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Visiden Visidane

Is that a terrorist?!?



Equestria is a land of magic and harmony, a peaceful realm ruled by immortal and benevolent monarchs. At what cost is this possible?

Following the discovery of a strange and powerful device, Twilight Sparkle is whisked away to the edges of a land she thought she knew so well. Here, surrounded by ponies whose very existences have been kept secret, she must contend with vicious enemies, hostile allies, and the truth.

Chapters 1-16 edited by KiltedKey

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Comments ( 773 )

You have no idea how seeing this here has made me happy.:pinkiehappy:

I like that it is here but doens't it miss about half of the chapters?

Love this story like hell, thanks for uploading it!:pinkiehappy:

it's finally here! free HUZZAH FOR EVERYONE!

Dear author of Vis,
Bless you. May whatever that rules the universe bless you. I love this story. I shall await the next chapter

Whoo... I'm finally current. Thanks for the story, Vis. Let me say that I'm enjoying this immensely, and greatly looking forward to every update.

Now for the bad news. I'm finally current. There's no more of the story I'm enjoying immensely for me to read until you update it...

Sooooo glad to see this up here =) This was the first fanfic I've read, and it got me hooked =) Keep it up! love it

Wheee! New chapter! I'm liking the soul-stasis, I've been toying around with similar ideas. :pinkiesmile:


Glad to see this has been uploaded here, I was following it on EQD but this is much more convenient.

So this is the end of part 1, if I remember reading the author's note correctly. I wait in anticipation for the next part.

That was the sweetest brother sister talk ever... taking into account thet he used to hate Luna. I love this sidestory about the three siblings relation, Terrato is so well crafted. Bravo. :twilightsmile:

Waiting eagerly for the next part of Upheaval.

Love your stuff man been reading it since i first seen it on EQD.

This is just too bleeding amazing. I have no words. Have my vote, watch, track and favorite.

Poor Terrato. That vision of his won't just be a pipe dream, even if its realization is still later than sooner.

Really liking this story. Celestia is characterized in a way that is both realistic and perfectly meshes with her demeanor in the show. I don't know whether I'm apprehensive or excited, though, to see it all fall down around her ears, which will surely happen now that Luna and the Elements are involved. Keep up the good work.

In closing, "Luna and the Elements" would be a decent name for a rock band.

:applejackunsure: Infantry.
:fluttershyouch: Medical.
:pinkiesmile: Logistics (food production).
:rainbowdetermined2: Reconnaissance.
:raritydespair: Logistics (uniforms).
:twilightsheepish: Offensive spellcasting.
:moustache: Civilian. Bathhouse heating?

It looks like they're all spread out. I'm seeing a lot of changes in the works for all of them, quite a bit of desensitization. I hope they don't lose themselves. Good luck, friends.

Forty lashes, save one. How Biblical. I approve of your allusion.

Things are going downhill here very quickly. And I sense there will be more miscommunication and outright deception before the end.

Yes, Fluttershy has every right to be concerned. If in the future they have to use the Elements of Harmony, I'm sure it will be Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, and possibly Rarity that will pull the others back in. AJ too. But I'm worried for Twilight and more so for Rainbow. :unsuresweetie:

Dun-dun-DUNNNN! It looks like Black Rose is moving forward. Here's a question, though. If she was at the bottom of a shaft, buried under a huge stone pillar, for seven hundred years, how has she known so quickly the situations behind closed doors and how to exploit everypony around her so soon after her return? Has she been able to watch, through astral projections, or something? Wouldn't Terrato have detected her if she'd tried that, when he exhumed her to ensure she was dead, all those years ago?

Blik #19 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · 1 · Ambush ·

I can't help but think Black Rose is systematically trying to remove the magic of the Elements. First, RD has lost her loyalty. I don't trust that mana sphere Spike has now, it can't be good for Twilight, and I'm calling right now that the episode in the smithy was aimed at also undermining Rarity's generosity. Thankfully, Pinkie has been spreading laughter, and I can't see AJ becoming less honest as things now stand. However...

I guess I'd better just keep reading.

I was so afraid that Rainbow would actually succeed and become insufferable and renounce her "chosen" status for good. Then I was worried that one of them would die. Thankfully I think both crises are past, though we'll have to wait for Fluttershy to come through in the Med Bay. Nothing like a good crisis to pull friends closer together. I hope.

There are Border ponies in Canterlot! :pinkiegasp:

Creation myth ahoy! The Heavenly Realm must be really weird, if one alicorn spawned three races and others brought the lupids, ursids, and herptids, not to mention draconequi. The 6th Rebellion must be the Black Rose Affair. Only thing it could be, really. Something in Terrato's choices went contrary to the Will of the Crown.

And here we have the Elements mentioned for the first time in seeming months! Or, mentioned as a group, anyway. Lexario and the Queen, along with Terrato's inner musings, don't count. I'm glad they were able to heal their rifts before the situation became even more dire.

