This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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I deleted all my editing comments as an unnecessary distraction
I think you mean something like
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Aha! Thank you very much for pointing that out. I have changed it.
Regards 😄
Nice work!
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Oh, yes, from the first few chapters. I imagine those would've looked a bit odd lying around, thanks.
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Glad that you like it. 😄🍓 If you see anything wrong, please point it out, thanks.
A typo in bold.
Also, I just noticed that when you list all of the different positions within the castle/guard, included in the list is a farrier. (Very light spoiler for future chapters) I just found myself windering why, then, Crimson needs to buy shoes from a civilian farrier. I would expect they would be able to properly outfit the pegasi in their force. I guess you could just say it might be too expensive. Either way, it's only something I've noticed due to reading through again.
And by the way, it is just as good the second time. My compliments once again.
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Thanks once again for pointing out the mistake there. 🍎
To answer your question about the farrier, I guess I didn't explain it but the reasoning in my head for why Gloom took Crimson to an outside farrier was to get "Cloud Steel Horseshoes", rather than just plain" steel" ones. In this story, Cloud Steel is much lighter than normal steel, and doesn't fall through clouds. (Not that any of those things have come up in the story.) 😅 The cloud steel was/is also more expensive, and needs to be specially made in a pegasus lightning forge.
Regards 🍏
Ah, Prey is the perfect villain. Cold, manipulative, Psychopathic... By chance was he inspired by Cozy Glow?
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Ah, no actually, although the similarities are definitely there. I started this story 2+ years back before FiM finished.
Awwwww poor Gloom ;c
Wanted to leave my thoughts so far. Really like what I've read so far, you did a very good job of blending in the flashbacks that give the reader an idea of who Prey is now and who Prey was, along with what led them to be who they are now and why they feel justified in their thinking. What I find most interesting isn't just what he says to other characters, but that, to an extent, he's right. Also find it interesting how he refuses to refer to others with terms like everypony because he believes it makes it seem like only the ponies are important, yet doesn't bother to correct the thinking of the colleague’s he's working with at all. I'm suspecting that this is because he believes he's going to escape soon and doesn't see a need, but that may change soon.
There are actually a few characters I'm hoping Prey will meet at some point, Pinkie I would like to see just because I think it'd be entertaining, and Celestia. I'm excited to see how things progress.
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Well er, about meeting those characters; it's gonna' be a fair ways into the story for one of them, , and he hasn't met the other at all. Yet. So maybe? Maybe not.
Sergeant. There’s other instances of the misspelling but I’m not going to tag each one.
Enquire works, but as most readers on the site come from the US you probably want to spell it inquire.
En masse. It’s a French phrase, so there’s no hyphen and ends with an e.
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And thank you for those corrections too. Speaking about foreign language differences between the US and UK though, that 'Sargent' vs 'Sergent' is another one of them. I hope it doesn't bug you that much. 😅
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-Oxford English Dictionary
I don't know if it's on purpose or not, but please tell me you aren't spelling "Sergeant" like that. If it's a regional thing or is actually on purpose, then please let me know. It's been driving me mad for the past 5 chapters.
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Hello. A lot of people have asked about that. That's just the regional UK spelling that FiMFiction auto-corrects to, sorry.