This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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Oh prey. You're so delightfully monstrous. I can't wait for your elaborate plan to either succeed because that's how all meticulously arranged schemes should go down, or utterly fail because its freakin Equestria and that's just how things go.
Amazing chapter as always
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Iām just hoping they get sent to ponyville at some point.
he may regret that ribbon when a certain pony see him wearing it and want to give him a extra tight hug for how cute prey is
I'm always glad when I see this story updated. Brings a smile to my goofy face.
I love Prey, can't wait to see what the future will hold for him.
I never imagined Prey would have a Nerd out moment. That was heartfelt. The ākill you ribbonā scene was funny too.
On a serious notes, some of Gloomās and Crimsonās observation about Preyās past or personality donāt seem to far off the mark. Prey was a child soldier to a group of murderous, anarchical, psychopathic bandits with ideas of grandeur, that were a āresistanceā in name only. What ever moral code is mother instilled into him has been eroded away due to a combination of PTSD, indoctrination, childhood trauma, physical, mental and emotional abuse.
I have never seen Prey as a villain, to me he was a morally grey character that lived in a society that view everything as black and white. But then I continued to read the story and learned that heās just a traumatized child that doesnāt know how to go through life without constant conflict. I hope that things turn out well for him in the end, I hope that he will find some measure of peace in his life.
Sorry about that, these thoughts have been stirring in my head for a while.
I just want to say I really enjoy this story. Thanks
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Hmm, how will all of this end? Happiness or tragedy? š
Tragedy seems more likely in real life, since "Nasty people meet nasty ends." But hope springs eternal.
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed, since there was a lot of talking and slow story development in it.
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š I feel like I mainly added that ribbon for coming comedic value.
I feel like this deserves more likes due to its original, creative, and fun idea. I don't know, is it just me?
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Personally, I think this story could use some free real estate
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-Hey you! Come here!
--*looks around* me?
-Yeah! Come here!
--ok? *walks to him*
-Closer
--*steps closer*
-Closer boy
--*gets face to face with him*
-*puts mouth by ear* Its free real estate
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I am glad someone else aside from me found the "I'll kill you", funny, since the picture was so ridiculous. š
For the rest of it, you are quite accurate I feel. Prey is Prey. He knows who he is and doesn't believe he needs to change for anybody. He doesn't think he has any moral development issues and that everything is perfectly natural for anyone put in his place. That doesn't mean he's right. Wrong is still wrong no matter how you slice it. 'A rose by any other name is still a rose'.
~There is no black or white when you're Prey, just a steel cold shade of Grey~
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Prey has traits of the tv trope Fallen Hero, specifically type 2, though heās a much softer version. At least compared to the only other example I can think of the āKilling Jokeā Joker. All the abuse and trauma he suffered seemed to have warped his world view into the Nihilistic point of view he has today. From the hints you dropped in the story Prey was actually much worse during the later stages of the ārebellionā, he maim but mostly killed everyone he ran into.
The YouTube channel Overly Sarcastic Production, did a video on the Fallen Hero trope. After the nine minute mark they begin talking about the type 2 fallen hero. A person who became evil, villainous, or deranged because of circumstances outside their control. To me this sounded a lot like Prey initially at least, now though he seems more like a type 5 fallen hero, his goal is to basically get his freedom then isolate himself away from the rest of world indefinitely. He has the character traits though lacks the redeeming quality.
I am finding this story to be very addictive and enjoyable, keep up the absolutely amazing work!
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Omg more please and that funny pic you got there
I haven't been sucked into a story this completely in quite a while. I downloaded it to my kindle and basically wasted the entire day just reading. I almost ran into a few people and bushes, but that's ok because I got to read more of this story.
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š That is flattering to hear, so thank you. Am glad that you thought this long(ish) story was worth a read.
Prey looks so damn adorable with that ribbon.
That ribbon scene was so awesome! And he looks so adorable! All the better to surprise and kill with.
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It was too good of an propinquity, (In my head atleast), to pass up without drawing.
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Well, now I see where everyone is coming from, saying Prey looks like a girl. Also, your illustrations are just the icing on the already great cake that is this story.
I remember a donkey that was eaten alive by worms. Makes me wonder if that was Lance.
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I'm personally hoping for a sacrifice play.
Let me rephrase that.
No one has a 'redemption arc'.
No 17~20-ish year old Element convinces the near century old Prey that "He's wrong, now behave!"
Just a third party who is a bigger threat than Equestria, and working with them is worth it for survival.
Just a terrifying threat that forces him to play the long game, till he can learn how to kill Gods.
Who that third-party would be, I don't know. How the situation would happen I can only guess.
Fun to think about, though.
You know the drill.
Got another one in the author's notes. Nice, clean chapter otherwise, it seems. Or maybe I'm reading too fast again? Either way, we're starting to get into the really fun parts of this story.
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Well, it may be the usual drill, but thanks again anyways. I feel I need to say that each time. š
I'm with Prey. Gendering fabric is moronic and he rocks that ribbon.
Error Report: the whole city of Canterlot could fall of(f) the mountain face and kill every single pony in it for all I care
A doll ho(u)se to play dress up with?
So
it(if) there anything you'd like to tell us while you still have the chance?"This single piece of text gives Prey so much more character in my opinion. Goddammit I'm loving this story.
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Thanks. š
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And thanks again, those are now corrected. š¤£
Good chapter bro.
Keep this shit up my man.
This is where your character shines the most.
When his pettiness is plot relevant, or when there's a lot of shit going on.
Cuz you're a pretty solid action writer, as far as I'm aware
That was a fun interrogation~
This story is almost like one of those cop shows that have a twist. An exceptionally dark twist in this case, of course.
Prey kinda reminds me of Tanya Degurechaff from the anime, The Saga of Tanya The Evil for some odd reason. Especially with the illustrations.
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I mean they're both psychopathic males in a feminine body so the comparison is definitely an apt one.
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There's actually a lot of comparisons you could make between the characters all around. Obviously, they both appear to be children. But there are similarities in their situations too. They've both been inducted into the military against their will. They resent their positions and long for a simpler life free of dangers to them. They're both manipulative schemers and have to use their advanced tactical minds to wrangle a bunch of bozos on their team. They both hate the supreme godlike authority that's partially responsible for the situation they are in. And finally, Tanya used to be an accountant in his past life and Prey is part of a counter-intelligence unit, so they're both familiar with the utter horrors of paperwork.
PS They're also both magic murder midgets.
jaja xd, Prey reminds me of a purple pony
jaja i love your sense of humor <3
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Yes, except Twilight's psyco tendencies were enabled by Celestia instead of being curtailed.
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Lovely sketch.
The fact that Prey has all this immense power, capability and technical genius and is playing CSI/Criminal Minds/Mentalist/Blacklist is goddamn hilarious to me. Loving this so far, it flows like a tv show in all the best ways, and is wonderfully done.
Also that sketch brought mw fits of laughter lol
"Palace gates" should be simply "palace gates".
"sacrafice" should be "sacrifice".
"tolterian" is "totalitarian".
"livelyhoods" is "livelihoods".