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This story is a sequel to My Little Dashie: Fourth Times the Charm


A man gets transported to Equestria thanks to a particularly strange event.

After doing some pretty dastardly things, he finds himself on the run from the law and ends up in the presence of one of the most unlikeliest characters who gives him a strange deal: find out the true meaning of friendship and the magic therein within one month, or spend the rest of his life imprisoned in limbo.

With his freedom on the line, the man has to learn the value of friendship and what he learns could change his life. For better or worse, only time can tell.

- Set around +10 years from the current time-line
- Story has ceased being canon
- Story has characters from various stories (with authorization from their authors)
- Strong language from the start (i.e. lots of swearing)
- Cover art by Ephemurai
- Pictures by LuckyBreak
- Old cover art - 2
- Old cover art - 1
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List of OC's and Characters

Chapters (35)
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1+ interested person :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Add another interested person here :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

I'm a little nervous about the 'Sex' tag, but other than that, this is... Intriguing, I guess. *Tracks*

508497 I left in there as a 'just in case'. I might not include any sex, but if I do I swear it will be done tastefully. After all, stuff like that is always best left to the imagination of the readers.

Yay first. Good job by the way. You can expect me to be a regular commenter

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Thanks for the compliment. I appreciate it.

There's a tough crowd on here, though. Maybe I made a mistake listing it as 'mature' when I started. Considering some of the other stories I've read that are rated teen, this story is pretty tame... so far.

Faved! Consider me as yet another person interested. I really look forward to seeing where this story goes.

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Thanks! I'll endeavor to have a chapter up as soon as possible.

I like your story so far, and the idea is great. The cursing is really present in this story though, but I can't complain because I curse a whole lot more than this in real life. I noticed something though, it doesn't detract from the story but it was bugging me a little. The time on earth was longer than Equestria's. But other than that, I love this :pinkiehappy:. I'm gonna read the other chapters and follow this.

First. Good chapter but one thing:


" me, Scootaloo and Sweetie Pie built it up real nice."

why did you say Sweetie Pie? Isnt it Sweetie Belle?:rainbowhuh:

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Yeah, Sweetie Belle. Thanks for catching that one. I'll change it.

Really great story dude. I noticed a few spelling errors though. I don't want to come off as a grammer nazi but I want to point out that you have "me" instead of "my" in some places. I forget the other ones but I just want to point that out because eventually some grammer nazis are gonna comment on this story about grammer mistakes. I get a little annoyed by them so I just want to help you. :pinkiesmile:

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I've noticed them too. I keep meaning to fix it, but I keep forgetting. I don't mind pointing out spelling mistakes, and thanks for reading.

"Then maybe you would rather use Linux?"
I lost my composure in a hysterical fit of laughter.

Ah, one thing that you should know, it isn't Pinky Pie, it's Pinkie Pie. Aside from that, awesome job on yet another chapter.

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Oh yeah! Thanks for that. If I have time, I'll fix it.

Fixed a few errors, the wrong spelling for Pinkie Pie, and rewrote a few sentences so they flow better.

Just wanted to put that out there.

First.
But you kinda made the "Pinky" mistake again...just sayin.
Anyway very good chapter, you got the accents just right :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

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I had to hurry it a little, so it kind of cuts off. Thanks for pointing that mistake out again - force of habit for me. :pinkiesmile:

I thought when Granny Smith was talking, you spelled some words wrong. But I looked at the keyboard and see that you did the mispellings on purpose. As for AppleJack, instead of using the word "I", you should use "Ah". I notice a lot of the people who write with AJ dialogue do this. Also "I'm" turns into ""Ah'm". Anyway, funny chapter. Do I smell a crush from the Changling. And setting up Forest and Pinkie? Oh you are kinky, sir. By the way, if you are doing a sex scene, which horrifies me, let me know. I can help you, though I'll probably rip my eyes out after finishing.

Edit: I found something that you looked over. It's no big deal but here it is. Then we took the tools form the tool shed and plodded over to the Clubhouse. I think you meant "from"

573325 Thanks for pointing out the spelling mistakes - again (really, thank you). As for substituting 'I' with 'Ah' for Applejack's speech, I think that it's a moot necessity. People who come here are already very familiar with AJ's accent, and I doubt I need to remind them. That being said, as a writer in real life (yes, I write somewhat professionally, although most of my Real Life work is boring Technical Documents) there are some habits that have become too ingrained into me and it's very difficult for me to stop. For example the Pinky vs Pinkie.

As for sex, if I do, I think I'll create a separate story and then link it over. When the time comes - IF the time comes (highly doubtful), I'll forward it to you.

