, and it doesn't really make sense for the her that I'm working with to spill her trade secrets. Basically what I said is what's going on. It's not really going to go much deeper because no one besides Discord really understands what Pinkie's going through with her powers.
Keep in mind that Blue is a Pony. That being said, MAx is the only reason she gets out of bed now. Even though she accepted Trixie as her own child, losing Max broke her in a way that only he can fix. He and Blue will have their time, just as everyone else will get. Things are in motion at the moment, though. Big shit be happenin'
Twilight lost faith from time to time, but Max has yet to lie to her. She takes his word to her as absolute truth. Their promises to each other are always reasonable because they intend on keeping them.
The thing is... I really haven't watched the show since season three. I bailed out of the fandom while I was still on Tumblr because I hated how fucking creepy some of our compatriots are and really didn't want to be associated with horsefuckers. Then I stopped caring. I still watch the show from time to time to get the gist of the plot, but shit just doesn't have the same pull to me as fanfiction does. I have no idea who/what Tirek is, though I assure you his shit is happening. That chapter might take some time since I plan on watching that episode a few times over to make sure I know what happens and how to work it.
Hopefully they'll start to be answered in the coming chapters
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Yeah I thought you might be doing a longer time skip then 3 months, like a year, but 2 is just, i dont really know how your going to pull this off. Good luck on that.
I stopped watching after season 4, so thats as far as i got but since im reading A journey beyond sanity, im going to probably watch all the way to season 7.
Clop is definitely not for everyone, i stopped caring and focous on the romance and emotions. Being a closet brony myself ish (since im less a brony and more just a fantasy lover) i dont have to deal with people throwing me into that group.
You said that rainbows character is going to grow soon, so im looking forward to that since I have always hated her. Her loyalty is nice but her cocky and headstrong attitude is just too much to overcome.
Tirek is massive as well as the six keys that open the box that give twilight her castle(buy our toys!) It goes through many things so its going to be quite interesting when you get to that. I suggest going all the way to season 4 finale and then one episode after that and then split from the canon since everything else is just not worth watching.
Just caught up to the story now but what I would've liked to see in the Earth chapters is something even just a wink to the audience that canon MLP exists in his universe bonus points would've been if he had seen it and recognized it for what it was. That being said you wouldn't be adverse to a crossover wit h the canon universe would you?
8229005 I wouldn't exactly be averse to a crossover with the actual canon, but the nods with the Cartoon Ponies is the wink you're looking for. They're there because MLP isn't something Max knows about, nor do I feel like he would be a fan beyond thinking they're cute hallucinations. I already have an idea of how to implement it that I think would be hilarious but it's not going to be much more than a little aside if I decide to do something of the sort.
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Yeah I was just imaging like anthro Twilight and Max getting sent to the canon universe to see that they're friends (with and without benefits) as well as Twilight's alternate self as ponies and if sent to pre S4 Twilight seeing humans and anthros for the first time. Which reminds me when is the EqG part going to happen?
8230381 EqG isn't happening in the story because I never liked it, never cared for it, and I don't want to write about it. I did a short story involving it and that was a bitch because I really just don't like the base at all. I purposefully left it out during the timeskip that bridged season 3 and 4 because of the aforementioned reasons.
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But S4 hasn't started yet also did you stop at EqG1 or give 1 + 2 a chance
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We're like, halfway through season four at this point dude. I didn't give any of the other ones a shot because I didn't like the first one
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Yeah once I read your comment I facepalmed at my own stupidity while I wish you'd give EqG 2 a chance since it changed a lot of minds about it I respect your decision
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In fairness, I'm building up for something big later on down the road. Call it the calm before the absolute shitstorm or the boring bit before the exciting but. There's some combat and power-based fuckery between 33-40, but shit will start hitting the fan soon enough.
To explain the mushy shit with Twilight, she's just a big part of Max's life and going around killing shit just wouldn't sit well with her if you are where I think you are
I don't know what's worse, the fact I got that reference, or that you put it in.
Someone got out of writing along with the shooooow~
This made me giggle too much
I love me some Glass Animals
didnt they say that they wouldnt have full on sex and only did it because they were both women an now they just throw that out the window
im just confused
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The point was to save Twilight's actual virginity for marriage
Timey wimey wibbly wobbly.
Slight discrepancy I think.
When he first used the vibrator on pinkie at Fluttershys place, he lamented never enjoying bubblegum after she left a wet stain.
Now he will a bet with twilight, where he bet on cotton candy and she was betting on gum.
Not important, but a binge reader noticed
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Futhermuck, right after I was revelling in the comments from 39, the plothole commeth.
Easy explanation; muh boi done forgot because he repressed the memory.
Stupid explanation: Pinkie and Pinkamena taste different (???)
So if Twilight is an allicorn now does that mean she can live with Max for all of his life.
discord is where? in the show he gets introduced b4 twilycorn and was just wondering why he isnt here already and if the reason is for fuckery later also was REEEEEEEAAAAAALLLLYYYYY lookin forward to max kickin discords ass for doing wat he did to twilight in cannon but guessin thats not happening now