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So, Cure is saying he could become a Slender Pony.
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Honestly, if a little kid figures that out right away I would probably be MORE impressed, if anything. They would definitely get a high-hoof from Cure while he nods saying "Cheating. Well done, young Padawan."
I do love how it has taken half a million words to describe 3-4 months of in story stuff. This isn't a criticism (at least not to me) just something I find oddly amusing.
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Oh god yes! That would be really cool to see!
I love how you're using the realistic approach to life in how he learns things, especially with the flight training. It's a bit a fresh of breath air!
I'm just glad to read what you have here.
I dunno how you do it, cranking out so many words a week, but I imagine this basically writes itself when it's not key events.
Anyway, I love what cure is doing here, and it's really fun to see how he can mess with Everypony.
Mentioning nightmare moon and his coloration change made me wonder if he'd ever consider a Nightmare disguise on Nightmare Night. (I definitely wouldn't mind reading about a second nightmare night in the same story)
Thanks for the update!
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Gah, I was thinking about that video too : )
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My only criticism is that foals don't actually behave like ones. They all are way too rational and reasonable. Gosh, I want them be that way irl too. Still, ponies, so who knows : ) Maybe they evolved rational thinking : ))
Still, enjoying the story immensely, and trying to patiently wait for more! Cure is totally OP, is aware that he's OP, and still tries to enjoy his second chances. While somehow being adorable and wholesome, with a tiniest hint of body horror : )
I'm not sure you specified what the Baltimore appointments were for. I assume the spa?
Glacial just asked Cure to do her.
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Are you sure you have mushroom for it?
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He missed an opportunity to mess with them by saying he could pretend to be the sphinx, which he could. "You could be a girl if you want?" "What? No. Just female. I'll always be a boy.. at least till I'm a man." Thanks for the chapter! ^v^
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If I could fly like that? Hell, you'd never see me below 500 feet again...
I do hope he tries to keep the foal toys on the down-low or every family will start pestering him, heh, "Can you make just one more?" Needless to say, his little sister is going to be the world's most spoiled sibling.
Oh lord, it just occurred to me... If Cure used his cheat power on a map, and he had a sufficient understanding of where he was, he could effectively have a map on his mental 'heads-up display'. Little dude would be a pro at orienteering.
Nice chapter as always. I really like the slice of life moments in this story, it brings out the color in the story. It's a bit heavy on exposition sometimes with explanations on what's being changed, some biology-fiction-voodoo but overall pretty good. I have only skipped past a few sections of a few chapters so doing well so far! The point being that the story at large is worth reading through that for me. And yes, I acknowledge lots of people like that exposition.
Either way, glad to see this nice little window into Cure, Glacial, and Drift's friendship progressing. Seems like they're spending some more time together and actually getting to know each other better instead of a blind crush that Cure had on Glacial. Always a good sign.
awesome chapter drift and glacial will never let him go after this day and make dawn awfully jealous
It would be cool if Cure created a pet, To guard the house and all that. Dozen little spiders scouting the area
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"And thats how it really happened Princess. I tried to save them, but the Adorabeetees progressed far too quickly." Cure finishes solemnly before the court.
Raising an eyebrow, Celestia responds "I find it hard to believe you were so adorable it was fatal."
Quickly changing into a slightly less adorable version of the bunny form, Cure says "As you can see, it-" *thud* *thud* *thud* *thud* *thud* *thud* *thud* *thud*. Slowly panning his head around, Cure observes with panicked eyes the crumpled bodies of the court staff, guards and even Celestia herself, all clutching their chests in apparent cuteness overload. As the situation sinks in, the only thing that comes to his mind is "fuck", before shutting down, causing him to pass out.
But the situation was far worse than even he realised, as there was a viewing crystal broadcasting the court proceedings all across the country. The loss of lifes were innumerable, and so few survived that the pony race soon died off. And thus, the once great civilization of Equestria, was defeated accidentally by 1 fuzzy pony.
