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This story is so interesting, Cure's ability actually isn't that op in my opinion, purely because of the time scale he has to work with to make results happen. Then there's the finite magic he has and the range he has with it. Still a really cool ability to have all the same, and you've done a real good job of setting it apart from the general bs healing abilities I usually see. I just love the world you've created and can't help but gush about it, jeez.. I'm a 26 year old male and I'm rambling like a hyperactive Pinkie Pie, I can't wait to see what you write next, it's just so unique!
This story is laughs, intrigue, & adorableness.
What kind of inspiration did you get for Cure messing with Emerald like that? XD
thanks for the chapter. love it.
but im having a tough time keeping up with all the ponies and their names...
im pretty bad at remebering names anyway but it would be nice if it was a bit clearer who was who.
this is mainly when you introduce allot of characters at the same time.
With both his parents working the clinic it sounds like Solar would be a good way to keep an ear out for "do or die" problems that Cure could help with and build up some goodwill in town. There are an awful lot of ponies that know about his talent now, only a matter of time before it's town gossip at this rate.
Cure has a wonderful balance of super smart from his old life and childishness from this one. That's a hard line to walk and make it feel natural, but it's turning out great.
Oh, and that troll on Emerald was amazing.
I’m enjoying this story immensely.
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Yeah, I know. I've started on a character list. It's going to probably get a lot worse as time goes on too, so I think that's going to be a necessity. Sorry, but IRL you don't just know like... 10 people and that's it. It's kinda ironic because an early comment I remember said something about the cast just being him and his parents at the time, which was true, but then I was also almost done typing up the kickball chapter which introduces like... 8 new friends, then we meet Amy, Lemon, etc. Just wait until Cure travels with Tejas Pete's rodeo for a few years! Joking! (maybe)
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Really I just felt like a mother would at least ask some questions, especially if it was the first time her daughter brought over someone she's interested in. Then while writing it I was like, "man, interrogating a little kid's kind of a dick move" even if "pony" 8 is probably developmentally more like 12 or so in human terms, so I was like, "How can Cure eff with this chick" and the candy thing just clicked. My first draft didn't even have the parents there at all, tbh.
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Cool, glad you're diggin it. I'm trying very hard not to go full scale OP, but it's really difficult in this setting because there's so many opportunities to do so. I mean, she's the OP protagonist granted, but Twilight carries off a bear that has to weigh like 30 tons while also lifting a water tower weighing another 3-5 tons minimum... and that's from a ~3ft tall, maybe 150lb 20-something unicorn (all rough guesses, btw). The average adult human male can barely lift 0.25% - as in "a quarter of one percent" - of that over their head.
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Minor correction - Dawn and Solar's dad is a guard pony, specifically the squad medic. Also, I hadn't even considered that. Good point.
Also, glad to hear I'm doing a good job with the "adult vs child" thing. Thanks!
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Dangit, now you've put star bears in my head I can just picture a Chad Cure benching an ursa minor.....preview.redd.it/4gv2pfjqjqt71.jpg?width=1080&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=895dd9c94e6d34bd28eaf7cc0661f1fa6299998c
Speaking of flags :"That… actually sounds like something that could happen, assuming that’s something that ever happens. Well, if it sets your mind at ease," Sitting on his haunches, Solar straightens to his full height and places a hoof over his heart, "I swear by the Sun, Moon, and Stars that, barring a direct order from Her Highness and except in situations of life or death, I will tell no soul of what you can do.”
That's a big one right there.
Maybe by the time Cure gets revealed, the rumours will be widespread enough that everyone's already figured it out. Like an open secret, or similar.
I don't think there's any.....*etc*
Loving this story. My favorite part about any kind of story is the world and how developed it is. So this fleshed out world with plenty of more possibilities is awesome. Tho I think it could use a tad bit more speeding up at least until the next big drama.
Thanks for the update and amazing work as always!
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Fixed, thank you.
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Glad you're enjoying it!
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I know! I said it before, I hate when there's like... urgent things that characters need to address and a time skip happens and I'm sitting there like "Dude, wasn't X like, kinda time sensitive? Did you just forget about it for like a month?"
LordBucket, on another chapter, made a comment about the recaps comparing them to DBZ and this here kinda twigs that for me - We mostly only ever saw the MC's really beefing up when there's like... an IMMINENT threat. When there's downtime between those, though it's like "We're definitely all fine now! Let's chill & play xbox and maybe do an occasional chin-up!" or whatever and little seems to change.
You keep saying how you want to avoid cliches, boring/annoying parts, and all that. All I can say is it's working. I like how realistic it feels. It's a good story. Good stuff.
1 too many "my"
I thought the flag bit was pretty funny.
Do we need someone Fantastic with a theoretical degree in physics?
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That's reference to Fallout New Vegas
Why do I feel like it’s gonna be his fault there is a Running of the Leaves?
:)
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Cure has so much of the Doogie Howser personality blended with Doctor House going on there. Throw in the serious-minded military guard medic, this would have such a fantastic explosive chemistry mix!
Rereading this for the Nth time and just spotted this. checked comments and no one else mentioned it so will put it here.
I don’t think the optics were very good, was this supposed to be [options] ??
God! If you hadn't already described her as mint green, I would have sworn she was a palomino. Apologies to Trigger.
Sapphire just looks back and forth and, finally tired of missing the joke, asks, “I don’t get it. What are you all talking about?”
Thoroughly enjoying this story, and been reading it every chance I get since I found it..... two days ago?
But with this chapter where he's just met Amethyst again (and DIDN'T SCAN HER?!?), I'm honestly waiting for the other horseshoe to drop, and we discover Cure's Power has started a Cascading Failure in everyone he's affected.
But maybe it isn't one of those stories, I guess I'll find out!
Neighborhood watch! Well, at least the town is low key ready to back him up. That's totally not foreshadowing at all! 😈
Sergeant Lyra Heartstrings approves the running regiment! ✔
And so, the pony mob was born.