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im just waiting for our lamb to smah open the head of the guards xD
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Wow.... I didn't think I had made that many mistakes..... (Yikes, gotta' re-read more carefully)
But thank you very much for your help and pointing them all out! It is a great help, since I'm still not too sure what I'm doing yet. (I'm blaming my English teacher. Yes. That's my excuse and I'm sticking with it)
Also thank you for telling me about those Proof Reader's (I will need to go and learn what the requirements are there)
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Hello again,
And also thanks again for pointing out mistakes (Are you one of those proof readers? perhaps? You're quite good at spotting things)
To answer your query on Fleece and Gossamer's resistance name, Fleece is Breaker, Gossamer is Prey. Lance was the name of a donkey in the line next to Gossamer/Prey. Did I not manage to make that clear in the story do you think? If not, I will need to go back and change it.
For the "tact" vs 'tack' or 'tactics', those could work too. Tact was what I originally meant; meaning skill in dealing with someone (somepony) delicately.
Greatly appreciated your help, once again.
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Yeah, I'm one of the proofreaders. I'm retired, it's a hobby. You can pick from a list, they have preferences.
Or, I could do it.
Well, IDK how clear it was.
It confused me
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Thank you for the offer Sweetolebob. But you are the one who is retired, so I think it comes down to what you want as your preference.
I can go to the Proof Reader's link you gave me, it's no problem. (Have to write the next chapter yet, so there's that of course :P) It is a kind offer regardless, so thank you!
(Tried to make the 'who is Lance and who is Fleece?' question clearer too)
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The usual way that it works is:
You write it as usual
Then
you either send me the link & password for your writing site
OR
you E-mail the chapter to me
I E-mail you any corrections + comments
You make any corrections needed then submit it
For 1 chapter, it usually takes me no more than a day or so
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Thank you for your offer, that is most kind.
It might be a few weeks though. 😅Need to write the next chapter up and all! (Not going to be quite as long as the last two)
Thanks again.
The word you are looking for is dormant volcano.
You are doing an excellent job of making me hate Valour.
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Hello. Thank you for your help! Pointing out things that I did wrong is most appreciated.
Also, you're not supposed to like Valour 😄So I guess I'm doing him right.
Question: Will Prey try to convert one of the Elements of Harmony to his side?
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It might be quite a while (story wise) before/if Prey meet's any of the elements of harmony.
I do have a vague plan-ish that he will eventually, but that not yet. Will just have to see what happens
So, he was 6 when he joined the Rebellion, 9 when he started learning magic, 13 when he went to prison for life & he is 70 now.
https://www.bing.com/videos/search?q=lyrics+mama+tried&&view=detail&mid=D2F605BDEFF8E45591F3D2F605BDEFF8E45591F3&&FORM=VRDGAR
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Yep. He is still mentally quite a lot like a child/lamb though.
To the video link: You have a slightly different taste in music to normally of what I would expect (That's not a bad thing though) Do you like Johnny Cash by chance?
Mamma' may have tried but mamma's dead for Prey :'-(
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Actually, my mother was the country/western fan. I can stand it (& even like a few), but overall this is my opinion of CW
https://www.bing.com/videos/search?q=lyrics+so+ill+hang+around+as+long+as+you+will+let+me&&view=detail&mid=8E8B6A0D68F0B63E50258E8B6A0D68F0B63E5025&&FORM=VRDGAR
It's tedious, pointless, & annoying but sometimes mildly amusing.
I like Sunshine, shame he has to put up with a stallion like Valour.
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The Solar Guard are rather fanatical supporters of Celestia, almost to a religious level. "You don't like Princess Celestia? Hersey! Burn the unbeliever!"
Thanks for the comment BTW.
im so looking forward to when prey get the upper hand and makes Valour pay
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Will he? Or won't he succeed? Life is unfair, sometimes the guilty go unpunished, the good guys fail. Which is which and who will win? We will have to wait and see....
Oh, and I am also glad that you seem to be liking the story.
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ha ha thanks i knew life is unfair, but not you with you taunt,
but in the grand scheme of things prey winning would be bad for equstria, either way you got me hooked so good show
Valour just crossed a pretty big line.
with each chapter my hate for Captain Valour increases im fully committed to prey side and seeing him win even if he a bad guy
All right folks stories over!... XD
I smell opportunity. If the side of justice will not serve him, well. There are others that think themselves superior and would not spurn a fragile little lamb, thinking they could bend him to their will and make use of him.
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You sir, are very insightful. Wait until the next chapter and see if it holds your answer.
never underestimate your enemy lest they destroy you, night watcher is about to learn this lesson, sadly for him it the last lesson he ever learn
Pfft
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Pfft?
What does that mean?
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Probably. No promises though.
Next chapter is soon though, so it won't be long to wait to find out.
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Agreed.
Prey has a point.