This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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How many chapters long will this story be?
Well well well, I must say this has been an interesting revelation. Though to what end it will serve is unknown.
Given the story so far I am skeptical we are already at the wedding, so the lack of reinforcements is ether the coming of discord or some other event that happened in season 1.
A very enjoyable read, will enjoy seeing if Prey's abilities are ever revealed though I doubt it will be anytime soon.
Hmm...
Well now it clicks for shimmer. What are those changelings you're talking about ? Never heard of them.
It was great, it's always such a thrill to read this, now I just need to understand how the thing managed to find them, water ? Sounds ?
Great chapter, as always, thanks for the bi weekly ambrosia.
Bwuaaah?! Plot twists abound in this chapter! Twists and turns like a twisty-turny thing! Although, if Prey plays his cards right he might get to go on the hunt again. That could be amazing.
I wonder if the reaper Kings magic leech ability was able to rip Luna's enchantments apart. Prey might be able to escape her earlier than anticipated.
Also, "mimics" in a story called prey ๐คฃ.
Ohh, does that mean crimson is one?
Awesome chapter. And now we know that Prey cant read changeling 's minds (didn't saw that one coming).
For some reason, the reaper king reminds me of an Eidolon
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Oof, I've taken a few dips in freezing water before. It being a river is not helpful either. Frankly, now I feel cold. Really getting that hopeless desperation now, I can't see a way out of this unless Prey somehow manages to touch the warlock.
Well done.
Bull! After the darkness monster, you don't owe Crimson jack!
Like I said, you most certainly do NOT.
Seriously, why am I siding with the paranoid misanthropic psychopath?
Awesome chapter! Thank You!
Preyโs wool was ripped off? Thatโs not good, heโs got runes all over his body thereโs no way he can hide that forever! Nowโs the time when he gets questioned for real!
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The site has a limit of 1,000 chapters for a story, so less than that
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Runes and scars too
Im glad i found a story this good that is still up and running! Love what your doing, keep it up!
Huh, I wonder what Shimmer thought about Preyโs emotions toward the guards and if the info was sent through the hive mind
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Well, I'm not sure yet, but taking into rough account of where I am in the story and what I have planned left to do, I'd say, um, maybe 100+? Because we're only half way at the most.....Yikes. That's a lot of chapters I've got left to right. ๐ ๐ ๐
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Runes are invisible unless you have a special magical sight, they're just energy. You're right about scars though...
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Thinks are not looking good for the ISND. It just keeps going from bad to far, far, far worse.
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I don't think so. Prey was unable to read shimmer at all, even In moments of shock and fear, while Crimson's mental wall did come down on occasion.
Also, it's a horrible disguise. Why would he choose to be someone so closely monitored that stands out so much. And now that he has the tracker on he doomed himself, now he can't run.
So many questions. But if it was Shimmer's intention to wait it out, why save the ISND, it only puts him in more danger. They probably won't generate much love at their state, so it's not for food, he knows they can't beat the new scarecrow, so why? If he is a changing, he probably has no real remorse,at least not enough to risk his life like that.
Maybe he betrayed them. The warlock might have offered to let him leave if he could lure the ISND into a corner. Well, if he did, then he was certainly bamboozled.
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Oh, we're nowhere near the wedding. ๐ We still haven't had discord for example. But the changelings must've been operating in Equestria for centuries already, how else could their race have survived? It's just that they've been very good at keeping hidden up until the wedding.
As to why there haven't be any reinforcements? We don't know yet, do we?
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It would've been too easy for Prey if he could hear changeling minds. But now he's left with the paranoia, every time he comes across a mind he can't hear, are they a "mimic" as he's named them?
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Yes, that's the question, isn't it? Why did Shimmer do what he did? ๐
Was he really helping or not? What did he hope to get out of all this? Why was he sent here? How much of what he did was just an act? All, half, none? His actions don't seem to be in line with what a typical self-serving undercover changeling would do, so why???
I'm honestly getting a little burned out on how the warlock is always 100% on top of everything always, and has a sequence of bigger and badder monsters, and has so much amazing power that only super evil guys are allowed to have because clearly good guys would never come up with amazing things, and they can't get any help, and it's just... I'm tired. This plotline goes on and on and they never get a real victory, it's just a hundred thousand words of them getting torn up worse and worse.
I'm probably experiencing Darkness-Induced Audience Apathy.
Iโm proud of myself for suspecting shimmer, but iโm ticked off I forgot about changelings! p.s. keep up the good work I need more nightmare fuel for many nights to come.
Wow the reaper king is even better than than I could have imagined!
Definitely looking forward to the next chapter and I hope everything goes well for you in the current situation ๐๐
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There's nothing wrong with a long story, just try to avoid the pitfalls.
I suggest to try and have a clear goal. And my biggest suggestions, avoid spectacle and power creep AT ALL COSTS. The biggest pitfall of long stories in my opinion is that the stakes keep rising constantly until the story just loses meaning. You don't have to always raise the power and stakes, bigger isn't always better.
I thought Shimmer was the warlock. The idea he might be a changeling didn't occur. O'course, now it has occurred, the thought arises that the warlock might also be a changeling, one gone rogue. Would explain why it uses glowing crystals, since changelings can refill those like unicorns can, and the book written in a language Gloom doesn't recognise- and nor does Prey, with his love of learning and habit of delving into all kinds of esoteric and occult knowledge, regardless of who wrote it.
