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Lambs Prey


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Maybe stuff delays job? Not? · 8:06pm Nov 11th, 2020

Got a new Temp. job. The hours are long and shift rota's are awful, but it's a job so I'm taking it. 😐
Will have to wait and see what this means for new Chapters. Hopefully nothing, because that mean's there would be no change to schedule. We shall see I guess...

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I don't comment very often, in fact I don't even browse this site that often any more, but the story you are creating is spectacular. I haven't read something that truly conveyed its emotions so well in... I can't remember how long. Each climactic scene gives me a sense of tension, each victory for Prey a fleeting moment of elation, followed by wariness for what is to come. The dialogue is thorough, but not bloated, each conversation is easy to follow and enjoyable to read.
Your characters are distinct, each with flaws, virtues, and names(I really like your naming system, how a lot of characters don't have related first and last names, it's very refreshing) that make them really stand out against the sea of generic OCs.
The sense of Prey constantly balancing on a knifes edge of survival is also really well done, I never feel as though he is completely safe, some hidden danger always seems to be lurking around the corner.
One of my favorite scenes so far (there are many) has been the night spent waiting out the Hungry Thing from the wolfing wood. The use of not showing the danger was phenomenal, especially with the remains left behind in the morning showing that it was a real, tangible threat. The buildup of tension and terror was wonderful, and left me with a pervasive sense of unease and fear.
I'll stop my rambling now, but I just wanted to say that this story makes/lets me empathize with the characters and situations more than any other I have read.
I look forward to whatever comes next. :)

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Oh, um, why thank you and I'm glad you think so. 😊

Been following your story, Prey and a Lamb for a while now. Not sure why I never followed you, considering how much of an amazing author you are.

The story your telling is one few authors can compare to on this site.

You are an AMAZING writer and you should be proud

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