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You keep sayin' somethin' about bein' male and "human" before you showed up in Appleloosa. I'm not sure what you're talkin' about, stranger, but I can certainly tell you're pretty darn mad about what happened. Sit down a spell, will you? Tell me more about this "Trask" feller...

Cover art by Trinityinyang.

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 219 )

Magnificent Megan... I see. I see all too well. :facehoof:

Is there a first post yet :rainbowderp: *look left then right* Il just take first post *starts to breath in*
Pinkie: twitchy tail twitchy tail
Suddenly a flying anvil appears
CLUNK!!!!!:applejackconfused:
Ouch

One fix: nicknack should knickknack

I'm really liking this :pinkiehappy:

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Good to hear it! I know you're something of a connoisseur of GB fics, so I appreciate your feedback.
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Nice catch. Fixed it in an edit.
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Why, thank you.

Stay tuned, everyone: next chapter will be posted tomorrow.

This story is enthralling. My only complaint is the short chapters, other than that I like it. Glad the main protagonist isn't elated about magically being in equestria and is reacting realistically.

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Thanks! Good to see that the protagonist went over well. I'll be sure to post longer chapters, too.

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I'll keep the internal dialogue thing in mind--there's some strange things in store for our hero(ine), so I'll definitely play around more with her reactions.

Nice story so far, looking forward to future chapters. :pinkiehappy:

I'm not sure what's going on but i find myself amused. continue please, good sir.

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Thank you! Also, here's a subliminal message for you to continue your story.
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A Canadian approves of this chapter? Good, this is vital to my plans.
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And continue I shall. Thanks!

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Well thank you for the subliminal message, and I will continue my story, that's the plan at least. If you go on my profile it'll explain more.:derpytongue2:

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Once I have secured enough contacts in Canada, I will be in a good political position for the inevitable Canadian-led world government.

All bizarre humor aside, thanks for keeping up with the story. Hopefully I can get the next chapter up reasonably soon.

Sonora, you're drunk go home. ugh mares these days can't hold their salt in at all.

Well, that escalated quickly. :rainbowderp:

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Yeah, she needs to work her way up there by practicing with some saltlick tabs.
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Everything escalates quickly in the Equestrian Wild West.
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The God of Salt hears your praises, devout mortal. You shall be rewarded with plentiful coupons for canisters of sodium chloride.

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Don't forget about the salt in the ocean! We'd have no fish if there was no salt water. :rainbowwild:

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Cease your bickering, mortals! Or the God of Salt will take away the delicious substance around the rim of your margaritas!

Now that's what I call interesting! If only your chapters were a bit longer.

oh my gosh the ending was hilarious

I don't think Princess Celestia will help, she most likely can do anything but having no contact to the rest of Equestria makes it even more difficult.

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Regarding chapter length, I'm experimenting with what works best--I want to do weekly updates, but it might be worth it to increase my minimum chapter length. How's a 2,000 word minimum sound?
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Good to see the ending tidbit went over so well. As you might guess, Sonora is going to have to wrestle with some complicated feelings in the future.
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Celestia has a nasty habit of not being around when the crap hits the fan.

Aw dang Sonora, you better go take a cold shower. Make sure you're facing the shower head the whole time, though.

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Don't strain yourself to meet some sort of minimum chapter length. Write however long feels natural. A weekly update schedule is more than enough. :raritywink:

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Sadly there isn't any cold water in Appleloosa, thanks to Trask. Bastard!
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Alright, thanks. Just curious as to what my readers preferred.

Really great story. Keep up the good work.
Question though, where did you get the idea for salt as an alcoholic substance?

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Thanks for the comment! As for your question, in "Over a Barrel" a salt saloon is seen, complete with a salt-drunk pony.

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Huh... I am going to have to re-watch that episode.
Thanks for the heads up.

Ha! Great chapter, I didn't see the ending coming at all o.o

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Thanks! I like to throw my readers a curveball sometimes.

im wondering what the bartender is doing the whole time this is going on

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The conversation with Discord is in a dream sequence. I'll make that more clear.

Am I the only one who imagines Trask as Saruman from Lord of the Rings?
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They are both evil wizards, it makes sense right?

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A good comparison. But Trask will never be quite as awesome as Christopher Lee.

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Hey, it happens from time to time.

i cant read this. horrible memories of that shit story Homestuck keeps popping into my mind because of the second person... or third person. i dont care

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I don't like Homestuck either. (No offense to anyone who does, however).

Ordinarily, I don't write second-person stories, but I find this format to be an interesting experiment. The other reason for the second-person format is due to the story's origins on /mlp/'s transformation story thread. (where second person stories are popular)

2210083 hey if you imagine trask as Marilyn Manson it make funnier.

:unsuresweetie: Poor Sonora. No one's sense of masculinity is made to withstand that kind of affront.

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Relax, Sonora can take it...probably.

Anyway, as a quick note, sorry this update came a bit late. Additionally, I likely won't be able to post much in the next week due to a vacation. (Who knows, though? Maybe my muse and my bluetooth keyboard will pull through...)

Considering the fact that Sonora can remember dreams much better than as a human, I am lead to believe that ponies (or maybe just unicorns) have better memory and dream recall. I wish I could remember dreams better, the dreams I can remember are so awesome, plus it can show things my subconscious wants me to know, or just to mess with reality because it can do that in dreams.

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For me, I generally find that the best way to have vivid or lucid dreams is to wake up early in the morning, then go back to sleep for an hour.

I don't have a problem with short chapters, I just wish you could update more frequently. The suspense is killing me.

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For the time being, I think the best format is weekly 2,000 word updates. As I said before though, I might not be able to post a chapter next week due to a vacation.

I really don't much care for the 2nd person point of view, but you've done a good job with this. It's very well put together.

Unlike half the people commenting on this story, I actually like this second person narration. It's a very unique angle and the subject matter is certaintly entertaining. I look forward to seeing more.

Finally got a chance to read... Once more, fun stuff!
I really like the list of possible injuries in the waiver - It's got a cheerful rhythm and facetiousness that sounds like it's right out of the show. You've really nailed that sensibility.
But now the adventure begins!
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nice story looking forward to next chapter

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Thanks all! Progress is slow but steady--been dealing with some annoying stuff this week, but by the end of this weekend the next chapter should finally be up.
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Yeah, I'd been shooting for that feeling. Glad to hear it hit the mark!

I'm drunk! You don't have an excuse! :raritydespair:

Ill have you know this is by far my favorite r63 story at the moment and am excited to see more progress.

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Considering the tough competition, that's pretty flattering to hear. Thanks!

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