Two situations that could bring Luna with that warning: Either Black Rose has sent her soldiers to attack Celestia, or Celestia has raised an army against Terrato and Luna was caught in the crossfire as she escaped to warn her favorite brother. Judging by what happened to Fancypants, I'll go with the first one. But it'll keep until tomorrow. It's late.
:ajsleepy: :flutterrage: :pinkiegasp: :raritydespair: :rainbowdetermined2: :twilightangry2:

welp there goes my spare time after finding this, oh well

Two more officers for Black Rose? I'm calling it right now: Trixie. :trixieshiftleft: And for the other: somepony to cause even more heartsickness. I would say she'd try for Big Macintosh, but how willing do the Subjects have to be? Perhaps Twocolt would be a suitable candidate?

The Mane Six need to bolster their friendship once again, though there's more space between them this time around. It'll take some Doing. But Applejack will be the linchpin.
Celestia will have to be protected until they can get her power back. Maybe they can use that same mana battery trick? Or perhaps appeal to the justice of the Eternal Herd through the Ignis Equi?
Whatever happens, the journey is far from over for our faithful Chosen.

Well, I finally finished it. I'll be Tracking you from now on, and I'm eager to see where you take Things.

Fucking hooked. God damn it.... This is going to slow my own stories progress... Very nice shit, very interesting.

Didn't expect that. First.

This is cool. Can't wait to keep reading. I'm surprised there are so little comments though... First

I've heard of Paranoid Parrot, but Paranoid Celestia? Things gonna be going down...

Shit yeah! Time to watch Twilight kick some ass! You go girl!

I just finished reading this the other day. I. Am. Amazed. Literally one of the best stories I've read in quite some time, even including real novels. I absolutely love it, and I can't wait for the rest.

I found myself wondering why this fic was marked "Complete," when it obviously isn't. I'mma slink off and read the sequel now... :twilightblush:

:raritydespair: How does this story only have 41 up votes?!?!
You are an amazing author, keep up the good work.
Can't wait to see what you do in the next arc.

I would have thought that Fluttershy would be the most worldy of the six- dealing with injured and sick creatures every day, not to mention living in close proximity to the Everfree forest. It seems unlikely that she has never had to deal with death.

hope this is worth all of the chapters

PHEW! Quite the marathon I submitted myself to. Finished this in 2 days. I could've gone faster, but hey, this is the internet. I have like 50 tabs open at once. :pinkiehappy:

Best story I've read in quite a while. I kept tossing it aside because of the grimdark tag and the art I got a glimpse of (the one with AJ lying on a hospital bed, with RD crying her eyes out). Boy am I glad I gave it a fair chance. The world you created just blows my mind. I tried to guess what would happen next or where the story was going, but every 5 chapter or so you proved me wrong. Every single time. I did manage to point out the major plot points that would happen by the end of it though. :twilightblush:

Celestia is one of my favorite characters. THAT BEING SAID. You managed to make me hate her guts beyond belief. I tried to understand her thought process, I really did, but she acted like a 12 year old foal would, not like an immortal ruler. Buuuuuuuut I guess that part was essential to the flow of the story. I like how it all turned out though.

Oh, by the way, I cried like a little girl after that one major battle. You know which one. It was heartbreaking, to say the least. :heart:

My favourite character dies first. What a surprise.

Awesome job though.

Confound these ponies! They drive me to OC!

that's because the link on EQD does not link to fimfiction, i had to search for it here myself :P

493525 Replying to a 7 week old comment. That's about as crazy as Oatmeal.

I feel sorry for you son, having to wait this long to read this awesomeness. As a parting gift, I give you this.

If you're having adventuring problems, I feel bad for you son. I dodged ninety-nine arrows but my knee took one.

DUN DUN DUNNNNN:pinkiegasp:

nooooooooo not Fancy Pants!!!! T.T

Dude, just feel I should let you know: This was the first fanfiction I ever read! Way back on FanFiction.net! Didn't realise you've moved here! Anyhow, thanks for a great story bro, I mean it.

325112 dude you must have read alot more now but hell its a good story this willbe my 5th re-read

553119 oh yeah, i've caught up by now and this has to be the best fic i've read, besides Echo

557512 i know rite!!!
i sugesed that he uploaded the story on this site... now its easy to keep up and there are pll who dont look on EQD sugh a shame... but its getting way more fiews this way... and thats how it suposed to be... ^^ now i look a few times a day if it has a update... nice you like it *bro hoove!* /)*

Awesome work. Loved it from beginning to end.That being said I'm off to read the sequel.

220853 i know rite!!! thats why i ask him to upload it here its so much easyer to track >.<

Fancy Pants was the very definition of a Good Guy. May his spirit find peace in the Eternal Herd.


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