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missing a comma between them
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Like, if I’m out flying and I don’t know pegasus stuff, I’m probably going to look dumb.
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Captain America: "Could this be 1 of my people?"
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Can't help but feel like this was partly inspired by 1 of my previous comments
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After reading this chapter, I get the feeling this is a Toy Story reference
True, I guess patience don't come as easy to some. But if the story is awesome enough, I am willing to wait for extended periods for them. They are always worth it!
The trick is to having many of it so it won't feel as empty in between.
On to the main comment:
What Cure is doing with his Message and Send... it sounds like something a bad actor or party could abuse very much.
If Cure does find a way to recharge the crystals without the interaction of any biological creature or otherwise, I could see this new wave of psychological terrorist attack used by the Changelings easily
Awesome chapter. And for me your upload schedule and amount is good!
Doesn't Cure's changes include the cold resistance? I seem to remember that being one of the reasons/concerns not to change too many of Solar's cells before he left for training. It was also mentioned about Dawn when he gave her the Hearth's Warming gifts that she wouldn't need the coat he had made for her.
"Well, you see we had this whole family conversation about ponies with big smiles showing up around town out of nowhere, for reasons."
It's fun to see Cure's friends reactions to his more extensive abilities now that he is being more open about them. I'm surprised he hasn't told them about channeling magic through their cutie marks and such yet if he trust them all with the horn thing. Then again, they don't all have their marks yet so it probably wouldn't have come up.
I have to agree about pestering authors for more chapters having the opposite effect. There are much better ways to go about it anyways. Politely asking if there are plans to continue a story that hasn't been updated in a while is likely to be taken better by an author who has gotten busy with life. Nothing hits creative desires harder than expectations to produce on the spot.
Some of the messages I've seen to authors make me sympathize with the ones that decide to abandon the fandom altogether. Even if their works are sorely missed or left unfinished. I'm sure such demands come from the very small minority, but they do tend to be much more vocal. If that's the majority of the feed back an author gets its easy to see how someone would be discouraged.
On that note, thanks for sharing your writing with us, your work is appreciated! Since you shared your typical chapter creation process, how many hours of work usually goes into each chapter? Most authors that manage to post so consistently tend to have much shorter chapters. I could see the slice of life style of this story making it easier to just let the writing flow along without having to plan each scene as rigidly as some other story styles. I imagine it still takes quite a time investment though.
No idea who the hell's asking for more. I mean, 10k-15k chapters how often again? Once or twice a week? Maybe more? Most stories I'm following update at a slower pace and with half the chapter length. Actual insanity. I have no idea how you do it.
I'm more worried if anything! Drink some water, relax your shoulders, and unclench your jaw. Take a coffee break or something. Holy fuck, dude...
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Gotta ask, whenever I say “can’t wait to see more” or “hope to see more soon!” On stories does that give the pressure feeling? Those are kinda my closers as to hopefully encouraging the author and showing that it’s a very enjoyable and amazing story, thus if it gives that feeling I’d like to know from an author’s standpoint.
Other than that question glad we get to see the friendship of glacier, drift, and cure again seeing as we don’t see em as often as dawn. Really looking forward to the later years in cures life! All though unless the years kinda do same ol same ol as ever other chapter
unlikely as your doing a great job adding flavor to days in cures life!then won’t be seeing that for awhile, so keep up the awesome work mate!Thanks again LFOD for another amazing chapter update. If it hasn't been said by anyone earlier I wanted to thank you for all the time and hard work you've put in thus far into making this awesome and well written story for all of us to enjoy. This story has to be my all time favorite slice of life MLP story that I've had the pleasure to read, with interesting plot, well developed OC characters, and world building. I wish you the best of luck with writing your next chapters and that things stay stress free for you in IRL. Cheers!
