This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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I wonder if Discord is going to pop up?
much more
Overall, great read, as always
IMO, Hearth's Warming is a PONY holiday. It celebrates the creation of Equestria & I don't see non ponies being really happy about that.
I'd post a link, but I've only got my cellphone. Try Saturday Night Live "Christmas Time For The Jews"
Noticed a few errors
He could always keep it to give out next Nightmare Night.
Then by flying backwards. If forward has become reverse, then reverse becomes forward.
well looks like Discord is on the horizon, wonder who's gonna be more traumatized him or prey, my moneys on both
Uh oh! That'll be interesting, I wonder if Discord will have anything to say to Prey, with him being one of the most chaotic and dangerous individuals in Canterlot after all.
Discord seemed to have a sort of Sixth sense for that kind of thing in the show, but perhaps he's not quite so omniscient and Prey could still slip under the radar, perhaps with him, Crimson, and Gloom as well.
Poisoning, death threats, interrogations, political prisoners, Lilly being covered in shit, and a prophecy of chaos aside, this was a really sweet and wholesome chapter.
I wonder if Prey learnt of any dark magic while in Dreverton from the other prisoners if they were able to share stories and speak to each other
I guess tree-legs need fertilizing too.
The mental image of Prey dropping a dead rat at someone's hooves while giving them puppy eyes is too damn funny XD
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Based on the descriptions in the early chapters, it seems like Dreverton just does 24/7 solitary confinement for all the prisoners.
Date: ruined. I just had to say it, sorry. There's no way author does that unintentionally.
Doesn't S.Happenstance look like Chrysalis undercover? Not quite normal changeling, but the way he ended conversation sounds awful like emotion reading.
Oh.. that's where we are in the timeline.. good to know.
At this point, I am surprised the night guard hasn't given Prey a promotion in rank. He has certainly earned it. I doubt Prey would feel grateful for it, especially since it would make him more noticeable among the guard, but there wouldn't be much he could do to fight be promoted in rank. He might not even mind the night guard promoting him since most of the night guard realize he isn't as helpless as he looks, but the royal guard would know too and that would get him more noticed by them.
Well, this was a very interesting chapter. Also looks like it is leading into Discord...
Excellent chapter! Pie, presents, tolerable acquaintances, less tolerable acquaintances, and semi-fatal Coco! Next chapter will be interesting
Ps: โevent by didn't of beingโ I want to correct this butโฆ Iโm not getting the meaning ๐
Edit: OH!!! And excellent choices of the random guard thoughts, they would definitely want to circle the wagons and protect the ISND
Okay, how the hell can Strange Happenstance be in good standing with law enforcement if there's no way to contact him? Because if he doesn't have an address, if he isn't running a business (which he surely can't without an address), if nobody knows how to contact him... then how does he pay his taxes? How can he keep up with any kind of required documentation that would give him any kind of legal access? How does his bank get in touch with him? How can any kind of government letter reach him? Unless he's a hobo who keeps all his money under a mattress, some level of fraud or corruption is going on.
Because it is super suspicious that he's got enough clout to gainsay guards, but to have exactly zero accountability on any level. Like, "someone in government has to be holding his leash" levels of suspicious.
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He will probably be too preoccupied with the mane 6
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I agree, it is kind of surprising. It doesn't help that he avoids as much attention as possible, even going so far as to give Gloom all the credit. Though like a certain changeling guard in another story, I suspect that Prey would deny any promotion offered to him.
Here cometh the chaos boi, oh shit waddup!
Confetti that goes out with a big boom. Streamers that blaze a trail at any dull reception. Cake so good that it will make your jaw melt away. Candy so delectable that you may eat the limb holding it. Ah, such a wonderful world where we shall rewrite the norm of singing and harmony
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As fun as it is to poke fun at Prey, he's completely asexual and aromantic by virtue of being a prepubescent lich. Plus the narration said that Prey loves Crimson as a brother, and I don't think it was meant in an anime/Alabama sort of way.
I just had a thought; What if Suspicious Circumstances is from the Border Guard? They have to have influence in Canterlot somehow, so Peculiar Occurances being a planted agent to investigate the ISND for fucking up in their territory makes sense. The allusion to Bizarre Incidents being a changeling is just a red herring! It would also explain how he knew about the Guard's inquiry before they announced it; they have people within the Guards or working with the Guards that would inform him.
