It's finally here: summer vacation. The girls celebrate by gathering all their friends (-ish) and piling into a bunch of cars to drive down to Miami Beach for what is hopefully an amazing weekend. Unfortunately, they have to get there. Which involves five cars, eighteen teenage girls, and thirteen hundred miles.
One car, in fact, the very last car, is a hodgepodge of stragglers: Adagio Dazzle, not wanting to spend eight hours a day in a car with her sisters; Sugarcoat, by virtue of being late to the party; Trixie Lulamoon, the tagalong; Maud Pie, who just wanted to spend time with her friend Trixie; and Sunset Shimmer, the unfortunately generous soul who decided to drive them all.
Here's hoping her generosity lasts longer than that cliff edge does.
I really like this idea of just putting your favourite characters in a story, and the premise is a neat way to handle it. I think you may have trouble with Maud and Sugarcoat together, as their mannerisms can be quite similar at times, and differentiating between them might be tougher.
I picked up a few examples where the wording could perhaps be amended to make it clearer, if you wanted to check?
The first her refers to Twilight, yet the second and third to Adagio. So I spent a minute looking at the second one trying to imagine how Twilight had become the cleavage-tastic one, and then finally got it when the hair bit came up. I'd replace the her before cleavage with Adagio's.
Having met the girl here, I think?
I don't think the it before Twilight needs to be there?
And then this...
...Was a great cut! Poor Sour, I really can't see her getting on with those two. No Sunny Flare or Lemon Zest then?
This is a fantastic bit of headcanon! Not only is it believable as an obstacle they'd face, but also explains why at the beginning of Rainbow Rocks Aria could be complaining like her being tired of fast food was anything new, if they'd been on Earth for a thousand years.
Good job!
Futa?
Indigo’s driving a car? Is it Brutus Maximus?
Applejack channelling Dean Winchester? Love it!
Sounds like a sequel to Seven Girls, Nine Hundred Forty Three Miles, and One Minivan :P
8783378
That's where I got the chapter idea from, but this story is going somewhere very different. I just wanted a kind of chill if weird environment to throw these characters in and have fun.
Oh, this is going to be tremendous fun. And I have to commend you on the idea of the Internet curtailing the Dazzlings' feeding. Wish I'd thought of that myself. Eagerly looking forward to more.
(Also, I'd worry about Sunset flooding the gold market, but by the time she does, she'll have plenty of cash in other assets.)
8783619
Masquerade logic. Even inventing and adopting the printing press can be a serious blow for supernatural predators who rely on secrecy.
That'd about do it.
I love it when even as a good girl, Sunset still has a slightly devious streak.
... MotherFUCKER.
... I'm so fucking jealous.
Good to see that nice girl or not, Sunset doesn't put up with Adagio any more than she has to.
Yeah.
Probably.
I'm glad. Because Trixie is best blue horse.
I'm inclined to agree, I'm willing to be open minded about music, but even the finest of classical music for 72 hours straight is gonna get real old real quick.
And that is why she is best Shadowbolt.
I didn't actually, that's, actually pretty interesting. Nice.
I choose to believe that this story and Sunset Shimmer vs. Schadenfreude precede each other.
I know how physically implausible it sounds, but not as implausible as Sunset living through either of them without going crazy, unless she has the prior experience to draw on.
That would leave Sunny Flare and Lemon Zest.
8783619
Industrial applications. Four pounds a month won't cause a dent in it, considering how dense gold is. But yeah, she's pretty much rich forever.
This is going to be wonderfully shenanigan'y. I'm so following it.
Hahahaha. You could easily do interlude with the other cars in this story. It would be hilarious. I guess we can expect them to come across one of the other group at a pit stop somewhere... There will be begging to swtich places.
Oh my god this whole thing is brilliant...
I love how this says so much in so little.
In any case, we have the base dynamic established. Now to see how it warps...
So Adagio's naturally sexy, Sonata's doesn't care how she does things in a sexy matter, and Aria's a sadist.
i think the dazzlings are mortal now so will age
also it was not just starswirl who banished them still great first chapter
so uh what sonata maria antoinet or something
This story is getting better and better. You can fell the insanity meter slowly and purposely cranking up towards 11.
