This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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I. Must. Have. MOAR!
Holy shit, this Chapter was amazing,
found a mistake
Wow, that was intense and it's not even over. Prey killed 12 people, got free of the gold bracelets, turned into cotten candy, eaten, a passive aggressive restoration, and is about to be eaten again by bugs. How the hell is he going to get out of this one? The poor guy needs a break.
I wonder if Prey got any more wishes, from the Ponies he mind broke, like with Valor?
Just one thing after the other in quick succession, and just when you think it's over, something worse takes its place. No rest for the wicked, is there?
I absolutely adore this version of Discord's chaos, very on brand, yet insanely threatening. (Pun originally not intended)
I find myself with many questions. Just what was Prey's reaction to the elements? What exactly have they done? also did the elements fix Prey's mind breaks? Seems possible..
Discord didn't seem to realise the things Prey keeps in the depths of his mind are there. I'm also surprised Prey haven't let them out. Previous it took much less to tempt him, but it seems he had a lot of character development.
This arc feels a lot less focused in my opinion, especially compared to the previous ones, but it seems to thematically make sense for it to be so, but I do hope it will be a bit more focused in the future, not that I mind a more slice of life-y / less serialised arc.
ribbonless, crimsonless, strengthless, it really does seem hopeless. This has to be his lowest point in a long time. and I'm not even sure what happened towards the end! I guess I'll find out in another two weeks. You really do torture us.
It's always something, first he (inadvertently) escapes from Luna's grasp only to be taken by Chrysalis!
If only Prey had a fast acting toxin on him that he could spread through the hive while he makes his inevitable escape... He'd make a good honorary hive-buster!
This chapter is nerve wracking, I seriously am scared to check if the story has been tagged as complete and if Prey's really dead this time, the true desperation of Prey of all people begging, believing in a miracle, that he'll survive just because he always comes out alive.
That's a belief he's spurned this entire story, and it makes it so much more impactful for Prey to believe there will be-Must be a miracle.
My lies.
Awsome work as always.
Oh, you absolute cad! Mere words do not suffice to describe this level of cliffhangery!
What a hell of an ending to an arc. Discord's chaos was wonderfully terrifying, and while I hate where this chapter ended I do think it was great.
I really cannot wait to see the next arc.
The word you're thinking of is spelled "stymie" (and is pronounced "sty-mee", not "stim-mee".)
Discord was terrifying beyond reason... Holy crap.
And poor Prey... What is going to happen to him now? No tracer bands so Luna can't find him. Is he still even immortal after being 'fixed' by the elements?
Great chapter!
So Prey’s ribbon even harmed the Chaos god. Neat!
This was simply amazing. I cannot wait to see the beginning of the 7th arc.
I was wondering if Discord would sense or interact with the shark of "something" within Prey, the thing that hungers. But im very satisfied with this.
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Harmony was so big, so cast, so beyond (vast)
He head the pegasus (heard)
There was also an incident of a word being doubled in the early chaos stuff, but since it was chaos stuff I'm unsure if it was intentional or not.
All told I enjoyed this chapter but it feels off. Your characterization of Discord and his brand of Chaos is certainly more on brand than a lot of the darker takes on them I've seen, but they still feel pushed a little too far in places to where I occasionally found myself thinking, this doesn't seem like something Discord would do. But that was a minor nitpick, as stated I found the descriptions and horror take on the Chaos to be very enjoyable and mostly on brand.
On the subject of the elements I again enjoyed it and think I know what happened with them, if so Prey should be very thankful to Crimson when they eventually meet again. If they do, which I think they will because even free of his bonds now I don't think Prey will abandon Crimson. The night guard and going into hiding, maybe, but he'd probably still make an effort to see Crimson.
I also like what you've got going on with the changelings, which is surprising seeing as I don't tend to like the hivemind aspect some people give them. I'm very interested to see where it goes, though I suspect I know how prey will get out of his current pickle. I do wonder what happens when you break someone in a hivemind, or show them true hunger. Will the hivemind serve to start dragging other minds down that hungry abyss, forcing the queen to shatter it? Maybe maybe.
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Makes sense to me, that ribbon seems to be a tool that enforces control on those it touches, for someone like Discord that would make it near anathema to him. More over it shows clearly that even the most powerful characters in the series are still effected and harmed by runic magic, which I suspect will come into play later.
damn.
THAT WAS AMAZING!!!!
I sense that pray on a be beat like a pinata from the people he burned in the caves recently.
