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Celestia has been an alicorn for somewhere around eighteen hundred years. It will be a long time before Cure can compete in raw power, if he ever can.
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That's a good question. National flags do change, after all. The US flag obviously did every time a new state was added. I'll have to ponder on that. I could see him firmly declining being added to the flag, but then again Celestia was going to surprise him with an unexpected crown. Who says she'll ask? Hell, I could see her intentionally not ask just for the lols.
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I'm going to change it to "these days"
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It's an intentionally really bad joke. Silver is the second place medal, so when Heavy says Cure is worse than his sire then Cure would be behind second place, hence third.
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Apes are physically extremely different from humans. Imagine if there were animals that looked about 80-90% like us but were completely non-sapient. That's a theme in several of the "YHAY" stories, for example. Now imagine if someone came up with the idea of treating them like slaves, assuming we hadn't been doing it like that for thousands of years (which I can totally see). You would get some very, very mixed reactions, I bet.
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Cushy is right. It mean's soft and/or plush. The way the Google result showed it makes me suspect it's only used like that in the US, though.
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I bet he can when you are immortal like them most unlikely things are just certainly waiting to happen.
Markiplier in space part: 2
Cure's true danger revealed
That... Was something else
Freakin'... whoa. That's all I can say about this chapter. It's one thing to know that he's fully capable of doing that, but for it to happen... Well.
A nine year old colt, with the life experiences of a 65+ year old retired human man, just exercised a fraction of the power he has over life & death.
The fact he’s paraphrasing Genesis is a testament to how much that power and the resulting change in how ponies he know look upon him scares him.
The colt probably needs a good long hug from his Dam.
You better believe 110% of my attention was on this chapter when "[life began]".
...Holy moly I was not expecting such a chapter, such events so soon, or ever.
"Whoa" indeed.
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I would be disappointed if I don't get to read about that hug. Even if it's merely mentioned.
I'm just glad Cure appreciates the act he just performed. I wish him a swift and long hug from his Dam.
OK screw it letzt start building a temple for cure in honor of the alicorn of Life
DR. Dawn and the director, that moment was hilarious
don't stress yourself over the bathing moment, he IS a 8-9 year old foal and makes it in my view normal. i personally appreciate more details then less and you nail it efri time ^^
Hope Cure will visit a home for the sick and needy in the future. Curing stuff like blindness, paralyses, deafness and stuff like that.
Idea for mass scanning:
Assuming the mess halls' seating in any barracks are wooden table/benches, Cure could tweak and modify and network the wood under the floor, such that from a central location he could scan any soldier that sits down. Bonus if he could rig up a scanning engine to to so automagically, triple bonus if it only alerted him to anomalies. Perhaps a central 'tree of life,' keeping a database of scans and records, he could reference as needed. Perhaps some fresh wooden flooring here or there in the palace, too.
Tools are humanity's specialty, and biotools are Cure's. Automation is the next logical step.
Hell, park Yggdrasil in the Garden right next to Discord. I seriously doubt he'd fuck with medical matters after he's free; dead ponies create no chaos. Likewise it's not like anything in the tree's record would be hidden to him anyway after one look at a pony.
Wow. That kinda came outta nowhere. I suppose it was inevitable that something like it would happen eventually—allicorn of life and all—I just wasn't expecting it so soon and so... suddenly. The whole situation brings up a ton of questions involving souls, magic, cutie marks, neurology, etc.
I do love how it was handled, though. A lot of power fantasy type stories have dealt with bringing the dead back to life, but don't always treat it with the respect and gravity it deserves. There's themes of "And suddenly I found a power I didn't know I had" or "I poured my [magic/power] into [them], pushing myself past my limits and turning back the hand of time". Others are casual, with a basic hand-wavy "yeah, I can do that, too." this was neither of those. (Spoilers for the scene in question follows, for those who have yet to read this chapter/story)
Cure approached the situation carefully. He realized that, with the two being identical twins, he could very well bring the one back as easily as he'd done everything else. Her body hadn't decayed yet, her organs and brain were, while non-functional, perfectly healthy. It was a simple matter of starting them up again, using the living twin as reference. However, despite the simplicity of acting, it was the implications and potential consequences that gave Cure pause. He was about to bring the dead back to life. That's deity stuff right there, as he mentions to Celestia after the fact. When faced with such a monumental decision, he's only able to move forward the way he does because of his trust in Celestia's wisdom. The consequences of this simple, almost casual flexion of power are massive and far-reaching, especially with every unicorn doctor in the room having seen the dead filly firsthoof.
