This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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Wow I juist Got here.
Today wasn’t a bad day unless you got a crazy mare looking for her next plushie victim to choke it with love and cuteness
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Prey'll take his victories where he can.
This was nice, a great chapter. Looking forward to future chapters.
~Are you there, Dear wolf?~
--I am, Little lamb.--
~Are you sad?~
--I am...--
~What does it feel like?~
--A long hunt with no kill.--
... Yeah don't mind me o.o I just had to post this because the title keeps reminding me of Kindred... o.o
--Never one...--
~Without the other.~
~Never one...~
--Without the other.--
Hehehehehe
Part of me can't wait until Prey gets discovered, it will be a hell of a sh!tshow.
Hmm, Random expositon from a Pamplet that Celestia released hundrets of years ago, does that mean anything?
Chapter was Fun.
Prey writing the reports may lead to some fun down in the Archives on the chance anybody reads them. I would imagine Prey describing things through a different lens than most ponies would.
More People, ponies in this case, are realising Prey exists and what a weird thing it is that a lamb would be in the ISDF.
I wonder if you can describe Dreverton as a Youth Correctional Facility, but probalby not. Even his "low" security Lead cell was probably a few times better conatinment than Crimson ever got.
Also Standart Guard Training the next day could be fun. Will Luna attend to oversee? Will Prey shock everyone by his tendency to go for the throat? Will he finaly get at least his few muscles back that he can have?
Who knows, but i am eager to find out
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More please
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1) The Pamphlet could be foreshadowing that Prey has a way to see what Celestia thought’s on ‘The Resistance’ were. It may have started out as nothing notable in history but Prey has eluded to have a body count of several dozen maybe even over a hundred potential kills. That would be noticed especially since at the time the ‘Resistance’ were basically gone.
2) Yeah I bet more than a few ponies will be appalled to read the part where he describes anything that could be considered violence.
3) The training day is going to be interest to read about. I can’t help but giggle at the reaction of what the ponies will think when they realize that their little lamb is extremely violent and vicious.
Though at the same time I acknowledge that this might not happen since Prey physically weak.
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That is some well thought out reasoning and quite interesting to read what other people think will/might happen. (Mwa Ha Ha )
I won't say any of that will happen or not, (no spoilers) but it might.
As to the phamphlet opening, it will eventually come into context. I hope.
Regards
This story is fascinating! Only found it, when it hit the "featured" box a couple of days ago, but devoured it non stop and can't wait for more!
The arc 0 was amazing, time period shifts executed perfectly. I especially liked the sort of "detached" or "alien" vibe coming from Preys character. Arc 1 is great in its own right but feels a bit more lighthearted, almost like you are trying to make Prey seem more likable, more "human". For example, in the previous arc, I would have expected him to at least consider using Rocky Bed for some dark ritual or to further his goals in some other way, rather than just dump him to be found. But that's just my two cents and I am eagerly waiting for the next chapter keep going sir, you are fantastic!
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Why thank you for you kind comments. That is of course very flattering to hear. But I'm more glad you liked it. 😇
Yeah, Prey is not totally evil. (Mostly) He thinks he know himself, but does he really?
At the moment in this Arc, it is a slow build. Gonna' be a fair amount more character development and plot building. I'm going to try and keep it interesting.
But thank you for your "two cents".
Regards 🥝
I give u thumbs up my dude u made me realize how racist the show is
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Well thank you for the compliment. I have no desire to know what will happen in the story ahead of time, I find much more enjoyable to read along as the story progresses.
Though I do have a question it’s been bugging me for quite awhile, you don’t have to answer of course. My question is how long do sheep live?
The way I’ve been interpreting it, is sounds like Prey has easily outlived his generation, which makes me think that the life expectancy of a sheep is between 30-40, if not younger between 20-30.
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Yes, you are interpreting right. Prey has outlived what a Sheep should. And he's still a lamb to boot.
Hmm, what's up with that I wonder?
God i love this story. I found it a couple of days ago and now am all caught up, and i don't believe this is the first time you write...is way to good. Keep up the great work i'm excited to see where this goes
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I am pleased to hear that you are enjoying it. that always brings a smile when someone finds a story they like.
