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Another Army Brony

One of the few Bronies in the Army, I decided to try my hand at writing down my ideas. It's been over 4 years now, and I found that I enjoy this.


Everybody has wondered what it would be like to go somewhere else, to just leave all of their problems behind and make a new life for themselves somewhere else. Nobody ever stops to think ‘Hey? What if I actually did go somewhere new and I missed this place more?’ No, nobody ever says that, because we are sure that our fantasy worlds are the bees’ knees and we would never want to return. Let me tell you, that is not always the case. Let’s rewind and take it from the top, shall we?

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Ok, this is pretty damn good.

I'm glad you like it. I'll be honest, I was worried that this would bomb horribly.

Hmmm another HiE story, *reads description*, seems promising.* Looks at how many chapters* 1, Let me guess Its about the average 1,047 words, *Sees 12,296*........*Favorites*

A 24-hour guard shift is a great time to write. Sleep Deprivation + Case O' Redbull = awesome chapter.
I'll be doing my best to keep every chapter up to this standard.

This. This is incredible, take it from someone who has read basically every Human in Equestria story. Perfect and original plot, basically non-existant errors, perfect sentence structure! If there could be a "Perfect" HiE story, without a doubt its this one. I hope to see more of this in the future. This one is hands-down a 5/5, Thumbed-up and Favorited.

A normal HIE story but it so well written. Can't wait to see what else you do.


Wow. The positive response to this chapter is overwhelming...I had this idea kicking around in my head for the longest time, but I only just started writing it on Friday.

@Flutterguy_6996: Perfect? Non-existant errors, and perfect sentence structure? Surely this cannot be for me, Good Sir. If you want to see how far I've come as a writer, check out the other Fic I was writing. It gets better towards the end, but it sure started off rough. To go from that, to having people tell me I have "Perfect" anything is mind-numbing. Thank you all for your support and votes, and rest assured that I will hold the rest of the story to this same standard.

That was thoroughly amazing. 5/5 for everything. Plot was great too. Cannot wait to read more :heart::ajsmug:

*Oh, look, another HiE fic... What? 17 thumbs up? Better give it a try. WHAT? 12,000 words?! Yeessss...*

Added to read later.

762490 Sweet, do you guard as in MP or Something else. (PS. Born and raised in a mil. family)

Oh yes, I'm watching this with severe interest.

Do want.

I'm not an MP, I am an Intel analyst, and I was pulling charge of quarters duty as I wrote this

Is the title a typo? Or is it not "A Dream That Wasn't?"

It started off as a working title, but it fit nicely, so I kept it. It refers not to the author's state of consciousness, but rather to the event as a whole. What at first seems like a dream come true turns out to be more of a nightmare in the end. But all good things in time, this will become apparent in later chapters.

If anypony has a suggestion for the title, feel free to post it our send it to me in a message. If it strikes my fancy, I'll use it post haste

Nevermind, I see what you were referring to. :pinkiecrazy:

Hahahaha! The single leg over! I love it! :rainbowlaugh:

Hehehe. I assume you get the reference, based on your reaction.
PRT all the way, yo.

Haha. Yup. Guess you're not the only brony in the army after all, huh? :rainbowwild: Sorry, I couldn't resist. :derpytongue2:

No worries. It's good to know I'm not alone out there.

And for anybody else who cares, the next chapter is sitting pretty at about 6,100 words right now. It should be finished and uploaded no later than Friday, and it likely going to be the same length as this chapte...roughly.might be a bit longer at this rate.

dear god... this is amazing!

Heh...I'm glad you all like this. I was honestly expecting this story to bomb horribly. I can only hope that the next chapter can live up to your expectations...I'd hate to disappoint all of you. Oh well, I suppose time will tell.:pinkiehappy:

776857 Well, as long as you think the story is good, thats all that counts lol. The rest of use are just bonuses so to speak. I look forward to the next chapter. Though, I do have one question. In this story is colgate joy by any chance?

