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Critiquing Skills and my own Read Later List · 3:53am Jun 6th, 2014

I've added a Custom Box to the near-top of my profile page listing my new "Read Later List" of a custom variety. Relating this to my Critiquing Skills, I have decided that I have become decidedly rusty in my ability to critique and pick apart a story. However, I don't necessarily have the time nor the inclination to go out and start taking on requests to critique stories I'm not necessarily interested in. So, in an effort to keep my skills sharp without adding an undo amount of stress to my already-tight schedule, I've decided to fashion my own "Read Later" list, which I have put inside this custom box.

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My Ever-Growing List of Stories to Read and Stories I've Read (With Thoughts)

Currently Reading: Eljunbyro

Thoughts So Far (Sans Spoilers): Only just started reading. Literally just started. Also, Austraeoh was such a slice of awesome, I think I'm going to have trouble drawing up a proper critique of it. I will not be critiquing Eljunbyro or future sequels.

Finished Reading (And Enjoyed):

Lost and Found by Cloudy Skies
Length: 168,377 words
Genre: Romance, Adventure
Personal Rating: 5/5
Thoughts (Sans Spoilers): It's not often that I come across a story for which I have close to no complaints. Usually, I can find something wrong with the story. Some consistent flaw throughout that bugged me, but may not have necessarily made the story bad. Usually. This is not one of those times.
"Lost and Found" was... well it was an Adventure, just as the genre has it pegged. There were quite a few aspects of romance, too. But... I mean just wow. This was one of those stories that, once I picked it up, you had to fight me to get me to put it down. The writing is superb, and there were only one or two times where I was at all put off by the flow, and it was usually corrected. I can't seem to remember any consistent grammar errors throughout the story. The author does an excellent job of describing what is going on.
Conflict throughout the story is handled very well, and PoV transitions are handled smoothly. Not once did I lose interest in what was going on. Honestly, this is just one of those stories that I feel should be read.
If I had to pick a single complaint about the story, it would be that the ending was a bit... well, I can't say too much without spoilers (I'll dive more in depth in my Additonal Notes for those interested), but the ending was a bit off-putting for me personally. I won't say how, since that would be spoilers, but I will say it wasn't by much, and it didn't really hurt the story.
All in all, this is a great read, and I recommend it to anyone who loves a good Adventure. A lot of thought was put into the plot of the story, and the author weaves a very interesting tale. It has earned a perfect rating from me.
Additional Thoughts (Spoiled): As mentioned in the non-spoiled thoughts, I had only one complaint, and that was with the ending of the story. It seemed to me that around the time that Brighthoof confronted Twilight, and perhaps even as far back as when the train arrived in Ponyville, the pacing of the story took a sudden an unexpected upturn. However, thinking back on it, I am heavily aware of just how eventful those particular scenes were, and it is more than possible that I got caught up in the excitement and merely read much faster and with much more fanaticism than I normally do. That said, it was still very well executed, and I'm not sure I would have it any other way.

A Bluebird's Song by Ardensfax:
Length: 205,887 words
Genre: Romance, Sad, Dark, Adventure
Thoughts (Sans Spoilers): The story was an excellent read, very heartwarming in places. It dipped a bit into dark, especially towards the end, but I thought it was nicely balanced with the romance aspects. If anything, the romance came on a bit strong at some points, perhaps not for me but for someone who isn't into it as much, it might be a slight turnoff.
The pacing at the beginning of the story was, however, rather fast and I feel it could have benefited from slowing down. However, it didn't take long for the author to take hold of things and balance that back out. The story resolved itself fairly well at the end, and the emotional rollercoaster left off at just the right speed.
Despite the few flaws it has, "A Bluebird's Song" more than makes up for it with the amount of character development that goes into the story. The relationships between the various ponies lead to some interesting conflicts and revelations, and everyone remains fairly in-character throughout the story.
Finally, I feel the need to point out that it actually took some digging for me to do a small review on this story. While I can remember good feelings from this story and stuff, it wasn't super memorable to me, for whatever reason. That may be entirely different to someone else, but I guess it just lacked... impact, I suppose. However, I believe this to be a personal problem with the story as opposed to an objective one.
Additional Thoughts (Spoiled): I thought the conflict with Sunset was fairly brilliantly done, myself. A racist group of equines being present in Equestria makes the conflicts between the ponies seem much more real, and brings to light some interesting facts that the show seems to ignore. As for the idea that Pegasi don't actually need wings to fly, but rather use them as a focal point for a magic that is more reliant in how confident they are in themselves is quite fascinating. I find it a bit hard to swallow that it isn't a widely known truth in the pegasi community that this is how their magic actually works, even if most pegasi aren't actually interested in the magic and there have been suppression efforts. They've had several thousand years to figure it out after all, and I got the idea that Celestia already knew herself how it worked, or should have known herself and would have been willing to let them know and get the word out. Sunset couldn't have been that big, after all. However, this may be because I am forgetting some of the points the author may have made throughout. Besides, I am more than willing to put on suspension of disbelief, as that is ultimately a nitpick, and there could be a variety of reasons that the facts weren't always so clear.
Personal Rating: 4/5

Stories To Be Read*

*In no particular order by which they will be read.