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It's kind of difficult for me to say, but I would think that things like "Can't wait to see more" are perfectly fine. None, and I really mean that, none of that stuff bothers me. Any pressure I've felt is purely self-imposed. I don't want to sound callous, but my personal stance to the whole thing is that I can walk away from the story whenever I want. That's one of the reasons why I emphasized that I'm writing the story mainly for my own enjoyment. To me it's like a big 'ol CYOA, even though I didn't use some template or whatever.
I just know that there have been some good stories I've enjoyed where the author specifically cited burnout and pressure as reasons why they took a break. Many, sadly, never returned to writing. Or they did, then burned out again shortly thereafter.
There were some questions about how long a chapter takes and, typically, I would say 8-10 hours, probably. Some go insanely fast, though. The Results May Vary, Executive Decision, and the upcoming Chapter 52 probably each took like... an hour to write out the majority. I did go back after I finished 52 and spent 2-3 hours adding some pieces in, but still, it's 10025 words right now and all told I've probably put 3-4 hours in it. That sounds crazy even to me, tbh.
There have been some real 'slog' chapters that took a lot longer. The one where Cure first went with the guard to do exercises (Cooper Team, which is btw a cheat code that gives you super soldiers in an old game called Syndicate), for whatever reason, gave me a lot of trouble. So did the Running of the Leaves. Some just take longer because I want to get technical aspects right to try to improve consistency on how things are done, or I spend a lot of time trying to come up with a way that the magical effects we witness in the show could, theoretically, potentially, maybe-ily be slightly possible if you look at it at just the right angle and squint enough.
If things continue as they are - which is never a guarantee - I could see this ending up being a several million word long story. I'm not sure I'm up to that challenge as I really struggle with the whole 'random encounter' thing. Also, with a ridiculously over powered MC there's legitimately not a whole lot of problems that could not be solved in like... an afternoon. That's not all my fault, though. Canonically any random unicorn can go toe... well, hoof to hoof, with what would be considered a high tiered demigod or, at least, low tiered god by most standards. The only reason Equestria, even in canon, has not completely conquered the planet is because they simply choose not to.
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Much like earth ponies can burn magic to enhance their physical strength, pegasi can burn magic to decrease wind resistance and increase cold mitigation. In chapter 30 while the group is doing their run he asks the girls some questions about what their aura actually does.
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He will absolutely do that. There is approximately 0% he wouldn't do that, in fact.
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This will come up, eventually. I think I have a good way of handling it, but it will be a long ways off, so don't expect it soon.
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I LOL'd IRL. Thanks for the short omake! I'll be fixing the typos you found here shortly, so thx for those too.
Edit - Typo's fixed. Fat-tastic was intentional, I changed that to make it more apparent. And yes, the chapter name is 100% a Toy Story reference.
Thanks again!
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Totally understandable. I like the detail stuff to a degree and if someone doesn't and they skip it, that's fine too. Enjoy the story how you want to enjoy it!
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I suppose Send could be abused like that, but something to keep in mind (which will come up next chapter) is that it's a very complex spell. It's also inefficient, so if anything I see changelings being the least likely to use it simply due to the frivolity of it. If you have to go hungry to send a message then either you won't or it must be a really important message. That being said, yes, the spell could be abused, horribly even. I feel like the whole "You know who is sending the message" part means that, at least, you could report the pony for harassment. I already have a mechanic in the story where the authorities can tell that magic is being used and by whom, so presumably they could find the responsible party and do something about them.
Thank you for another great chapter. I really enjoy this story.
I feel like there's a lot of foreshadowing going on here.
The new-hire, could she possibly be a spy to keep tabs on Cure and his family?
Then there's the whole making a few hundred grand... "Couldn't you be robbed?" ... "I'd like to see em try."
Hmm.
I just had an amusing thought... he should offer the BOSS Lady a seed he has altered to produce leg shaped fruit that have dark red juices and have a slight crunch when bitten. Perhaps when they are peeled they look meat like on the inside. It should come with a note that says something along the lines of: Eat the fruit in the case of overexposure to Irritating ponies, budget meetings, filibustering and nobles in general... or if you feel like pranking somepony. Don't forget to peel them first. No, the fruit isn't what it looks like. Enjoy!