This is why I like this story so much, and why I think you're such a naturally talented author. You know how to take the littlest details and expand them to their true, natural extremes. You know how to make something so monumental seem at once small and infinitely vast, and it all makes sense in the system as you've outlined it. I will definitely be taking inspiration from you for my own work. Bravo, good sir. Bravo.
Anyway, now that my rant about how good this story is is over, time for some normal commenting/theorizing. How do you think Cure will handle birthing season and similar hooves-on emergencies in the future? Perhaps developing plants with simple logical functions to cast spells for deading pains and inducing labor, while remaining on-hoof for actual emergencies? Will ponies have to travel the country to see him in Canterlot? I've frequently found myself thinking about a sort of "world tree" style structure that serves as Cure's base of operations, with roots that spread throughout the country and to each major city, producing another tree there, that could all be connected to him so he could extend his magic and talent all over Equestria and help anypony who needs it. Before his official ascension, I'd imagined him eventually retreating into a magical glade of sorts, where any creature who so much as walked on the grass would be healed. Both of these scenarios more or less indicate passivity and retirement, though, so I only saw them potentially happening thousands of years in the future. Though the first one could be more sustainable for an active life if he set up regular "shifts" with the tree.
if he didn’t really watch the show all that much, why did he read all of the fan fiction?
Also, I can imagine the heavy silence as those doctors join each other for very stiff drinks afterwards.
“I am going to not think about it and do my best to make sure I never remember seeing it.”
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Ever heard of worm parahumans?
I wonder if Cure's secondary magic has arrived
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You don't need to watch the show to read the fiction.
I read a lot of fanfiction before I even watched the show. Hell, fanfiction was what actually got me into the show. I believe The Problem With Magic is where I started off. Branched out from there, ended up watching a bunch of seasons of the show and the movie. Haven't finished the show still though, nor have I watched the second movie.
But I still do read fimfic daily.
Wow, in this chapter we truly see the name "Alicorn of Life" shine... I share Cure and Celestia's curiosity/fears for potential issues cropping up in that foal's future. Maybe they will be completely magicless? Maybe the twins' magic will be tied together? Who knows!
chapter here, a lot to think about.
I almost expected Cure to use a slightly extended ‘flexible prehensile appendage’ to pick up a dropped washcloth for the lady or to show off that he can grow things like his horn just to unfocus her a bit. Lol
That joke with the director and Dr. Dawn.
Poor Lt. Spear. I thought Cure would go the extra mile and whisper to her if he can tell she’s been using the oil plant during his teasing.
I’m glad that Celestia wasn’t too fundamentally shaken from the last chapter’s info dump. And I was especially touched by Cure’s description of Luna as a “wayward hero.” Celestia definitely needs more hugs until her sister returns. And I think Cure and Luna are going to get along way too well!! The pranks will get cranked to an eleven!!
Spoilers are a good idea; READ THE CHAPTER FIRST!
Aw, the foal is only mostly dead, big difference between mostly dead and all dead.
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Well there are people that didn't like Twilight ascending and didn't continue watching, but were still involved with the fandom including the fanfics. There is quite a few talented authors here after all, that may be what kept his attention.
Thanks for the chapter
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Cure has probably realized this next bit and it is probably terrifying him to no end.
Since he can give life to the recently departed, what is stopping him from attempting to bring back to life those who are long gone?
And if he is able to do that, what difference would there be between him and the divine?
I think Cure and Discord will have a chat sooner rather than later. They’ll probably have a lot to talk about.
Who wants to bet that the twin Cure revived/remade is one of the ancestors of the mane 6?
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Fan fiction is often better and more engaging due to the virtue of simply seeing writing about what you want to see and touching on concepts barely hinted at in the original. Not to say all fan fiction is good though.