1.) The Entire "Austraeoh" series by Imploding Colon
2.) The Life and Times of a Winning Pony by Chengar Qordath
3.) Allegrezza by CoffeeGrunt
4.) Address Unknown by Remedy
5.) Archmage by Loyal
6.) Cloud Nine by Professor Toast
7.) The Flight of the Alicorn by Ponydora Prancypants
8.) Machinations of a Trickster by Deviance
9.) Syncopation by Terrasora
10.) Taken for Granite by Cloudy Skies
11.) Earth & Sky by Warren Hutch
12.) The End of Ponies (Again) by shortskirtsandexplosions
13.) The Games We Play (Again) by AbsoluteAnonymous
14.) The Immortal Game by AestheticB
15.) It Takes A Village (Again) by determamfidd
16.) Macintosh (Again) by TotalOverflow
17.) A Twixie Love Story by Yukito
18.) Upheaval: Breaking Point by Visiden Visidane
19.) Where Loyalties Lie: Honor Guard by LoyalLiar
20.) Background Pony (Again) by shortskirtsandexplosions
21.) Bringing Up Blueblood by InsertAuthorHere
22.) Evening Flames by Nicknack
23.) Families by [url=htt://www.fimfiction.net/user/Darth+Link+22]Darth Link 22
24.) Family Mares (Again) by **** (Original author removed story. Name withheld to respect wishes. Reposted (with permission) by SolidFire)
25.) The Fears of Yesterday (Again) by **** (Original author removed story. Name withheld to respect wishes. Reposted (with permission) by SolidFire)
26.) Human (Again) by DannyJ
27.) My Little Alicorn (Again) by InsertAuthorHere
28.) Our Professional Lives (Again) by GingerNutGin
29.) Past Sins by Pen Stroke
30.) The Age of Wings and Steel by DSNesmith
31.) The Best Night Ever by Capn_Chryssalid
32.) The Best of All Possible Worlds by McPoodle
33.) This Platinum Crown by Capn_Chryssalid

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Four years later and you're still not my master.:pinkiecrazy: Thought I forgot about you, huh?! (I did...:ajsleepy:)

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Without a doubt, the best fictions I have ever read.

  • Macintosh Big Macintosh seems like a simple pony who doesn't say much, but there's much more to him. by TotalOverflow 91,767 words · 2,160 views · 190 likes · 5 dislikes
  • It Takes a Village Spike only wants things to stay the same. Time, however, has other ideas. He's going to need help... by determamfidd 148,765 words · 35,812 views · 3,398 likes · 60 dislikes
  • Shipping and Handling Ditzy Doo winds up in the matchmaking business by Pegasus Rescue Brigade 133,056 words · 25,859 views · 2,614 likes · 56 dislikes
  • The Games We Play Somepony is once again masquerading as Mare Do Well, and it's up to Rainbow Dash to figure out who. by AbsoluteAnonymous 137,602 words · 28,017 views · 1,877 likes · 53 dislikes

Also stories that are the best I've ever read.

  • The Colour You Bleed Blueblood is kidnapped, and dumped in an unfriendly neighboring country. by Kegisak 137,610 words · 5,768 views · 405 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Allegrezza Vinyl and Octavia have some adventures. by Avensis Astari 47,565 words · 41,414 views · 3,248 likes · 57 dislikes
  • Barking Mad Echoes of a past horror hold firmly to a mare’s mind, altering her reality. (Featured on EqD) by TheGLQwardvark 3,781 words · 7,417 views · 219 likes · 3 dislikes
  • Human The Human of legend has been released, and the Brotherhood makes its move. by DannyJ 427,238 words · 26,998 views · 1,558 likes · 123 dislikes
  • Two's Company, Three's a Crowd One night of fun for a certain musical pair will leave their lives upside down. by Lithe Kamitatsy 145,641 words · 33,104 views · 2,034 likes · 72 dislikes

Top 5 Romances (in my humble opinion)

