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Another Army Brony


One of the few Bronies in the Army, I decided to try my hand at writing down my ideas. It's been over 4 years now, and I found that I enjoy this.

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Inspired by Metallica's "One" music video, From the perspective of the victim.

What is the worst fate that you can imagine? Being buried alive? Being paralyzed, unable to move? Having to watch as everything you love withers and dies before your eyes? Every one of these fates is terrible in its own way; but when you combine them all, the result is greater than the sum of the parts; a perfect storm of tragedy and fear.

That morning, I'd kissed my wife goodbye and told her I loved her, same as always. I'd boarded the trolley to the Gem mines in the eastern sector, same as always. I punched in the clock and boarded the elevator, heading deep into the bowels of the granite titans. Same as always. Something happened after that though, something terrible and tragic. The last thing I remember is the sound of the elevator doors clanging shut and the sudden lurch as we began our descent; the last sliver of daylight slipping away as we plunged to the abyss.

Here's a little one-shot story that I got the idea for from listening to Metallica's "One" and watching the corresponding music video.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 20 )

Well this is..... something? .....Maybe..... or eventually..... although Bradley Tenpenny sounds more like a Fallout name then a Pony name...

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It will be fleshed out rather significantly in the following chapter. Right now, I was just trying to set the stage and get the idea out of my head.

Bradley and Tenpenny are both kinds of nails, hence the nickname...lol

1570932 I did not know that.... now I do

Hey everybody, sorry about that. I didn't mean to publish the chapter just yet, as it's not finished / polished just yet. Didn't realize this until after a cup of coffee, apologies for the false alarm.

:derpytongue2::facehoof:

Next chapter is up and pending an edit. Just shy of 6k words. Might be up tonight.

.......well that was horrific

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How so? Poorly written, or something else? This is my first stab at a "dark" story, so any feedback I get is welcome.

1588568 no its well writen and all just what they did to the guy was horrific

1588585
This is quite true. To play devil's advocate for a minute, they aren't aware that he is anything more than a self-sustaining piece of meat.

If they knew he could feel, they'd never have suffered him to live.

Damn, just... Goddamn that's depressing. When do you think you'll be able to get the next chapter out?

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That's a bit hard to nail down, but I'll be working on it this weekend. I'll see how far it goes, since I'm currently in Overdrive to get A Dream finished in time to be edited, reviewed, and formatted for publication by June. :twilightoops:

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It's cool, take all the time you need.

2013676

Yeah, I need to in order to capture the essence of the story. And I need to even more so because I'm sick as the dickens. :pinkiesick:

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I hope you get better soon, mate.

2019855

I know what you mean, I was like that a few weeks ago.

2020062

So...You're the one who got me sick. :trixieshiftright:

have you read the book Johnny Got His Gun? or watched the movie that Metallica now owns?

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