I myself have read about 70million words on this site but only watched a handful episodes and not even in order. I admit to being a "fake fan" but I enjoy what I read, there's tons of lore to delve into, magical beings with personalities, dreams, goals, drive. It's all very well done and easy to expand on.
It's also fun to just get into the head space into the characters and exploring "what ifs" as well if something different happened instead.
Well with his talent he could do a lot, from simply activating their pain receptors, thus making them feel like they're been torn apart without actually doing any damage, to actually tearing them apart while keeping them alive through it all. He could even get creative and turn them into a living sentient plant that's in constant pain or something. Or maybe change their sex, colours and overall appearance, cover their mark, then hand them over to unsavoury types that'll use them as a sex toy. The possibilities are endless really. (Though the fact I came up with so many is a little worrying )
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"Roll? Why would we roll?"
"It’s just a s-"
"Surely walking or flying would be a more effective mode of transport."
"IT’S JUST A S-"
"Unless you mean rolling forward, but then our horns would get in the way."
"IT’S JUST A......"
"A what?"
"Sorry, I was expecting you to interrupt me again. As I've been trying to say, it's just a s-"
"Perhaps if you count cartwheels as rolling that might work."
*faceslam on table*
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*bedside
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*princess (unless of course you're implying they were commissioned before Luna was banished)
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(I think that's what you meant, but I could be wrong)
I don't comment on things often enough, but this is one of the best stories I have ever read. Cure is compelling, developed (and still developing!), and interesting. You haven't forgotten side characters, you are consistently funny and I'm always interested to see where you take the story next. It's like you wrote this just for me.
Anyone can write a story, but only a master can make you care. That's you, by the way. In case that wasn't clear. You are an inspiration. All the best!
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Talk and do.
Once the serious talk/stuff is out of the way, hello mischief. Cure-Discord prank power duo, the terrorizers of the future... and the past, if they feel like it. Delivering migraines soon to your exact location!
I can't help but think about the Flood from Halo.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nyZpDKebN4M
I have to say, I realllly want to see Cure go full godmode and dissolve somepony on the cellular level, just render them into an essentially inanimate pile of dying, formless tissue. I can’t see what could possibly push him that far- Like, family being murdered? Feels tonally wrong for the story, but still. It would be incredible.
Awesome chapter. I'm actually wondering if your universe has a physical character of death. Some have depicted the mlp univers of having one, i.e. Void, Mort, (straight up just) Death. I wonder what they would say about Cures actions.
Probably all frowney faced about their numbers being messed up.. XD
Great chapter as usual, with Cure stepping up to be the alicorn of life, a step that also moves him to "godhood", something he didn't plan or want, but i do wish we could have seen more about what happened after he saved that filly
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At the very least, Discord is Cure’s biggest fan.
All this mucking up of the timeline, driving Celestia to wits end, ascending to an Alicorn, advancing Equestrian civilization technological development by centuries, throwing the entire nobility into a twist with his coronation, nearly plunging the world into war with his mere existence, and the cherry on top of disrupting the natural order of life and death…
Discord is a big fan of Cure’s work.
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Wow! Thanks for the very much appreciated compliments, folks (not just you two). I'm glad I pulled that off well. It's a very serious subject that I debated having come up in January. I don't know if everyone remembers, but Dr. Dawn had said something like, "Do exactly what I say and don't question it." I felt it was a little too heavy to throw in there, especially with the princess's arrival. Also, a quick Google search shows that 1/160 pregnancies end with stillbirth in the US. I felt that with the primarily earth pony demographic and the number he did (165) he probably wouldn't encounter that. He almost certainly would have if he was in Baltimare proper.
Regardless, I appreciate everyone taking the time to comment. I have fixed all the identified typos, I think, so thanks for that also.
Story's still going fantastic.
Prostitution is legal in your AU so it sounds like the vast majority of usual issues with it already don't exist and what victims there are can already be addressed by existing legal channels. I think you may be concerned about a problem that you've already mostly written out of your story.
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This was shown to be a special case barring him getting more magical based abilities in the future, he was able to fix the twin in this case because they were identical twins so he could just copy from one to the other, the original was still lost he just turned one into two and at this point in the process no one will ever be able to tell the difference.
Now if they were say 20 and one of them died he would not be able to pull the same trick as copying over the brain state would then just result in two of the same pony with the same memories.
