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Nitpicking your math errors is how I show I care.

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The Mane 6 decide to play Truth or Dare. Like all good games of Truth or Dare, they'll laugh, they'll cry, and it'll get a little weird.


Rated T for mentions of sex and some f-bombs.

Winner of RobCakeran53's long-form Quills and Sofas Speedwriting contest. Conceived and written over the course of a weekend. The prompt was "Around the table."

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Comments ( 47 )
garfan #1 · 2 weeks ago · · ·

Pinkie should have tickled Dash until she cried

This was a lot of fun!
Your characterisations are always really strong and, as I mentioned in the contest discussion you capture the woozy, lurching feeling of a drunken night out well in your shifts of tone and mood which always feel organic.
The ending is very strong too but you know I'm utter raritwi trash so that was always gonna play well with me lol
Great job mate! :twilightsmile:

Kichi #3 · 2 weeks ago · · ·

It was fun, any chance of sequel?

Rarity brought a hoof to her forehead, dramatically wiping away imaginary sweat from her brow. “Free to continue my life of crime, thank Celestia.” She smirked. “Applejack! Truth or dare?”

I love Rarity as a criminal. I'm reminded of Friendship is Dragons, where she starts off as a member of the thieves guild (it's an RPG screencap comic, so she's playing a thief). By the end, she's stolen the thieves guild away from the old master thief (with the aid of Celestia who knows all about it.)

Really good, the "romance" at the end was cute and I laughed some good times.

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Or cut up some onions.

Fluttershy jumped, flushing. “Well, um… I don’t think I could kill any of you. You’re all my friends.”

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Onions sound better, and wow, she was really holding in a lot of repressed anger wasn't she?

I wouldn't mind seeing a part two of this. Just the girls getting around and playing again, but if you don't it still ended perfectly.

This definitely needs a sequel. You NAILED the characterization of the Mane Six perfectly.

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Well said, l too demand a sequel to this or more chapters be added

Cute. I'm a sucker for these kinds of stories and especially for raritwi but hey :pinkiehappy:

Fantastic story! I can't tell you how much I enjoyed reading this. I felt legitimately bad for Rainbow at multiple points, though she DID have it coming.

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even better. I wonder if the realization she could have done this would make her really upset or wish she gets that dare again so she can show how she figured out never needing to do that again

Comment posted by garfan deleted January 6th

This story feels like the type of stories that would and could be seen unfolding in a real life situation. Essentially meaning that this entite story was in of itself well written.

With the underlying tones of a drunken party, and a bit of friendly teasing with one another admist the game. I’d say this was a pretty good story.

Pinkie turned to Rainbow. “This is going to hurt me as much as it hurts you.” She took a deep breath, and before Rainbow could reply, she launched into it. “Nopony really likes you. You’re abrasive, arrogant, and rude. Ponies tolerate you solely because you’re occasionally useful, and because they’re generally too nice to say anything about it. You ended up as part of our group because you were hotheaded enough to challenge Nightmare Moon with no plan, and we were too nice to let you go alone and get yourself killed. Since then, you’ve made Fluttershy cry with your pranks—despite professing to care for her and knowing how she was bullied as a filly. You nearly killed Applejack over a stupid race that nopony cares about, you forced us to endanger our lives and others just to teach you a lesson about your ego, and you became a Wonderbolt purely out of nepotism from multiple princesses. You nearly killed the pet you were trying to save from a natural process because you couldn’t deal with not having your own way, and you caused massive property damage on multiple occasions, but didn’t get into any trouble over it because you’re an Element. In short, you don’t deserve anything you have, and your impression of how awesome you are makes everypony you meet want to slap you.”

And THIS is exactly why I don't like Rainbow Dash, and consider her to be Worst Pony.

Twilight put her head against the table. “Yes, alright? I’ve had dreams about having sex with my brother. Tell nopony. Especially not Shiny, I would die of shame.”