With some instructions on care for the plant as well of course.
Every time I see the Ferndale reference I think of Detroit Become Human.
I wonder about Cure's cutie mark. I mean no matter what he changes into, it isn't changing that mark, so he'd be easy to track by anyone who really wanted to do so.
I hope this story gets to go through cannon.
How do you think the cannon people would react to cure?
Ha ha aliCUREnicorn, and nothing came of it. So, Glacial has no changes (Ferric and Heavy too?) yet, saving themselves for something great or staying ’pure’? I almost wanted to see Glacial get her cutie mark teaching Cure for her destiny as a foals flight instructor, “she makes learning a ‘breeze’ “. I do wonder if LFOD has plans for each friends cutie mark or it just hasn’t happened in the story (or his thinking) to be written yet. They’re still young, lots of time. More hints that Cure COULD be Changling Prime, or just using his knowledge of their biology as a worst case scary scenario? Don’t do it LFOD, I don’t like the implications that would have to happen for Cure to turn against ponykind, and how would he work in the emotivore aspect?
I find myself really enjoying stories that don't rush a plot, but still manage to get there and surprise you. Like a random Celestia at your door. Makes sense as a plot point, but you'd normally think there'd be some buildup... Nope, just open a door and 'dem knees'.
I the reader loves this story and appreciate the Writer and others help with making this story so grate
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Perhaps. It does allow the writer to write just about anything tho with only really having to allow for Celestia. No trying to keep a lot of characters in character or having to worry about villains that are supposed to happen during sometime of your story.
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Such a long essay responding to my question lol.
Also thanks for clearing that up, wouldn’t want to make authors feel pressure when I’m trying it be encouraging, Tis counterproductive.
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You're very much welcome. Knowing I brought some happiness to someone who has brought us so much makes my inner Pinkie jump for joy. The confetti burps are a bit worrying though
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um, I think you mean "great" what? I thought you appreciated the help.
I'm just messing with you.
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Correction, Glacial has the eyelids, so there’s something
I finally cought up with the story!
What can i say beyond the fact that i'm loving each word of the story,
Cant wait for more interactions with the Boss Lady. :)
Cure sends a line-of-sight Message to his mom. << Remember I said everything on this planet is way smarter than on Earth? Even animals here can be near-sapient. I don’t know how that will apply to an actual sapient being, but foals at age two or three are smarter than humans at four, maybe five. >>
Seeing that humans have advanced technology without having to use cheats like magic seems to say otherwise...
And I'm pretty sure most of the beings in that world are intelligent because of magic and not biology. If not it would have been impossible for cure to remember his memories like that.
Then again, they can be like horse on earth, a horse fully grows in 4 to 5 years, so they develop faster but their IQ limit is lower compared to slower developing species.
Equinal finances? O.o
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True
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Yea...just got to this chapter and I can definitely see something about to happen with that
ALSO
Fu- bucking love this story to bits and I got to stop here for now since I gota sleep Wil probably comment on a chapter in a few hours.....probably 10 hours at most before I get started on reading next chapter since irl stuffs
Yeah this story is totally top tier. One of the best on the site. It iiiiiis pretty slow, but its also super well thought out and interesting. Plus the amazing upload speed makes up for feeling like its gonna take forever irl for it to get anywhere
Ever thought about posting on other sites?
Sonic emerald boom
Hehehe , very noice.
Basic wings, check!
Ah this is heavenly! Every time I believe myself to have run out of good stories to read here (outside of the clop) and think maybe I should look elsewhere for my pony fiction fix, I find something like this and say NOT TODAY! Thank you, most glorious author for your hard work and drive to bring us such a quality story. I hope you continue writing for as long as the skies are blue.