Racist—I mean race-based story submitted for Jake the Army Guy’s Horseword Extravaganza 2.
This is the story of what happened to the thestral race during Luna’s rebellion and after it.
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Visiden Visidane
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This was quite well done. I enjoyed the evolution of the Onyx line down through the ages as well as the changes to Mount Nocturnal and thestral culture. It strikes me as an accurate portrayal of what actually would have happened. It might have been nice to have some sort of epilogue, but that might have detracted from the punch of the ending.
Some striking snapshots of how the nation developed through the ages, while nicely addressing how Luna could be forgotten when a nation devoted to her was right next door. But each chapter needed a great deal of exposition to work, especially the early ones, lessening the overall effectiveness. This needed more real estate to deliver the biggest impact. Still a well-crafted historical tragedy, but not quite up to its fullest potential.
I’m just glad VV still delivers even though the audience is but a fraction of that which was there for Upheaval.
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Daily hits are still about 1.6 million per day. At its height, I think that number was only a bit over 2 million so I think over 2/3rds of us are still here.
Sorry it took me a while to find this story. Is this consistent with upheavel?
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No.
This guy right here is using OK Boomer memes 1000 years too early.
Nice Job as always Visiden, I must have missed this story when it came out, Glad I found it today.
It is always a Joy to read Something from such a Talented writer.
-Runn