Indeed. This will be explained and elaborated on in the next chapter, but "Colgate" was the high school nickname for Joy, between her and another of the side characters.

776872 I figured so lol. Cant wait till the next chapter. Have a good one and thanks for servin this great country of ours.

I just hope I can make the next chapter live up to expectations. And as far as serving goes, it is my pleasure to fight for the people I love. Thank you for the appreciation.

I can only hope the Deams show up soon.

Dammit. I can't believe I didn't see that before...thanks for pointing that out.

It's okay, though; my mommy says I'm special:pinkiecrazy:

But you did, I think.. it looks like Dubs Rewatcher pointed it out and you took note of it a while back. It's late and, truth be told, I can't remember whether I've read this yet, and if I have, whether it's any good, but seeing as we're having a (sort of) discussion over a single mistake, it sounds like you can't be going too far off the rails as far as spelling and grammar go.

That's what gets me about it...I spent so long agonizing over the story, and I completely forgot about the title. I thought Dubs Rewatcher was referring to the fact that no every word was capitalized properly...Gah...I need a drink.

Also, why is there no *facehoof* emoticon? I need one right about now

Chapter 2 should be up Friday or Saturday. It is currently about 8,500 words long, and it looks like it will be as long as, if not longer than, the first chapter.

Just thought you should know.

That makes me extremely happy. It's rare to see an HiE story that is written well that also has long chapters :twilightsheepish:

I'm glad everyone is enjoying this story. I'm really "putting myself into it", as it were. If the last week has been any indication, I would not be remiss to say a chapter per week would optimistically possible.

If anypony is interested in "Getting a look at" the next chapter, click this thing.

A "Sneak Peek" at the next chapter


But anywho, as you can see it is just over 10K words at this point, and I am only just beginning. I'll have to break the chapter off a bit sooner than I wanted to, otherwise I wouldn't be publishing anything for another week or three.Fret not though, I won't leave you hanging, it will be a smooth scene change. I figure I'll wrap it up tomorrow and send it to the Magnificent Pacific Penguin to be scrubbed for errors, and it should be suitable for human consumption by Friday or so.

Chapter two is DONE!

It is 14,398 words prior to editing. It should be edited and published in less than 24 hours.:pinkiehappy:

Good thing I have no social life...that would really interfere with my writing.:twilightblush:

Really loving this! :pinkiehappy:

I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I am having a blast writing this, and it's good to know that the effort I put into it is appreciated.


Is it intentional for the second half of the fiction to be in italics? Starting after the Pinkie Pie scene, of course. Because I find it ironic with this statement at the end:

"...pretty much the same, but with a LOT more italics,"


Dammit...missed one...

And, fixed. Thanks for pointing it out

I liking this story so far. :pinkiehappy:

Keep up the good work!

Indubitably. As long as it remains fun for me, I'll keep writing. And as long as people enjoy what I write, it is fun for me.

Lol, this is fun to read Keep the lengthy chapters comin boyo!

I am definitly liking this. Also, Nurse Joy? I wonder where that came from?:unsuresweetie:

Iron Sides? Wouldn't happen to be in the 1AD, would you?

Nurse Joy...it should seem familiar. It is a Pokemon reference.

Good god I think I am getting terminal Diabeetus from imagining all the stuff that happened. And the heart attack scene was histarical. By the end of it I was like....

795141 1AD? Not to familiar with military terms lol. I am only 16 so... yeah. The name itself came from one of the first american built steam locomotive... win name though isnt it? lol

Indeed, it is. Old Ironsides is also the name of the First Armored Division, a unit that I am currently part of.

That was pretty much my reaction through writing the entire thing. I'll be taking a day off, but I'll begin the next chapter on Sunday.

Hell, even I can't wait to see what happens next.

This chapter must have been sponsored by the word Evil, considering how much the word got used.

795413 Really? Thats sweet! So you get to drive tanks?! I am guessing the Abrams right? We need a salute emoticon...

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