3037696
Yeah, a lot of people mentioned that the sentences and paragraphs are very long and it made the story hard to read. I am actively working to break them up a little bit in later stories.

3037516
No problem

Though the story had one of my pet peeves, extremely long paragraphs, it was still a good story. Now, I like Mlp:fim, but in the end, it is still a kids' show. So I do like the occasional story I find that gives a slice of realism to it.

Thank you for the top rating! More Extended Cut stories are going to be published sometime next month; I hope you enjoy them.

Thanks for adding my story to your collections!

May the Lord Jesus save, guide, protect, and watch over you

3029642
Sorry, don't know anyone like that