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The Whiskey Spirit


You can never have enough whiskey.

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Aurick was working on a teleportation circle when a friend distracts him, causing him to overcharge the spell. Once it activated, it teleported him much further than he wanted it to. Now he's stuck in Equestria with no monsters to kill and no evil to fight. He might as well start an enchanting business and make some money. Hopefully his life gets less stressful from here on out.

Constructive criticism is always wanted.

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9370952
Nope, but the world that Aurick is from is loosely based on D&D.

Catpone Adorkability has a way to ease into your heart :twilightsmile:

I wonder how he'll react once he finds out just how plentiful is gold and gemstones in Equestria, if Rarity gem hunts & bits being actually gold are true.

Seeing Spike getting up on Twilight must've looked cute as heck. Hell, this entire world is populated by fluffy catpones, it's made of cute! I'm still expecting him to defeat some pony villain by the power of scritches :yay:

9373718
Clearly that could never happen! Scritches could never be so powerful... could they? :trollestia:

I dunno why but i expected aurick to be like excuse me i can look good AND kick ass.
So far this seems to be going pretty well. I was kinda skeptical when you remade everything but you've done well so far in my opinion. I can't wait to see what shenanigans aurick and co get up to

9373837
Thanks for the support, I hope I only get better as time goes on.

This have started pretty well, and we will see how it goes. I don't see any errors in text, so you have good pre-reader, or you simply take care of them by yourself. Until the next chapter

“You have hooves. On tile."

Some spy corps they've got here, their agents probably check for nightingale floors with their faces.

9375501
Only the best of the best for the Princesses.

9375451
Sadly no pre-reader. I handle it all myself. Glad to know I'm doing a good job on that front.

Well this is interesting, I look forward to seeing where this goes.

Say, whatever happened with that guard that was shadowing him? I was expecting some sort of reaction from Luna since he made her almost immediately, but nothing happened.

9375521
That's to be seen. Luna has taken note, I can assure you of that.

9375550
My only knitpick is that it either has to stay past or present. Otherwise great chapter

Twilight’s only response was to look at Aurick with pleading eyes.

Pleading eyes? Please, she'd be making Puppy Dog Eyes capable of melting Sombra's frozen heart and rivaling the CMC themselves! :rainbowwild:

Good business sense showing there - free teasers and samples to show off the possibilities to the locals. Good for friendly relations too.

In a week's time he'll be so swamped with orders there'll be months of wait time.

“Fine, keep your secrets.”

I lost it :rainbowlaugh:

9377725
Happy New Year! :heart: Thanks for reading.

I raised a brow. He had a feeling

This chapter has more than one instance of indecision between first person and third person.

Other than that, good work so far.

9377770
Yeah, I can't figure if I want to write in first or third person when I write, so I accidentally switch between the two. Thanks for pointing this out.

Sentient is not the same as sapient. Common mistake, yet they don't mean the same.

Other than that nitpick, good story so far.

9377821
Thanks for the info. The mistake has been fixed.

9377780
Personal suggestion? Go with third point of view. It makes things much easier.:yay:

9377848
I've been going with that more often, but there are some story idea that I feel would be better with a first person perspective. It gives a much more personal insight on that character's thoughts. I'm just not that good at that kind of writing style.

Loved the story so far - have a fav and a thumbs-up, kind sir.:moustache:

9377909
Thanks for reading and the feedback. I hope it only gets better from here.

What a good new year start for me, out of nowhere I an interesting story with over 10 chapters!

I found your meme. And I'll be tracking this story now

so its his body in the middle of a crater that they couldn't see?

“The fuck am I even doing?”

Oh, a sane character. How quaint!

Methinks Aurick may be in for a shock when he finds out how common gold and gems are in this world.

And Aurick's poor sleep also apparently kept him from falling deep enough into slumber to dream, and Luna had been concerned/confused as to why she hadn't found his dream until he said that.

Why hello there plot convenience, how have you been lately?

Ah, looks like Inkheart hasn't been tracked down by the guard yet. She's going to need some serious rehab. It's obvious that a sapient mind still resides in there, but it looks like the hermit author has been at least partially subsumed with the overpowering and likely conflicting hungers and instincts thrust upon her. Aurick isn't likely to hesitate to pull from his lethal arsenal, either...though with what's been done to her she's likely to be quite a bit more resilient than he expects.

Since I’m an uncultured blob, I often read stories of this vein assuming that these interloper characters are from shows or movies I haven’t seen. I presumed the same here, until you mentioned a Beholder. This fellow is from D&D. Your preferred character? An elven wizard of the school of enchantment?

Though, with this revelation (assumption) I have a nitpick:
A few chapters ago it is mentioned that he got up lookin awful because he couldn’t get to sleep. Elves in D&D don’t sleep, they trance.

If I’m completely wrong an all counts, I encourage you to point and laugh (and then tell me so I can develop a new hypothesis)

And I’m out of chapters to read.

Dang.

9384265
Not too far off. The world he is from is based on D&D, but is not. As for the preferred character for D&D, I don't have a race I particularly like, but I do enjoy spell casters.

How dare you give me this.... This amazingly gripping story and make it so short?!?. Also. I want this killer pony to become like a pet/apprentice to our main man here. Cause if he throws her into a maid outfit and has her help around with enchantments and what not. I'd say this story is good to be completely done with

9385977
She would make the most adorable killer maid.

I kind of want to see auric befriend the mutant mare, give her an enchanted collar that reduces aggression and bloodlust

Interesting tidbits on his past and how different does an adventurer think compared to a pony.
I wonder if his elven lifespan will ever become relevant in this story?

As expected, Luna would prefer Inkheart survive but has accepted that capturing her alive may not be possible.

I wonder if more of the original mare will return if she's able to sate that raging hunger. If she at least is able to gain more control of herself, she may be able to learn to live normally again even if they can't reverse the splicing. And another thing occurs to me...dragon DNA is one of the things spliced into the poor mare, perhaps part of her hunger could be assuaged with gems, like a dragon would?

9387114
Depends upon how the author is doing elven or pony lifespans. Some settings elves aren't any more long lived than humans, while others they're ageless...and ponies seem to run from absurdly short lives to human-like longevity to living a few centuries in different authors' works. Though it will be interesting how it's presented if it comes up.

I think this is one of the better H IE stories. It has avoided the irritating cookie cutter generic memes that I hate sooooo much. This story proves that you don't need any of that crap to have a great HIE story.

And this is a great story.

The Monk
“Sadly, she was attempting to throw money at a store that had closed for the evening.” -The Whiskey Spirit

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“Sadly, she was attempting to throw money at a store that had closed for the evening.” -The Whiskey Spirit

I still think that is one of the greatest lines I have ever written.

I'm glad you're enjoying it. I've been trying my best to avoid the pit falls I've seen in similar stories, so I'm happy I'm doing well in your eyes. :twilightsmile:

9387389
Me too, it got into my "great quotes" rotation along side DustTraveller, and Reykan.

The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments

9387233
Considering the author said to be basing it in DnD elves, a millennium is an average lifespan. Possibly more, since any make who can cast Clone becomes eternal if they want. So even three hundred year old granny Smith lives at most 1/3 as he can.

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