And why do I feel most of the characters will have slept with each other by the end of this?
Never leave your pet or kid inside the car regardless of weather temperatures.
8810002
A talking dog that can scream for help and has the emotional maturity and intelligence of a human teenager should be exempt from those rules... for a couple more years at least until his body catches up. Besides, the girls were sitting outside which means Twilight can run to the car easily to check on him. Unfortunately the rules that restaurants have against pets is what has caused situations like pet death.
I love how neither Sunset nor Adagio denied that they were secretly planning to take over the world together. And the general sense of building madness. Eagerly looking forward to more.
IDK what an ac is, but I know I had to double-take after reading it as arc.
Sonata and Pinkie in the same car is bad. Aira and Limestone in the same car is worse. Both pairs in the same car? Someone gon' die on that trip.
I would not put it past them to have such a plan in the works if they needed it.
This just made me crack up.
That poor girl. What were her parents thinking?
Also, I'd insert a joke about Sunset trying to eat her own hair, but I'm worried that she might burst through the fourth wall and try to consume me.
8860670
She'd try to eat her own hair first and then you for dessert. You know, because your avatar is a picture of Muffins.
I read the new Schadenfreude chapter before this one, as you can tell by the horrible food pun.
Also, am I the only one who expected Sunset to end her order with "And what do you guys want?" ?
Better save some food for Spike.
8826695
I think their current priority is less about taking the world, and more about building a personal harem.
HAAAHAHAHAHA
Marry me, Sunset.
Oh god, this was hilarious.
cani hide with trixie please your sunset scares me..........
Sunset can be terrifying sometimes.
I must conclude from this that Celestia invites her students to alicorn gorge-feasts in order to make herself seem less like a deific figure to them. In Sunset's case, it worked. In Twilight's, sue just adopted the princess's table manners.
And on that note, I shudder to imagine pony Twilight and Sunset trying to share a meal. I'm pretty sure they'd attempt to devour one another. Sparklebeach would never sleep again if she witnessed it.
And after the carb fest and Fluttershy being invited to an orgy, we're on the road again.
What's next, The Penal Code?
I might actually like to see how Sunset eats now.
i really dont like mauds boy friend
Pinkie powers or a bug? YOU, THE READER DECIDE!
Also:
I'd say "headcanon accepted," but that would imply that it wasn't already my headcanon.
DAYUM!
XD
Money talks. And listens.
Technically.
I figured.
That works too.
... You are a wellspring of trivia.
Fair point.
Wait, what?
Correct.
Oh good, you have taste.
This I GOTTA hear.
Oh. Yeah, that'd about do it.
Of course you wouldn't.
True enough.
She has a point.
She is best Shadowbolt.
Yeah, those piercing whistles HURT.
Agreed.
That's fair.
She is. She's also pragmatic.
It works though.
I get the feeling.
Also fair.
Wow, she's the only one who got a good roll on her Spot check.
That's a lot of food.
None?
You scare me.
Hey now, leave the Princess out of this.
... Sunset can be real scary.
HaHA, double entendres!
Oh.
I REALLY like this Sunset.
This should be good.
That's fair.
That's fair.
... I don't blame you. Evil is Sexy.
Accurate.
...
Oh my.
That's actually very sweet.
I understand.
8883030
Agreed. Too much Sheldon, not enough monotone.
8883089
That implies it wasn't everyone's headcanon to begin with.
I would love to see sugarcoat get with Twi on this vacation and have her dress up as midnight sparkle lol
I for one much prefer the idea that Maud Pie is dating Mudbriar to piss off her sister rather than because she has terrible taste in men.
Can dogs play Truth or Dare?
So they are channeling Sam and Dean in this one. Just with a crappy truck and not a sexy Impala.
Yeah, that probably calmed everyone down.
"NOT THE DRIVER I DON'T WANT TO DIE" XD
You don't have any chill, do you? =P
Nice ending there!