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You keep sayin' somethin' about bein' male and "human" before you showed up in Appleloosa. I'm not sure what you're talkin' about, stranger, but I can certainly tell you're pretty darn mad about what happened. Sit down a spell, will you? Tell me more about this "Trask" feller...

Cover art by Trinityinyang.

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Magnificent Megan... I see. I see all too well. :facehoof:

Is there a first post yet :rainbowderp: *look left then right* Il just take first post *starts to breath in*
Pinkie: twitchy tail twitchy tail
Suddenly a flying anvil appears

I don't know what to make of this story so far. I'll keep looking at it, however.:pinkiesmile:

I'm not a normal reader of second person fics, but this one does seem to have some possibilities to it. My only complaint is that there's a lot of confusion happening while I'm reading this.

One fix: nicknack should knickknack

Wow... I really feel sorry for this guy, That transformation was just so degrading, and from the looks of things he's going to have a hart time adjusting to this.

This chapter really helped to boost my faith in this story, please make more!:pinkiehappy:

I'm really liking this :pinkiehappy:

Good to hear it! I know you're something of a connoisseur of GB fics, so I appreciate your feedback.
Nice catch. Fixed it in an edit.
Why, thank you.

Stay tuned, everyone: next chapter will be posted tomorrow.

2022835 Awesome, I'm getting a reputation! :pinkiehappy:

This story is enthralling. My only complaint is the short chapters, other than that I like it. Glad the main protagonist isn't elated about magically being in equestria and is reacting realistically.

I like the level headedness of our main character with this situation, and that sand monster was a nice little twist. If I had to say any way to improve it would be to lengthen the chapters and give us more description - like really get into the head of our character and see what he's going through.

Thanks! Good to see that the protagonist went over well. I'll be sure to post longer chapters, too.

I'll keep the internal dialogue thing in mind--there's some strange things in store for our hero(ine), so I'll definitely play around more with her reactions.

Nice story so far, looking forward to future chapters. :pinkiehappy:

Another great chapter, and some more drama for our main character to face. Love it!:pinkiehappy:

I'm not sure what's going on but i find myself amused. continue please, good sir.

Thank you! Also, here's a subliminal message for you to continue your story.
A Canadian approves of this chapter? Good, this is vital to my plans.
And continue I shall. Thanks!

Well thank you for the subliminal message, and I will continue my story, that's the plan at least. If you go on my profile it'll explain more.:derpytongue2:

Once I have secured enough contacts in Canada, I will be in a good political position for the inevitable Canadian-led world government.

All bizarre humor aside, thanks for keeping up with the story. Hopefully I can get the next chapter up reasonably soon.

Sonora, you're drunk go home. ugh mares these days can't hold their salt in at all.

Well, that escalated quickly. :rainbowderp:

The God of Salt demands the sacrifice of ones credibility. All intelligence will be offered to Lord Sodium and devoured for all to see! :flutterrage:

The God of Salt made my day, good job. :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, she needs to work her way up there by practicing with some saltlick tabs.
Everything escalates quickly in the Equestrian Wild West.
The God of Salt hears your praises, devout mortal. You shall be rewarded with plentiful coupons for canisters of sodium chloride.

2132444 We thank you, oh great salted one. May you forever cover the surfaces of french fries, pretzels, and roads in winter.

Don't forget about the salt in the ocean! We'd have no fish if there was no salt water. :rainbowwild:

2132483 *scoff* When have the oceans ever been important? :derpytongue2:

Cease your bickering, mortals! Or the God of Salt will take away the delicious substance around the rim of your margaritas!

Now that's what I call interesting! If only your chapters were a bit longer.

Wow, everything in this chapter screamed win. I loved the crushing realization and the ending was both hilarious and also a little intriguing to see his reactions to this. My only downside is that I feel you can make these longer.

On an unrelated note, her drunkenness pleases the God of Salt. :twilightsmile:

oh my gosh the ending was hilarious

I don't think Princess Celestia will help, she most likely can do anything but having no contact to the rest of Equestria makes it even more difficult.

Regarding chapter length, I'm experimenting with what works best--I want to do weekly updates, but it might be worth it to increase my minimum chapter length. How's a 2,000 word minimum sound?
Good to see the ending tidbit went over so well. As you might guess, Sonora is going to have to wrestle with some complicated feelings in the future.
Celestia has a nasty habit of not being around when the crap hits the fan.

Aw dang Sonora, you better go take a cold shower. Make sure you're facing the shower head the whole time, though.

Don't strain yourself to meet some sort of minimum chapter length. Write however long feels natural. A weekly update schedule is more than enough. :raritywink:

Sadly there isn't any cold water in Appleloosa, thanks to Trask. Bastard!
Alright, thanks. Just curious as to what my readers preferred.

Really great story. Keep up the good work.
Question though, where did you get the idea for salt as an alcoholic substance?

Thanks for the comment! As for your question, in "Over a Barrel" a salt saloon is seen, complete with a salt-drunk pony.

Huh... I am going to have to re-watch that episode.
Thanks for the heads up.

Ha! Great chapter, I didn't see the ending coming at all o.o

Thanks! I like to throw my readers a curveball sometimes.

im wondering what the bartender is doing the whole time this is going on

The conversation with Discord is in a dream sequence. I'll make that more clear.

Drunk and passed out in a bar while having a dream about Discord...


Am I the only one who imagines Trask as Saruman from Lord of the Rings?

They are both evil wizards, it makes sense right?

A good comparison. But Trask will never be quite as awesome as Christopher Lee.

Hey, it happens from time to time.

i cant read this. horrible memories of that shit story Homestuck keeps popping into my mind because of the second person... or third person. i dont care

I don't like Homestuck either. (No offense to anyone who does, however).

Ordinarily, I don't write second-person stories, but I find this format to be an interesting experiment. The other reason for the second-person format is due to the story's origins on /mlp/'s transformation story thread. (where second person stories are popular)

2210083 hey if you imagine trask as Marilyn Manson it make funnier.

:unsuresweetie: Poor Sonora. No one's sense of masculinity is made to withstand that kind of affront.

And so Sonora comes across the inevitable pains of flirtation... we shed a tear for him.

The story's really beginning to pick up now, and I'm getting more and more invested in what will come. Please keep it up.

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