He would also have access to plenty of magical artifacts, as it's kinda clear that the Border Guard are at least partially rogue. It makes sense that they would have a couple knick-knacks to help them keep their autonomy through intrigue.
just wow, what a fashion statement lol
Discord may be the next chapter! Finally! And in seems that the characters will interact with the consequences of it and not just go to another place. (This would allow the wedding to occur while they are in the clans... ๐ค)
And I donโt think it will happen, but Discord would be the being powerful enough to remove the golden tracersโฆ
But well, now to the chapter itself: I loved the fact that Prey was almost poisoned. For some reason I didnโt consider that the act of checking for poison would pay off, it seemed โnormalโ enough, but it was foreshadowing. Good job!
Prey gifting knives to everyone was amusing ๐ and a very Prey thing to do . As he said: โYou can never have too many knives.โ
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I, for some reason, get the feeling that this Discord would not be as... Easy, to lock away as the canon version.
I'd say that the chances of Discord removing Prey's gold bands wouldn't happen till pigs fly, but then again, Discord has proven he can do that.
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Three words: "Celestia's Royal Guards."
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Yeah, I did not mean to write that. Sorry. But thank you to all for pointing it out for correction. ๐
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Ha! ๐ Have you got anymore of those "Strange Happenstance's" alliterations lying around?
Good theory too. I'm not saying it's the correct one, but it does have merit.
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Bring on the Chaos. Bringer of Chaos. Here it comes. Here it comes. "Pfff. Shka'matics."
But yes, we have finally gotten to Discord in canon. I am looking forwards to writing the next chapter.
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Thank you for the correction, I meant "dint". Also, you know, thank you for the compliment.
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โ = ๐
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๐ - โ=๐
that typo about Lilly wearing loose shit instead of a loose shift deserves to stay it had me laughing
Caught an error for you. Rest of the chapter looked pretty clean.
Strange Happenstance is probably either a bizarre Changeling, or a fellow Mind-leech.
One wonders, does Pony named Strange Happenstance need to have "Whacked for digging into wrong things" removed from his life insurance contract. Imagine what kind of a curse that kind of destiny is, always being pushed to solve strange things.
I am quite certain it is very thankless life, and very much something which would disqualify him from organizations with any level of incompetency or corruption. Even Princesses likely would avoid hiring him, if his talent would be to solve strange things then smallest thing can unearth old painful scars and or secrets.
Well, if he is not a 'ling or something that is.
I've been thinking this for a while. but has pray ever got an A wool cut. it's been half a year since he was in the night guard his wool has to be big and puffy. it might be annoying and itchy. and it will drag him down.
Well I'm done with my dumb question.
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Shears would be tricky to operate with hooves and mouth, but nothing Prey's determination cant overcome. Or maybe equestrian sheep weren't bred to be extra wooly and dont need shearing.
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Dude equestrian sheep really. Prey was never born in Equestria. he was born in the borders so he was in another Nation all together.
So that means he ain't legally an equestrian. he might have been born in one of the small unknown Nations.
We don't know everything the big writer or creator upstairs ain't making the call.
But I got one question how did they get the pray's file in another Nation. it's slightly confusing. Mayhaps there might be equestrian spys in other nations.
I better protect myself in my own bird nest *reload crossbow click*
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Well, born on the border. This is more ancient style borders where the exact border line is kind of a hazy affair and there are large stretches of land that are effectively controlled by no country. If you are under the jurisdiction of any country's military, you are effectively living in that country in those cases. The Equestrian military had jurisdiction and Equestria had been calling the shots, so he counts as Equestrian born for all intensive purposes (even if the region he was from went into full revolt that was later put down).
A few countries might have formalized borders between them, but Prey seemed to be living on the edge of where Equestria had no formal neighbor and claimed the land around it as far as they could militarily hold it.
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I meant any sheep in MLP universe - they dont have their own nation anyway. And it looks like pony society tends to disregard official stuff in favour of mutual trust and harmony, somehow making it work. Same with Happenstance - its easy for a freelancer to live unchecked even in modern police state; just dont do anything that draws attention and nobody will care enough to investigate.