And Luna might make them reoccur just to tease her....and then make it weird by having a dream-cadence watch.

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And Luna might make them reoccur just to tease her....and then make it weird by having a dream-cadence watch.

What do you mean watching? Gotta ship that Twiningdance because it's :heart: :heart: :heart:

Well that was fun. Always nice to read a bit about friends being friends.

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Sounds like you're a much better writer than this hack. I'm excited to see you give your spin on things! Let me know when you publish! :pinkiehappy:

Might I also suggest adding Master Chief into the story? As pop used to say, Ain't no story than can't be improved by making it a Halo Crossover.

Pinkie turned to Rainbow. “This is going to hurt me as much as it hurts you.” She took a deep breath, and before Rainbow could reply, she launched into it. “Nopony really likes you. You’re abrasive, arrogant, and rude. Ponies tolerate you solely because you’re occasionally useful, and because they’re generally too nice to say anything about it. You ended up as part of our group because you were hotheaded enough to challenge Nightmare Moon with no plan, and we were too nice to let you go alone and get yourself killed. Since then, you’ve made Fluttershy cry with your pranks—despite professing to care for her and knowing how she was bullied as a filly. You nearly killed Applejack over a stupid race that nopony cares about, you forced us to endanger our lives and others just to teach you a lesson about your ego, and you became a Wonderbolt purely out of nepotism from multiple princesses. You nearly killed the pet you were trying to save from a natural process because you couldn’t deal with not having your own way, and you caused massive property damage on multiple occasions, but didn’t get into any trouble over it because you’re an Element. In short, you don’t deserve anything you have, and your impression of how awesome you are makes everypony you meet want to slap you.”

Oh my.

All that ad lib?

Geez Pinkie. I'm glad you're on our side.

Twilight put her head against the table. “Yes, alright? I’ve had dreams about having sex with my brother. Tell nopony. Especially not Shiny, I would die of shame.”

Oh my this is too precious! :rainbowlaugh:

Quick! Someone summon Shakespearicles!

Rainbow’s expression grew smug. “Told you I’d get you back,” she boasted. “Just pretend we’re Shining.”

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Good one, Rainbow! Now run for your life.

Hot damn. :derpyderp1:

Most excellent.

This was a lovely little slice of life, and while it did get sexual, it didn't turn into Sexy Sleepover territory. For some reason Twilight's truth was rather touching, perhaps because it feels so real.

So when's part two?

She chose Rarity because a majority of her coat is similar to Shining Armour's.

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Fun fact, Shining Armor's coat color is closer to true white than Rarity's. Here's a side-by-side, with Rarity on the left:
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Using the MLP wiki, I wasn't able to find any pony whose coat was closer to white, but Bulk Biceps has the same color as Shiny. They have different outline colors, though; Bulk's is a bit more blue while Shiny's is an even grey. (Even Fleur, Fancy Pants, and Blueblood's coat colors are farther from white than Shiny's.)

Well... It was funny, but not as funny as if Twilight kissed Dash two times: she is the best and the worst friend at one time.

Some ups and downs, but I think that might be one of the best truth or dare stories I've read. Definitely worth finishing.

I want more :ajsleepy:

I kind of want this to get a sequel that ends up mostly somehow leading to the others being mostly treated the way Dash was in this.

While it was well written for what it was, it also felt like at least half of this fic ended up putting her down in some way, which made it not as enjoyable as I feel it should have been. But that's just me.

kits #31 · 2 weeks ago · · 1 ·

NGL, I was expecting her to kiss Rainbow twice

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Thanks! Though I'm pretty sure Rarity was the whitest Twilight could find immediately hehe...

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Nurse Redheart. According to the mlp vector club (the wiki can't be trusted to be consistent with even itself), her coat colour is #ffffff.

This was pretty cute! The ending made me a little uncomfortable, I couldn't tell if it was moving into ship territory or not, but otherwise this was a truly enjoyable read!:pinkiehappy:

Huh.

