This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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Damn... great chapter
I suppose this is where this arc kicks off. Looking forward to more.
By the way, I think if you don't include any more graphic descriptions of gore, ou should be able to keep it T, but if it becomes a semi-reoccuring thing, you might have to increase it to Mature.
Awesome as always
Ah, I was close on my guess. I got the salt part right and the dead part right. Canβt wait for next chapter!
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As proofreader, that would be on me
I do my best, but one does occasionally get by me
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Why yes, you certainly did get it right. However, I couldn't admit that now could I? Spoilers and all that.
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π Okay, thanks for replying to the question about T and M. If that is the case, is probably going to still be T. At least for the foreseeable future.
Ah this is such a interesting story and so fun to read .Wherever you take this, i'm along for the ride.
And concerning the rating. You didn't went into to much gory detail so i think T is fine.
Eh, I feel like if you were comfortable leaving this as "T" up to this point, you should probably be good with ot now.
But now the plot thickens! And inam even more hyped to see what happens than before!
why is night guard so understaffed. prior to luna the night shift was manned by the day guard. did they just quit covering nights and now are overstaffed on day shift? what happened to all the day guard ponies that were covering night shift before luna returned?
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I'm going with that there were always plenty of Royal Guards. At the time, the night needed far fewer Royal Guards to stand sentry, as less happened during the night. (The Palace was shut down, and there was no night court held because no Luna.)
But Luna is now back, and there aren't plenty of Night Guards to go around. If everypony is perfectly honest in Canterlot, the Night Guard isn't really needed and are just playing at being Guards because it's what Luna wants and they're pandering to her needs. At least, that's their view.
So yes, I suppose there might be a bit of a surplus of Royal Guards too. π
Always excited when i see a new chapter.
Keep up the excellent work!
I like this chapter. It brings up some of the observations Iβve made about the story, the setting, and the characters.
Though it also introduces something that I hadnβt considered about Prey. He may be a good liar, but his desensitization to horrible things do to his background seems to be a kinda tail. Though Prey is fairly self-aware, heβs also prone to being narrow minded and can suffer from tunnel vision. An example would be how he doesnβt seem to be aware of how important it is to fake the shock of seeing a dead body/bodies if he wants to hide his past.
Iβm looking forward to future chapters.
Honestly, I can see Prey screwing up soon. Heβll accidentally let something slip, heβll react instinctively and someone will get hurt, or even worse killed and heβll just act like itβs all normal. Whether it be by word of mouth or by his actions I donβt see him keeping the lie up much longer. Heβs already had a few close calls already.
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"Oh what a tangled web we weave, when first we practice to deceive."
I just had a random thought about this story, what would it be like if some things in the story were changed. such as: if there was significantly less crime and illegal activity, the royal/night guards were much more incompetent. But everything thing stays the same especially: preys backstory, abilities and personality.
TL:DR
Prey in the normal show but his backstory (the violence at the border area and nopony in the central area knows about it), personality and abilities (immorality and rune magic) stays the same
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Personally i find it a little bit of a shame that certain details such as murder, corpses, ect will be toned down to keep the T rating but, overall it doesnt make a difference because this story is perfect already
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With that sort of set up, I can see two possible ways the story could've gone:
The first is quite quite possibly the most boring option. 1. Prey never gets captured, and continues hiding out in the Deeper Green for decades, slowly getting more isolated and paranoid, until he is exclusively a hermit living in the middle of a Runic mine field and kills anyone who might/could ever threaten him, while trying to avoid Celestia's notice.
Option 2 I see is Prey becomes a typical villain, and goes on the path of conquest. But with real in depth plans, schemes, behind the scene manipulation, and lots and lots of mind control. And murder. Lots'a murder. Hmm.....
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Finally able to catch up.
What a delight, and Prey just did a mistake, he lied to advance the whole scheme.
Hope it won't bite him later on, I'm rooting for the lamb.
Prey really makes me think of a darker version of Eugène François Vidocq. Someone with a criminal past (and still may perform the occasional criminal activity, albeit in Prey's case very much still a criminal) that starts helping solve crimes for one reason or another. Even if it's just to keep appearances of being useful to Princess Luna, Prey is proving to be a major asset to the Night Guard - his suggestion for crime scenes to be photographed will no doubt be revolutionary, and his investigative skills are top-notch. If Twilight ever learns about him - likely from Shining Armor, one of the Princesses, or Night Guard/ISND case files - he's going to have a Hell of a time dealing with our favorite bookhorse.
I look forward to the next chapter, this story's going in my favourites shelf!
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This weekend
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Yes, earth is right, this weekend. I seem to be able to complete and put out chapters on almost exclusively a 2 week basis.
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The future is fluid. The board is set. And the pieces are moving.
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Well of course Twi would be the one to recognize all the inconsistencies related to Prey's situation. That, and of course Prey slipping up every once in a while with a fun fact. What I want is the interrogation when they find out who he is, and him ripping Celestia a new one over how I'm guessing the situation with his village was covered up and forgotten, or seen as a minor conflict.
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I meant more like Twilight geeking out over investigative techniques (now that I think about it, Rarity would probably interested in him for that reason too) and pestering him to the point he'd want to destroy her mind, but you're right. Out of everypony, Twilight would likely be the one to dig deeper and find out what Prey's story is, although I'd think it'd mostly be because she can't leave well enough alone. Especially once she discovers there's a lack of information about why Prey was imprisoned.
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It might be that Twilight will be the only individual able to match Prey intellectually. Which will prove very interesting if their opposed upbringings conflict, which I am sure they will. A battle between naive innocence & jaded pragmatism.
moar?
when is next chapter?
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It should be tomorrow (or the next day) But this weekend certainly. π
*happiness noise*
Wait he could put runes on the ribbon
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I don't think runes in this case can be shrunk, or alternatively, the array form isn't conducive to being placed on a small ribbon.
I await the Changling Invasion.
Just imagine, some changeling attempts to impersonate Prey, and is found out in the first few seconds due to 'Uncharacteristic child-like behaviour'.
On the opposite end, some changeling trys to pull love from Prey.
"Impossible! How can your heart hold no love?!?"
"Lady, I've been a depressed psociopath for sixty years."
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It might be a while yet before the invasion, but you certainly do paint a funny picture there of a changeling trying to impersonate Prey. π
There is also... "something" coming up, but I'm not allowed to give spoilers. π€
Re-reading this after not reading it for a year or so is hilarious. I completely forgot about the dead bodies in that cellar and it gave me a chuckle on the others reactions throughout the chapter.
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Wow. Huh. I guess it has been some time since I've started this story. A chapter every two weeks, and I'm at 51 Chapters currently, so that's, uh... 102 weeks. Huh. In my head, this story just seems to "be", a state of ongoing existence but I hadn't thought that it'd been nearly two years.
Error Report: Gloom wordlessly turned they (them) around and lead them first to a bathroom
but I do knowledge (acknowledge) it.
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Thank you, as usual. Caught up with the last list of edits. π
Great work. You've completely brought me around
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π Thanks.
rereading a few chapters, thought this particular line was funny