And plus lemon pink mike track down prey if he's gone for too long. These two are in total sink they know each others actions. So they're technically like a family like a father and daughter partnership.
So probably prey is technically the father of a unicorn. So pray has a unicorn daughter for his only family. If prey knows it. he's going to be pretty mad at the universe.
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Looks like his runes weren't affected, so everything else should be in place too.
And more importantly, Prey's core reason to hate everything was compromised, thats some serious progress.
There’s an extra “the” here
Of all the things to happen.... I get the feeling that Punished Prey is going to have a lot of resentment towards changelings and Discord after this.
The burning part... Did the Elements kill Prey, and his lich-ness keep him alive? Did the Elements by their nature kill him, but by their intent try to keep him alive despite that? To me, it seems like Harmony is his antithesis, but it wants to keep him alive, so it works to undo that damage it does.
you know what I want to happen is that Prey finds out Discord is now a statue and start covering the bastard in runes so that next he he break out he in a world of hurt.
Just wow, everything just came out beautifully and I’m so happy at how this story of a lamb is going
Damn…. That was not how o expected the chapter to go… That ending equally so. I know this story isn’t over so that cliffhanger was just MEAN! But also an excellent point to end, seems my other comment about dark artifacts was true
Only one correction today: had resurrects—> had resurrected
Ps: I wonder how the citizens and other guards will handle a taste of what the ISND go through… especially the former members
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Unless he can sneak into the palace undetected, then he simply runs the risk of being press-ganged into service by Luna again.
My guy. This was fucking awesome, but now your gonna leave me scratchin at my arm like a coke addict for the next part lol
So, after being tortured with fear, having the worst possible torment of not feeling anything for two days, just to be resurrected after being burned alive by harmony, you decide to just give him hope, to finally kill him off.
Damn.
Just give him a break, poor Prey.
Good chapter? I mean I'm really sad to see him in pain for 13.331 words in this one but good work and my 14 days withdrawal will hit hard.
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Where did he kill 12 people? Did I miss something?
You made Discord come off as terrifying and now you made the changelings feel dangerous. I tip my hat to you.
At first I thought that, perhaps, the elements had stripped out or otherwise paved over the foreign minds Prey has absorbed. But clearly this is not the case, since we immediately see Prey slip into Garrow's verbal tick. But this time, it's not just in his head, he actually says it. So I'm wondering if perhaps the elements of harmony literally took his mind apart and put it back together. Smoothing over the separations between those pseudo-personalities. Now Garrow, Snake, etc... are all completely fused with Prey.
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I think he’s referring to the mind breaks, but I don’t think he has a number
Edit: Yep, you’re right Oodles! At least 12 mind shattered ponies left in Preys’ wake… wonder if the elements could even fix them? Maybe that’s why they were so angry?
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The way I read it is that the elements were VERY unhappy with Prey, as he admits he has none of their virtues. They likely were about to stone him as well. But he has friends, he even openly considers some of them friends. So he isn't irredeemable and therefore is not stone worthy so despite that the Elements heal him, but don't make it a pleasant event, making it as unpleasant as they can while still following all the rules.
I like that everyone is just expecting more story. The cliffhanger at the end of the Arc doesn’t leave a lot of hope that Prey can get out of being killed. While I do see the story could somehow continue with Preys death, like Lemon doing the other two Changeling purges, I still would like to see more Prey being Prey in this world. It is… I actually can’t think of another time I can see a moment where full Plot Armor needs to be invoked but I’m actually anticipating, rooting for it to happen. Good on the story to make the Plot Armor trope not feel cheep but an actual “plot point?”.
Not only was i getting worried over how you would introduce the changelings. While having discord come up. But im pleasantly suprised in their decision to go in right after discord completely wrecks canterlot. And i am highly intressted, as i was thinking if they would reach out to prey during his emotionally turmoil time after pinkies ressurection. In how chrysalis will be characterized, and eventually. How the reception will be once the war is over. How will crimson react? Will luna personally take prey's safety as a concern and help search for him?
And personally, i think the magic from the elements reacted to the curses on his body. As he ia artificially "young". What likely happended is the harmonic magic reacted to the dark and twisted magic that he has done to his body, and his sensation of being a piece of cloth being undone could signify the curses and ritual magic being undone?
Alot of questions raised. And yet another arc i will say was "the best one yet"
Well, Discord's chaos was completely terrifying on par with or even greater than Mayflower… It shows why Prey is so afraid of alicorns and their godlike powers.