And thanks! 🍊
Congratulations on getting your 100th like!
It's a one of many milestones im sure your fic will pass.
We enjoy reading what you write and hope you will continue.
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Thanks. It is quite nice I must say, evenifIdosaysomyself
And funny you should say that.... Because I've just finished the next chapter.
I hope he has a rune for keeping blankets clean...
Love the story.
I am curious how the elements of harmony secifically the map will react to him later.
Will he be marked as a friendship problem and get the main 6 sent after him?
If the elements themselves were used on him would he be turned to stone? Would he be sealed somewhere? Would it remove the sliver of madness and help him overcome his paranoia and at least attempt to see ponies as something else than his hated enemies?
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Well, the map problem isn't for years in the future (Story time line wise)
As for the elements of Harmony and what they'd do...? Who knows? Will it happen? It might. Or will Prey figure out some way to avoid them? The future will tell. Currently, as long as he avoids notice, he's okay. You can't zap what you don't know is a threat after all. 😁
Boldly editing small mistakes never before noticed by the eyes of editor-kind.
Apologies strikes again!
The tense here changes. Alternatively, you could make the rest of the sentence past tense.
Needs an apostrophe for possession. I'm not sure if it's supposed to be plural or not, I assumed so since guards so far have usually been in pairs.
The subject of the coralling only needs to be identified once.
Apostrophe.
I swear somewhere in here when Gloom was speaking there was a missing space after a comma but I've been searching for ten minutes and I'm starting to think I might be crazy. Crazy? I was crazy once. They put me in a room...
Oh, and I was wondering, in your head is ISND read out by the letters or pronounced like a word? In my head I always read it as being pronounced like "is-nid, " with the exception of when explaining what it is.
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I guess in my head, it was always pronounced by the letters, as in: I.S.N.D., but how ever you read it is fine too I'm sure. Can't really stop people reading it how they want, now can I? 😄 That's unfortunately not within my super powers.
And thank you again for helping by pointing out these editing mistakes as you've read through. 🍎
I wasn't certain until I looked it up, but Sargent should be changed to Sergeant, unless it's some sort of language thing like colour vs color
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Hello. Yes, that is a language thing, it's just spelt differently. Quite a few people have pointed it out, thanks.
So. It just occurred to me that sheep shouldn't have that long of a lifespan. I wonder if the curse involves slow aging?
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🤐
Error report: impressive display of agility and hared (hurried) off between the tables with his head down.
just me(,) myself(,) and I to plan and think while I work.'
Taffy seemed to lo
ose interest,and Princess Luna chose this position for me specially (I believe 'specifically' to be a better word choice here).
He gavePrey a very obvious stare in case (space needed)
-I'm getting tiredof having to corral you all the time-' (space needed)
he would lo
ose all his hard work.And on the off chance that you think I'm not enjoying your story and just seeing the flaws. No, I'm reading roughly 50k words a day of it because I'm rather fond of it. I'm simply saving a proper review for when I'm all caught up.
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Thank you for the help again and taking the time to point these out. 😅
Although, "hared off" is grammatically correct. It is a phrase meaning to run rapidly while dodging.
But thanks anyway!
I can see it now. Taffy at Prey's mercy, begging for her life and asking why. Then told she has to die for the heinous crime of offering him too much toffee.
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Taffy Toffee the Traitorous Treacle Traitor. 👌
I've gotten this far, and I'm really enjoying the story. But one massive thing is bugging me:
"Sargent" is not a rank. "Sergeant" is the word you are looking for, and it pains me that it's used so prolifically in this story. Also, to a lesser extent, calling SGTs "Officers" is wrong, they're NCO's or SNCO's.
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I'm uh, no kind of expert on military terms. I just went with what Google told me when I searched, sorry.
jaja oh, Gloom <3
I proud of them <3
MMmmmm....
I am currently rereading this story and I have to say I am enjoying it even more this time. This chapter made me realize how perfect implementation of setup and payoff in this story truly is. I wish to give you my highest praise.👌🧐