This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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Oof. Big amounts of oof.
Accurate picture.
Will Grogar be in the story?
I feel like I'm missing something here. How did the others find out about Prey talking with Saffron?
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Ah probably or possibly not but the only thing that is sure is that now the wait begins
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Err, they didn't? 😅
I think I see what's happened, you've got confused between Saffron and Seashores. They both start with a 'S', but Seashores is the one who got almost crushed to death in the Lumber Yard a couple of chapters back and ended up in intensive care.
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Um, probably not? It's a long way ahead in the time line for Grogar.
Damn it Prey, stop these little things, you're going to get caught red handed one day.
If you want to remove her, just keep the act to the end.
Anyway, great chapter as always, thanks again for the quality story.
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Ah, thank you. That makes a lot more sense.
I’m enjoying the story greatly. The pseudo-sibling relationship that seems to be developing between Prey and Crimsons is heartwarming.
I enjoy how Prey is talking more honestly with Gloom and Crimson. I always wanted to see how others would react to his opinions. Anyways I complete agree with the ISND’s interpretation of the coming interrogations. This feels like it’s going to be the Pony guard equivalent of the Salem Witch trials. And if the bridge between the night guard and the Royal guard wasn’t already burnt down, this just might do it.
Gloom is really starting to annoy me with him constantly 'correcting' prey. I am now just waiting for when someone brings it up. Anyway great chapter as always and I will look forward to the next one :-)
is it gloom's or crimson's since crimson is the one sparring.
awaiting/ that awaited
think
means
change
pegasus'
Welp I'm guessing lemon pink was involved with sea shores' demise. The guard seem pretty incompetent most of the time but how long will prey and lemon get before they're found out.
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As proofreader, it is clear that I need to step up my game.
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Lamb's Prey is working on the basis 1 Season = 1 year (give or take)
That was S9 & this is still in S1. So, not for a LONG time -if ever.
Plus, Grogar was really Discord in disguise. It's not clear how much he even existed away from his coopted villains
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Ah, thank you once again for your assistance in pointing out my silly mistakes. It's very helpful. Hope you liked the chapter aside from those bits 😅
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Why thank you 😇
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Glad I can please. 🍎
And no, it's not looking good for the relationship between the Royal and Night Guards.
Personally I think this is as good as griffin the griffin.
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Maybe when Twilight, Spike and Starlight travel through time one of the alternate Equestrias could be one where Prey never was defeated/captured.
Now I also want to know how Discord will react to him...
(That is if they encounter each other.)
It occurs to me that you might want to update the cover picture of Prey to include his hair ribbons.
It has occurred to many people that too much occurs to me
A calm episode, but new future conflicts are abrew.
Very exited about the impending investigation of the night guard, or more specifically the ISDF, or more specifically Prey.
They might ask some uncomfortable questions, like. Where are your parents, why where you in jail, in a lead cell where a solar guard put you.
Figured the night guard didn't bother asking anything since Luna orchestrated the whole thing.
Try for the chapter
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I'm the proofreader. I'm supposed to catch mistakes like that, but far too many get by me
I was going back over chapters looking for information and found a small error
Error report: We all serve the Princess's don't we? (Princesses)
Prey is starting to show his true evil, manipulative nature. I wonder how long before Luna and he will do a mind battle?
That was an interesting one. Lots of stuff going on. A big fight, Prey trying to taunt a unicorn into suicide, and of course the royal guard are going to dig into Gloom for bending a few rules along the way.
Tell me, will we know more about Saffron Swirl? :c
why does that unicorn safron remind me so much of blueblood
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Rich, self-absorbed, angsty, white furred, unicorn noble?
"Hmm, I'm just not seeing the connection..."
Infact, he was almost relived.
In fact, relieved.
The point was, Prey should've been able to make it the half-minute trot to the bathroom without having to cross paths with any infuriating ponies.
you don't need the it (should've been able to make). I also notice an extra space between trot and to.
what could've caused a whole fifteen ponies to dissapear
disappear
he immediately started looking around for cover incase magic started getting thrown around
in case
Also, you consistently use Sargent throughout the story. Maybe it's a stylistic choice? Just in case it isn't, Sergeant is how its normally spelled.
Oof. I was hoping for better for Sea Shore. You gave just enough information to be rooting for her. And even worse, sounds like she might actually have been recovering, but in the end suffered a very unnecessary death. And no insight in who she left behind, I assume it was her colt or filly.
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Yeah, the Sargent vs sergent thing, that goes on throughout the whole story.
I have no idea why but images without any outside links stright up dont work. All i get is [upstream error] and idk what it do about it.
Its a long shot this comment will be seen but its worth a try
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Hi there. Unfortunately, that's mostly the FiMfiction's site's fault. It won't let you just Copy+Paste images directly, it makes you go through a convaluted [img.] paste method. Instead, I'll just add a link to the picture off-site if that helps. 😋 https://imgur.com/RK3OoUz
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thanks!
also, I will start commenting on chapters that have this issue to point the issue out. A good amount of chapters I've read so far have this issue (and I expect more later on, it isn't a bad thing though). although I don't know if i should do that
> spread decent
dissent