I CLAIM THE ALLMIGHTY TITLE OF FIRST COMMENT ON THE 5TH CHAPTER!!!!!:pinkiegasp:
also ...... rarity is more devious then i thought...:raritywink:
and as for pinkie and the hole bed thing at the end well...... thats just pinkie being pinkie :pinkiesmile:

Damn, I'm ususally first,,,

Anyway good chapter. Anyway FOREST CAN RUN. I don't know if you meant to put a reference there or not but it reminds me of "Run forest Run" from the movie Forest Gump

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Good catch. In this chapter there are several 'Easter-Eggs'. Things that have a slight reference to places, events, and names from Earth. The Forest reference was one of them...

I did it on purpose.

You my friend deserves a moustache for this excellent story! :moustache:

Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

"And that's the problem with magic."
Oh you smart cookie, I see what you did there! Putting the name of the title in the text. :rainbowlaugh:

And man, that whole talk about Brian in the hotel. Oh you...you're gonna make me ink! :trollestia:

Oh my god, just saw this one. "Where was the fire, Forest?" You have to stop doing that, it makes me laugh out loud, making my parents thinking I'm insane.

Are you setting Pinkie up? It sounds a little kinky witht the horse on horse action but still. Dude, you are making me laugh.

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Thanks for the positive feedback!

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Yeah, there's a few others as well. Can't wait to see Brian's take.
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Honestly, I am starting to want to end my story already because I am just so mad. My inspriation to write the story is slowly fading and I have a great idea for another story but I don't have time to write it. I kind of want to take a break from these stories I write and focus on this crossover idea I have. Anyway, time to kick it into high gear. Oh and thanks for that awesome set up at the end with Trixie. I wan't sure on when to escalate things once and for all.

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Uh oh. What have I done!?

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It's nothing on you! Anyway, I hope that my ending won't screw up your story too much. :twilightblush:

592338 That was an extremely strong chapter. I've been writing a happy-go-lucky rom-com, but wow.

Just wow.

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Thanks! I was waiting for the push I needed to put that one out there. By the way, are you a fan of Gears of War? :pinkiehappy:

Dude, that whole morning with Pinkie made me fall off my chair. You captured her essence perfectly. Also, yet again, you set up ideas for my next chapter. Thank you. Oh and this part made me fucking roll on the floor.

Yes, Satan? I wanted to say, but I knew better, "Yes, Crystal?"

I sense that crystal likes forest, but then again that's just me. :rainbowlaugh:

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I envisioned Crystal's voice to be somewhat on par with Janice from Friends. So, the next time you happen to read her lines, just imagine it in this voice.

D'awwwwww, at that Pinkie moment:heart::heart:

Also, i know this has been said in the story at least 10 times but Forest Fire is a freaking epic name

Lol, his full name is 'Forest Fire'? Oh you! :ajsmug: and will you have Forest hook up with Pinkie already! I want MOAR!
I was wondering when you would get Scootaloo in here. She is my favorite after all. Oh and when it came to the part at the hospital, I thought you had Brian killed. Everyone keeps thinking I killed him when I clearly stated I didn't. He was having a bad nightmare.

That was beautiful...I love it! :pinkiesmile:

i wonder what celestias gonna do.... but anyway forest needs to get in there allready :rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

Glad you guys like it! :pinkiehappy:

deathtap! Brian just died in fourth times the charm(sniff):fluttercry:

628096 I just saw.

So sad. :pinkiesad2:

Wow this story is really interesting. I'm definitely going to read more of this.:twilightsmile:

This was very good, lots of emotion conveyed in the right way. Nice Job. But why does this have so many dislikes? Seriously it's a good story. :rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh:

Dude, no. An Applejack relationship! NOOOO! I want Pinkie! Ah whatever, I like em both. Oh and so much sadness dude. I almost teared up. Did you make this sad to get payback on me? Because I think you have succeeded. :fluttercry:

637831 Well, it's probably because they are expecting something else. Not to worry, though. Dislikes don't really bother me, and I like writing, so it's not as if I get affected by a longer red bar.
637887 We'll see how it goes... :scootangel: And no, by the time you wrote your chapter, I had already written the parts about Spike and Fluttershy. Most of the time was trying to get the interaction right without being too repetitious. I was going to use another chapter for Spike's story, but I decided to combine the two sad things into one chapter. Get it out of the way, kinda thing.

Dammit Trollestia. I hope he gets to see Pinkie again :fluttercry:

But this sentance doesn't make sense to me:

"We walked together have a 'race',"

Did I miss something there?:rainbowhuh:

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