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They cut his wool after he was rescued from the border towns, I think. Not entirely sure, though.
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If prey's Village was under a Equestria rule there would have been more ponies around and helping out the landscape in the creatures.
But no there was a greedy slimy Earth Pony stallion mayor/dictatorship. I bet he was inflating the money so that much of it goes to him. well the little creature get so little. So he got a Escape funds.
And I bet he had a escape plan if the creatures of vaulted against him. but he had one trump card. he can call and Pegasus to make it rain in a dry and Barren land.
So he was the dictator of his little land well the equestrians did not care. So he had all the cards in his favor. But when the war started he quickly left The Village. When everything was about to go and Flames.
So if the village burned down. pray Medical records and his date of birth and and everybody else's records in the Village might have burned in the hospital.
So pray technically is not a citizen if everything was gone. So pray is not a citizen of any country.
Okay I'm done here. I'm tired of writing. And this war of comments and theories.
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Prey's entire resentment of Celestia was Equestria's treatment of non-ponies as not even second class citizens, more like third class or not at all. Equestria came in and told them all to evacuate to the interior of the country with little thought of how this would impact them and didn't provide services that the rest of the pony dominated regions enjoyed, nor did they come and defend his village when the resistance burned it to the ground. Basically, that they were all living under Celestia's rule but only the ponies seemed to reap the benefits. Those earth pony landlords were forcibly evacuated as well, and Prey noted that the earth ponies were often treated as the second class citizens while non ponies were lower than that. You never saw pegasi or unicorns in the region other than when the military came and unicorns in particular became targets for his hatred.
Prey hated the resistance as well, for obvious reasons, but he kept fighting their battles after they were gone because he agreed with what had started the resistance to begin with, that Equestria didn't care about anyone but ponies and he wanted them gone from the region if all they were going to do was rule with no benefit to the non-ponies.
Why Equestria didn't actually provide those benefits is probably not as cut and dry as Prey views it. Their control of the region might have been tenious to begin with, these were the outskirts of civilization living on the wilds, and their ability to provide services not as absolute as it might appear. There was a lack of strong infrastructure linking the outer regions of the country to the interior, and the nobles have far more say about how those resources are allocated than Prey gives credit forโmeaning it was no conscious choice on Celestia's part to neglect them, but having her hooves tied by politics, she is a monarch, but she is a monarch beholden to the nobles and Equstrian law, not an absolute dictator as Prey views her. If she ignored the nobles and just started dictating things she could very easily end up with revolts in the interior of the country and have the entire country descend into chaos.
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What Prey doesn't understand is that no amount of personal power can give unlimited control over something as big as country. Decisions require subordinates with their limited mortal abilities.
[cerebral artillery-on] It is likely that Equestria was much bigger before Lunar Rebellion (ruins in Mayflower arc?), then Celestia found out how ruling alone consumes 300% of her time, while country still falls apart. Relating some power to nobles, wars with their kids, and eventually outer territories fall off, in couple centuries becoming civilized, but largely ungoverned land. [/headcannon]
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That would also explain where Luna is during the weddingโฆ
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Now I can see Luna's plans: "The ISND is the most effective unit in the Guard. That's why your next mission would be: find clan Myrrdon and convince them to join me... You have a week." ๐
Hah, usually we always have "after checking for poison", I just KNEW there was too much empaphis on the hot chocolate, of course there was something just after SH.
This is weird, but I now consider him a dark horse, why would he let slip the "I see" just before the poisoning ? Despite my better judgement I'd say he just noticed the ISND aren't the bullies he expected them to be.
Of course I expect to be proven wrong in a near future.
And now, after all this stuff, Discord will mess things up. I'm quite happy he won't be in Canterlot in the meantime, so while the useless6 will be busy just saying "oh yeah, friends" we'll see how regular people have to deal with it.
I'm also very scared of one thing; candies are the only normal things Prey ever liked, this event might traumatize him. Because after being terrified of regular magic, even more of alicorn magic, there will be chaos magic, taking the shape of his loved sugar balls.
Poor lamb, hang in there.
Excellent chapter, some good twists here and there, can't wait for 13 other days.