If a random pony was recently deceased it would depend on if it was within his ability to repair and them not be a vegetable, IIUC his current abilities limit this to within like a couple minutes at best.
He does have a trick mentioned in this chapter, he has the ability to revert them to the condition of a previous scan which likely also means he has the ability to from scratch recreate someone from a scan if he wanted to.
Which would be like oh yeah sorry I can bring them back but they won't have any memories since their physical last year which brings up a lot of moral questions.
However alicorns have been shown to break the normal rules if he could duplicate his ability he could do the *POP* resurrection trick on others but that'd be OP even for cure and I think would violate the rules the story has set for itself as that's over in the magical abilities category not the biomancy category.
As far as writing out of this;
Could be;
Scans aren't good enough to include memories = makes vegetables. (avoids moral issues at the cost of adding a rather significant limitation but IIRC he already has issues detecting mental issues so this could actually already be the case)
or
Scans are good enough = perfect clone from last scan (lots of moral issues)
or
Memory doesn't work that way in equestria so by restoring them to health they just natively have all their memories (much less moral issues accidental duplicates still possible, similar issues to cracking the alicorn resurrection abilities)
From the story so far I think his scans are probably good enough to do that but I don't think that's a path we want to venture down due to all the implications...like him having effective save points of the memories of everyone he has scanned.
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*rolls dice*
I got a 7.
...NOT WHAT I MEANT!
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Yes this was a special case that allowed him to attempt a resurrection in the first place.
That isn’t the main crux of the question though. Furthermore, you’re also limiting Cure’s power to what he can do with his scans alone.
Suppose for a moment that as Cure’s power and experience increases he actually doesn’t need a scan to resurrect the dead.
What if all he needs is some biomass to manipulate and some sort of connection to that being’s soul. Could be a something as simple as a physical object.
Could be a one of their descendants.
Or it could even be … a memory of loved one long departed.
What would stop Cure from trying to resurrect, let’s say, his dam should something unfathomable happen to her?
Or Dawn?
Or Cyndi?
What would stop Cure from finding out just where are the limits of his power?
Cure is the Alicorn of Life. Death is the natural end of life. If Cure’s Alicorn powers give him complete mastery over Life & Death… there would be no limit to what he could do.
A 9 year old discovers he has the power to reverse death itself. And the implications of what that means absolutely terrifies him.
Cure just crossed a very murky line with what he did in the hospital. While he is the alicorn of life I am curious if there are any major metaphysical changes or complications that arise. Honestly I would laugh so hard if a major canon character is descended from the foal he revived.
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Ya I 100% agree there are maybe a few dozen or so writers on this site that have shown a similar aptitude in writing. I hope this story remains active for a long time to come. Since I think I safely say we all really enjoy the story.
This is also, either intentionally or accidentally, makes this an literary reference to the Yahoos in Gulliver's Travels.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yahoo_(Gulliver%27s_Travels)
Swift describes Yahoos as filthy with unpleasant habits, "a brute in human form,"[2] resembling human beings far too closely for the liking of protagonist Lemuel Gulliver. He finds the calm and rational society of intelligent horses, the Houyhnhnms, greatly preferable."
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I think i'm limiting it to his current shown/known abilities, it's entirely possible he could learn to do more in the future but being able to just pull them back would be OP, like the alicorns reappear in perfect health after a little while bit is OP but is limited to alicorns, I suppose the main reason I don't like it is the story is showcasing biomancy along with it's limitations and this would be just going *poof* here's your son that died 5 years ago and effectively eliminates any real possibility of loss since the mc already can't permanently die and while it wouldn't be easy for someone to kill any of his friends or family it currently could still happen, I don't think the story looks like it's going to go in the kill off his family direction but it could and that remains something he has to plan for.
Plus being able to do so would move him to at least demigod status.
It's a little surprising there were no stillborn as that's usually cause the foal died a while before the birthing process but I can see him fixing any issues short of death. Like cleft lips and malformed limbs. Also I guess he got over his worry about changing the brain as there would have been a couple born with mental problems(whipperworl?) like attention defisit disorder otherwise. Maybe he just hasnt encountered any cause ponies seem to be more healthy overall then humans. Anyway I'm happy to see new chapters being made and at such length.