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I thought he was the warlock
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That would explain why shimmer didnt leave when he had the chance, if it was hunting a loose end he would need to see it thru.
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Remember, this is autumn of Season 1. A Canterlot Wedding is still in the future.
At this point in time, the changelings are still under cover.
IMO, they have infiltrated the Guard (& other places) for both
information & to prepare to cause disruptions during the invasion
ugghh this feels like one of those stories with no end in sight. Or really with no end planned at all. Prey's research into escaping is going so damn slow that the entire fic is practically based on Prey just living day to day in the ISND. Nothing interesting besides that normal slice of life taking down massive salt trades and corrupt corporations. I'm getting tired of seeing Prey. I want to see more of Gossamer. And what would be an interesting way to do that? Idk maybe someone gets Prey's criminal profile or something or maybe crimson ask prey about his past or something. And you know the worst part? I'm halfway through the fic(Chapter 39) and still nothing of it. It's a fic with half a million words which updates slowly with a long chapter but with little to no change. Why is it the long stories that are always good? It's good so a great one in fact. It's long, still updates but slowly however long chapters make up for that and make you want more. But that's it never gives you what you want.
I know it said plot development was slow but not this slow. I love this story because it's a great story and yet I hate it because whiles it's good nothing of real interest comes along. Is that even possible? To love and hate something at the same time? Well not everything perfect. Still, I learn more about liking the story.
Anyways now that I'm did ranting I'm going continue to read. Great story keep up the good work!
Edit: I only now realized that I forgot to blackout spoiler's
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They might only see the mass of scar tissue from all the times heโs been whipped.
Hey! I like this fic so far!
Glad to see Prey is finally considering splitting from the others, but why wait so long? Considering his top priority is to survive and gain his freedom, I would've thought he'd be constantly looking for opportunities to escape from the ISND; it's a very dangerous job. Now the forest and its inhabitants are the immediate threats, not Luna.
I wonder why he didn't try using bone rot to burn through his bracers? Say, while no ones looking, pour out a thin layer of it onto a patch of those plants he carried them in, then carefully dip a side of the bracer and burn through it a bit at a time.
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From what I understood, bonerot only burns through biological matter. So the braces are protected against it, Prey's hooves on the other hand, are not. And even if the bonerot can burn through non biological matter without damaging Prey, I doubt a brace enchanted by an alicorn would break that easily.
Prey can saw off his own hooves, but his odds of survival would be impossibly low at best.
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Ah, good idea, but to explain that, (I think I wrote this in the story before, but maybe I only thought it and didn't actually make it clear), Bone Rot only melts organic matter. Also, those golden bands are alicorn made! 100% proof against slips, trips, and spills! They're not something that'll come of easy. ๐
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1,000 chapters allowed for every story tecnically it could be more than a thousand by starting another at 1,000 chapters, and simply adding a 2. from there he could continue the story. i need sleep.
This story is so good I'm about to throw a chair or something
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Why? What did the chair every do to you? ๐
Glad you enjoyed it, is all.
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That what Just Essay did with Appledashery. They hit the 1,000 chapter limit,
slapped a "Complete" label on it & just Kept On Trucking with the sequel Appledashery Vol. 2 (202 chapters and counting).
But, it's labeled "Complete", so TECHNICALLY, it's finished.
- MLP: FiM
- Romance
- Adventure
- Random
Rainbow Dash lives an exciting life and is swiftly becoming the most daring, awesome pegasus in all of Equestria. She would gladly give it all up, though, just to confess her love to Applejack.10215731
Reminds me of in Cerberus the Aardvark, Cerberus is talking to an evil wizard
Wizard (hiring Cerberus to wipe out a village) "...and the villagers have the temerity to blame ME for causing (long list of catastrophes)
Cerberus "And ARE you responsible?"
"Good Lord, no! Who has the time for all that? I'm too busy plotting to destroy the world"
Cerberus gives him a Look
Wizard "Think of it a 'suicide on a grand scale' "
A question popped up yesterday. Will this be the last arc of the story, with you finally putting a bow on this, and soon move on to the sequel (if there will be one)? I only asked this because I was thinking of, "The Rule of Three."
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in a comment he answerd that there were likly going to be 100+ chapters and he is maby halfway done with the story.
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Well I'm just itching to see when Prey escapes. But the only question then is, what will he do when he does escape? Start a revolution? Maybe. But my guess is that it will focus on his runaway while Gloom and Crimson try to track him down. Can't wait! ๐
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Be patient man. Treat this as some well aged cheese or wine. This has done what I have seen no other story (on this site) has done. Professional story building. Reminds me of Harry Potter books in a strange way. And the slow updates are actually pretty fast and organized compared to the jumbled upload times I've seen. I believe every two weeks he uploads. Though, I don't know how he has time for it. A well appreciated dedicated person I'm glad to have on this sight. So just sit back, relax, grab some popcorn and enjoy the ride with the rest of us.
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True enough. Slow updates but longer well-made chapters. For me, there's one maybe two other stories and series as good as this one. Probably going add this to my sacred favorites list but normally I do that once I reach the end of a story. Though I'm on the last two chapters so it won't be long till it's there.
In the meantime, I'm going go drown myself in other stories till the next chapter comes out.
Two things, first I am amazed at the continuous rapid update of this story (Iโm used to a chapter every 1-2 months) and is there any way to add Preyโs bow to the cover picture?
Keep up the good work. Until next chapter!
Been madly refreshing the page, cannot wait for next chapter.