I can’t believe I was right about the golden tracers, but now (if he goes back to Canterlot) Would Luna just put new ones on him? We don’t know how hard they are to make… Maybe it would be the best time to free Prey and Crimson, and then go on an adventure through the mountains (clan caves)
End of arc 6? That was completely unexpected, and it throws away all calculations I have on the fic. It’s even shorter that arc zero by four chapters. This leads to some interesting questions: What would be the main theme of this arc? Discord? It only lasted one chapter. The House Fell case? Two. The changelings? That may be the answer, but it looks like it’ll be resolved in the next arc… Maybe I’m wrong and the arcs are not divided by case, but by some change in Prey's personality? Something to think about… 🤔
Wow you really nailed this chapter
Thanks for the chapter!
Nooooo why did it have to end there!
Damn you're always so good with your cliffhangers, the two week wait to find out what happens next in this amazing story is going to be painful 😔
I need to read again Discord's monologue, I'm pretty sure we can have some clue in it.
Congrats in making him a greater threat, every time I see him in a story he's just the 4th wall dude.
Now what could be next for Prey ? Of course he most likely won't die, he's pretty much immortal and the Lich' mirror is a thing, i did not forget how Prey was always afraid of mirrors and I feel like he didn't close his eyes because he didn't want to see he became candy.
Now those golden bands also became a plot point, he's now missing, unable to be found with them, and he's officially a direct victim of Discord, because those were high tier alicorn shackles artifacts. We don't see Luna in the show when Chrysy came down and in this story the swarm is pissed off at Prey. He'll probably go back in the palace right ? I'm pretty sure the burning of the elements were because Prey is just a very bad person, but he didn't turn to stone because the elements know he tries to be a better guy, so he'll go find Crimson, and the rest of the night guard.
What about Lily ? she was already pretty crazy in her own way, now it will be worse.
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If Prey manages to hide his dreams from Luna (and somehow survive changelings), it would be a perfect moment to run. Bracers are off, thorough search of the area will find chewed ribbon with traces of some horrible magic - everyone except maybe Crimson will stop looking after that.
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I wonder what they will find when they try to search for Prey's parents to notify their son is dead. I'm sure the search will raise many... Interesting... Question.
As for crimson, somehow I find it hard to believe he will accept Prey is dead.
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It looks like consistent records exist only for cities in Equestria, not for non-pony villages over the border. They took nothing but Prey's word for his identity; and even in Dreverton guards managed to lose documents about it. Ponies have no chance to find anything, or even notice something was missing.
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As always: Thank you to everyone who has pointed errors/spelling mistakes once again. 👍 Big help.
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Hello, yes. You were right about the tracer bands, however obviously at the time I didn't want to say anything to give away spoilers, but well done. 😄
Why. Every time. There is no end, is there? There is no actual end to all these chapters. This entire story is the very definition of answering questions only to give another three that we want to be answered even more than the previous questions.
And it's on repeat. And endless torture of two weeks, to have questions answered, and 100 more to replace it. Why must you do this to us?!?!?!
Though I wouldn't have it any other way, the wait is already killing me.
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Well actually, he escaped Valor's grasp before being taken by Luna. But I wasn't much of a fan of that arch that I nearly forgot it. Actually, I wasn't much of a fan of the Mayflower arch either. So far my favorite arch has just been the latest arch, over, and over every time a new one comes out.
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Oh gosh, I was actually scared for a moment too that the story had been marked complete near the end of the chapter.
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Neat! If Discord can bleed/be harmed, then he can most likely certainly can die- wait... If that applies the Celestia and Luna... Prey managed to harm something oh so much more powerful than them, meaning, that is it possible to kill the tyrants? Not actually doing it, but knowing it was possible.
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Quite a few people have commented on it I see, about this take on Discord.
So yes, I did decide to go with a much more dangerous and vicious Discord, if only by dint of the fact that Discord genuinely does not care about anything but pleasing himself. He is a spoilt child with godlike powers.
I always thought that in the show, they got away with beating Discord far, far too lightly. And that they never even realised how absurdly lucky they were to not have died. Like: "Discord snaps his fingers *Twilight's horn turns into an inverse drill and drills its way through her brain and out the other side in a splatter of gore*. The End." 💀
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Yes, what happened to Prey? Is there a Prey anymore?
And what will be the result on the surviving ISND?
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Much like you allude to, there has been so much going on behind the scenes with the Changelings, that no one else in wider Equestria will ever become aware of. 🙃
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Uh.. .ahe-he? 😅
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Why thank you.