  • Allegrezza Vinyl and Octavia have some adventures. by Avensis Astari 47,565 words · 41,414 views · 3,248 likes · 57 dislikes
  • Unintended Applejack and Twilight discover that there's more to each other than what meets the eye. by Vargras 79,130 words · 8,385 views · 648 likes · 21 dislikes
  • Two's Company, Three's a Crowd One night of fun for a certain musical pair will leave their lives upside down. by Lithe Kamitatsy 145,641 words · 33,104 views · 2,034 likes · 72 dislikes
  • The Games We Play Somepony is once again masquerading as Mare Do Well, and it's up to Rainbow Dash to figure out who. by AbsoluteAnonymous 137,602 words · 28,017 views · 1,877 likes · 53 dislikes
  • Shipping and Handling Ditzy Doo winds up in the matchmaking business by Pegasus Rescue Brigade 133,056 words · 25,859 views · 2,614 likes · 56 dislikes

Five Sad Stories You Should Read

  • Upon Wings of Sacrifice Rainbow Dash journeys to find a way to bring back Applejack from the dead...but at what price? by Rated Ponystar 79,674 words · 4,139 views · 385 likes · 31 dislikes
  • Barking Mad Echoes of a past horror hold firmly to a mare’s mind, altering her reality. (Featured on EqD) by TheGLQwardvark 3,781 words · 7,417 views · 219 likes · 3 dislikes
  • My Little Dashie What would you do if you found a Filly Rainbow Dash in a box? by ROBCakeran53 12,524 words · 508,273 views · 12,206 likes · 807 dislikes
  • The Games We Play Somepony is once again masquerading as Mare Do Well, and it's up to Rainbow Dash to figure out who. by AbsoluteAnonymous 137,602 words · 28,017 views · 1,877 likes · 53 dislikes
  • It Takes a Village Spike only wants things to stay the same. Time, however, has other ideas. He's going to need help... by determamfidd 148,765 words · 35,812 views · 3,398 likes · 60 dislikes

My Favorite Adventures

  • Off The Edge Of The Map Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy journey through unknown lands. by Daetrin 34,894 words · 23,747 views · 1,920 likes · 28 dislikes
  • Apotheosis Twilight and Luna explore a land that appears on no map by Daetrin 46,300 words · 23,412 views · 2,530 likes · 40 dislikes
  • Forbidden Fruit After catching wind of a mystical tree of life, Applejack sets off in search of it. by Vargras 42,052 words · 16,036 views · 493 likes · 22 dislikes
  • The End of Ponies A lone pony of a Wasteland future Equestria finds a way to visit her dead friends in the past. by shortskirtsandexplosions 527,556 words · 28,297 views · 1,899 likes · 63 dislikes
  • The Moonstone Cup Twilight is invited to Canterlot to compete with some of the greatest unicorns in Equestria! by Cyanide 61,073 words · 28,226 views · 2,721 likes · 39 dislikes

Silent Ponyville Series Part 1

  • Silent Ponyville Pinkie Pie goes to Twilight to end her horrible nightmares. by SamRose 30,459 words · 29,920 views · 1,483 likes · 29 dislikes
  • Too Shy for a Rainbow Fluttershy must confront her feelings for Rainbow Dash (After Silent Ponyville) by SamRose 17,538 words · 7,995 views · 458 likes · 15 dislikes
  • Silent Ponyville 2 Fluttershy has been having horrible nightmares and goes to see Twilight for help. by SamRose 52,706 words · 12,257 views · 850 likes · 20 dislikes
  • Study of the Mind Delve Twilight tries to learn more about the Mind Delve spell. by SamRose 11,674 words · 3,527 views · 201 likes · 3 dislikes
  • The Rainbow's Surprise Rainbow Dash is hiding something from Fluttershy by SamRose 19,432 words · 3,256 views · 251 likes · 3 dislikes

Silent Ponyville Series Part 2

  • Silent Ponyville 3 Twilight must confront a town overcome by a demonic fog. by SamRose 153,213 words · 10,375 views · 853 likes · 32 dislikes
  • Silent Ponyville Side Stories Several stories that tie into Silent Ponyville by SamRose 22,547 words · 3,651 views · 255 likes · 5 dislikes
  • Silent Ponyville: Reunion Lance Strongshy subjects himself to a mind delve to try and salvage the wreckage of his medical career by Chapter 17 243,655 words · 16,090 views · 298 likes · 15 dislikes
  • Silence of Ponyville Twilight goes to Ponyville's oldest resident to get some answers on the town's history. by Zehntacles 35,238 words · 1,458 views · 35 likes · 3 dislikes