I guess everybody got their own little surprises in the end.

:trixieshiftright:

Cute, fun, emotional, and just spicy enough without being raunchy. You done a good.

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Ah, that would have been so great! Would have put an ointment on the :fluttershysad: of Rainbow getting harshed twice, too. (You're Twilight's least favorite AND all the horrible things Pinkie said to her...) It might just be the TwiDash shipper in me speaking though. :twilightsmile:

I'm guessing Spike is at a friend's house while this is going on?

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why the hostility

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Was meant to be more of a playful jab than anything. Apologies if that's not how it reads. Yesterday wasn't my best day.

I must be thinking of the wrong idea; as a "truth," I would've asked Fluttershy if she's ever fucked Discord.

That was surprisingly sweet and entertaining! Good job!

Hillbe #43 · 2 weeks ago · · 3 ·

:pinkiehappy: Rarity ? did Spike ever bone you?
:twilightoops: WUT?
:duck: A lady doesn't bone,
:pinkiesmile: Really?
:flutterrage: Rarity how could you!
:raritystarry: What?
:fluttercry: Spike & Discord . . . You know TALK
:raritycry: We are in a romantic relationship OKAY!
:moustache: We're number three in the sex department
:derpytongue2: I'm #2
:rainbowderp:
:ajbemused: Don't tell me after Fluttershy and Pinkie
:moustache:Pinkie's in a league of her own
:facehoof: Why didn't I see this earlier
:rainbowlaugh: Nose in book not in pone
:twilightangry2: I do get out.
:moustache: not enough :raritywink:

Pinkie turned to Rainbow. “This is going to hurt me as much as it hurts you.” She took a deep breath, and before Rainbow could reply, she launched into it. “Nopony really likes you. You’re abrasive, arrogant, and rude. Ponies tolerate you solely because you’re occasionally useful, and because they’re generally too nice to say anything about it. You ended up as part of our group because you were hotheaded enough to challenge Nightmare Moon with no plan, and we were too nice to let you go alone and get yourself killed. Since then, you’ve made Fluttershy cry with your pranks—despite professing to care for her and knowing how she was bullied as a filly. You nearly killed Applejack over a stupid race that nopony cares about, you forced us to endanger our lives and others just to teach you a lesson about your ego, and you became a Wonderbolt purely out of nepotism from multiple princesses. You nearly killed the pet you were trying to save from a natural process because you couldn’t deal with not having your own way, and you caused massive property damage on multiple occasions, but didn’t get into any trouble over it because you’re an Element. In short, you don’t deserve anything you have, and your impression of how awesome you are makes everypony you meet want to slap you.”

God damn Pinkie you nailed

Pinkie turned to Rainbow. “This is going to hurt me as much as it hurts you.” She took a deep breath, and before Rainbow could reply, she launched into it. “Nopony really likes you. You’re abrasive, arrogant, and rude. Ponies tolerate you solely because you’re occasionally useful, and because they’re generally too nice to say anything about it. You ended up as part of our group because you were hotheaded enough to challenge Nightmare Moon with no plan, and we were too nice to let you go alone and get yourself killed. Since then, you’ve made Fluttershy cry with your pranks—despite professing to care for her and knowing how she was bullied as a filly. You nearly killed Applejack over a stupid race that nopony cares about, you forced us to endanger our lives and others just to teach you a lesson about your ego, and you became a Wonderbolt purely out of nepotism from multiple princesses. You nearly killed the pet you were trying to save from a natural process because you couldn’t deal with not having your own way, and you caused massive property damage on multiple occasions, but didn’t get into any trouble over it because you’re an Element. In short, you don’t deserve anything you have, and your impression of how awesome you are makes everypony you meet want to slap you.”

Damn Pinkie

I REALLY loved this, and now I Really want to see part two, also, it would be more funny if twilight kissed rainbow twice, also, raintwilight is best

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