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that is often the case with still births. With the unborn dying only slightly before or during the early stages of birth
I haven't been this drawn into your story since you started.
The moment between cure asking "what do I do" and Celestia saying "do it," I was actually holding my breath.
Immediately after I was thinking "what was she thinking in that exact moment?" Which was later addressed.
Then I was thinking, "what is going to happen to that filly? Will she be ok? Will she be 'better' than her sister somehow? Will 'harmony' or 'the universe' see this as an imbalance and get retribution somehow?"
I also like that Cure is advocating for Luna (best princess). I can't wait for Cure to interact with her (when that time in the story eventually comes). I would imagine Cure being one of Luna's best allies—like Cure is for Celestia now.
I got to admit, I when I first started this story, I was amazed at how slow it is (compared to other stories). But I love the attention to detail, the hugely involved world building, Cure's snark, the sense of family, taxes, the tense moments, and especially the Celestia/Cure interactions. And I couldn't imagine the cadence of this story any other way.
I am loving the story and get more drawn to it with every chapter.
Thank you for posting.
I would assert that only Cure would ever be certain which filly was resurrected and which wasn’t. Even the medics watching through the scan would end up second guessing themselves if asked, especially once everyone left the room. Unless the twins were colored differently, but I’d bet after copying one for the other, they’ll even look and smell alike. I would also bet that they will have all the “supernatural” abilities twins are said to have; finishing each other’s sentences, knowing where the other twin is, feeling what they are feeling, tell something to one twin and the other knows it, even though separated in different rooms or further…
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I suppose that all hinges on how much was used to "overwrite" the filly. And while computer programs would remain identical, living beings will deviate as time passes. One might like chocolate and the other vanilla, curly mane versus wavy, athletic versus studious, and so on.
please at least get to a point in the story where you can leave it without too much of a cliffhanger. That's one of the most annoying things is for the writer to go on hiatus when there's a major cliffhanger....
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I wouldn't call it a cliffhanger by any means. I, as a rule, avoid those if possible. That's why the chapters seem to sometimes drag a little towards the last third. Rather than stopping on a high note I try to put that, when there is one, at the mid-point or earlier so there can be resolution without having to wait an entire week being frustrated. Given the chapters have mostly been 30+ pages per, I feel completely justified not killing myself to double up.
I understand you want to know what's next - I'm with you on every story I follow, but, and apologies for being so blunt, you'll get what you get when you get it. Authors that are not on commission are doing this purely in their own spare time for free. I couldn't guess how many hours I've spent on the story so far, but I'm sure the answer is higher than a sane person should.
At least with me you'll know well in advance when a hiatus is coming up or when there's a change in my schedule and I've pledged to, should the day ever come when I stop posting, give a rough outline of where the story would have ultimately ended up.
Long story short, if a Monday rolls around, I didn't explicitly say I would not be posting a chapter, and my status is still saying "Offline" by two o'clock EST then something unexpected has happened that's completely prevented me from getting to either my computer or my tablet, which probably means I'm either in the hospital or the morgue.
wow... I guess it's similar to Haoshoku Haki from one piece
out of curiosity:
1) Well, I believed that alter egos (like Nightmare Moon and Daybreaker) would not necessarily be evil, if they were originally neutral (neither good nor evil) but are corrupted by negative emotions causing them to become evil, however they can be purified with something similar or equal to the elements of harmony, eliminating their evil, returning their neutral state back, it is better to be an ally or friend after all it is their other self, they share the same memory, similar taste and have in common such as celestia and daybreaker has in common, he loves sweets or cakes
2) since Cure is an alicorn, he may have an alter ego [or not yet?], do you think Cure will be able to communicate to his alter ego before something very ugly happens (like betrayal, corruption, etc.)? well you already know that a good human is to be paranoid
3) if cure has the alter ego, then he can freely talk about reference (like captain america...XD), joke something they know and nostalgia
The absence of serious narrative conflict continues to irk me.
there not being an antagonist that's actively working against cure feels like it's seriously missing and it removes a lot of the stakes that would normally keep me invested.
There being just enough to hint at it is pretty infuriating lmao, but I guess the writing technique is working since I'm still reading 800kish words in