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The Abyss


Jason's life has grown dull. While some may have thought that the weekly monster attacks might have kept him on his toes, he had grown to learn that as the norm around town. Now, after months of living in Ponyville, he can't shake the feeling that there is a void in his life. He follows his usual routine every day: breakfast, a quick shower, followed by a quick walk to the park to read the newspaper. One morning, he finds two parents playing with their filly in the playground. As he watches, an idea sparks within his mind: why not adopt a pony of his own?

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Poor Nightshine! She is about to get her wish soon, but how will she handle having an unusual father, no mother, and Ponyville in general? Will be tracking this story and I have had my heart strings throughly pulled by this start!


That last scene was a real stab in the heart for me! Poor Nightshine...She's so sad :applecry:

Awesome chapter man and I can simply not wait for the next chapter!!!

So far a bit on the fence with this one, but I'm defenetly going to keep an eye out for updates. I honestly expect this to good but I'm not much for HiE stories for the most part.
Then again I have never been really dissapointed by anything you've written so far Abyss. Here's to hoping it gets well recieved :raritywink:


Adorable. Simply adorable. Give us moar.:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

I noticed a few errors in the human's portion, but they didn't detract too much.

Didn't notice any errors in Nightshine's portion. My eyes were blocked by the feels.

Was in the room when Puss was drafting the picture, so I was wondering when this would see the light of day. Looks incredibly promising, and you definitely have my attention :pinkiehappy:

A few typos, a few wrong words used, things like that.

6823504 Typos? Could you point them out for me please? In a PM would be preferable.

Hm, I can't bandwagon this.

Cute story, though.

6823456 Yo, Abyss!

This is really good. I'll add it to the Watch list and see how this develops, if you consider adding more on to it.

I'm certainly looking forward to seeing how this develops in the next few chapters or so.

Also, are you planning on going over how Jason actually happened to arrive in Equestria? It may still be a bit early, but it seemed pretty glossed over in this chapter. :applejackunsure:

Comment posted by Texus deleted Jan 13th, 2016


Also, are you planning on going over how Jason actually happened to arrive in Equestria? It may still be a bit early, but it seemed pretty glossed over in this chapter

Yes, I already have a scene planned in a future chapter to have him explain all of that.

Yay a story with you OC

...Hmmm...Yeah, I could go for a cute story. Its been awhile since I decided to follow one of these.

You know they should totally have a cute tag! That would be nice.

Smelled some Pusspuss in the art.

Might as well stay for the story.

D'awwww can't wait to follow this one.

6823801 He also graciously drew the custom pagebreak that I'm using in this chapter. He drew another one, too.

wow I do not think you know the kind of masterpiece you have here this story is going to be a total run away this is a true hit.
The Abyss has something here to watch vary closely.
and the art work it just fits perfectly.
:heart: Harts Fire

Part of me imagined continuing with all of this buildup, really making the readers emotionally connect with Nightshine, and then having Jason simply adopt a different bat pony filly.

It might make me literally Hitler, but I enjoyed the hilarity of the thought.

6823780 They should totally make a cute tag! Also, if you're looking for more cute stories, I have several of them. :twilightblush:

Finally, a new story to follow! I can't wait to see where this one goes!

I am greatly enjoying this story! I can't wait to read the next one! :pinkiehappy:

An Abyss story that isn't porn? How did that happen?

The hoofwritten books that he always got from Twilight Sparkle

Unless Twilight deliberately give him really old books this whole "hoofwritten" thing don't make any sense. I really doubt that A.K. Yearling hire lots and lots of scribes to make loooooots of her "Daring Do" book copies and lots of artist to make covers of said books.
Considering that they also have fashion magazines with photos in it I'm pretty sure that ponies know hot to print books. Hell, even Ponyvile school have their own paper press.

6824172 I was going to explain this in a later chapter, but he has a hard time reading hoofwritten things, and it was supposed to help him acclimate.

6824237 Lol. Just wait until the advertisements for type 2 diabetes start showing up.

6824034 Well, I do write things other than clopfics, so... yeah.

Well, color me surprised, then. I thought horrifying fetish porn was your entire shtick. No offense intended, of course, except for the parts that are entirely intended.

6824308 Uh... what? Horrifying fetish porn? I'm not into dark stuff bro.

We've got different standards there, I think. Incest and foalcon are way into the "dark" stuff for me, but for what it's worth, you're much less awful about it than some people I've met here, so don't take it too seriously. I was just being tongue-in-cheek about that original comment.

I bet whoever did that art for you is a big loser! :flutterrage:

6824311 so he is from a small city in south Carolina so he is either from Columbia, Greenville, or Lexington.

It's here! Time to read adorableness!

6824322 Yeah I want to follow that loser home! Um...for manly reasons.

6824409 I bet you wanna get your snuggle on.:twilightblush:

6824426 I would say bear him hugging softly.:heart:

Also great start by the way!

So adorable, looking forward to more. :twilightsmile:

when is chapter 2 coming out? :heart:

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