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This story is a sequel to Sugar Pie Recipes


Sugarcoat has a problem. She's dating Pinkie Pie...that's not the problem.

The problem is Pinkie Pie's sisters. Sugarcoat wants them to like her, but things have been...awkward, so far. But seeing as she is going to be spending Hearth's Warming Day with them, Sugarcoat decides to take this opportunity to win them over...or, at least, try. How hard could it be? It's not like they're all completely different, difficult to read, and quirky in their own ways, right?

...horse-apples....

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I feel like you were pretty spot on with the Pie sisters. Nice work.

Entertaining. I especially like the ending and AJ's little joke at the end.

'Tis the season to be jolly...right...

...Sorry, the holidays are a bit of a downer to me...

Anyway , happy holidays!

7796771 Thank you very much! :twilightsmile: They're distinctive enough to, even with very little source material, get a pretty good read on, I think, but we've seen so little of Limestone and Marble that it can be a little tough to write for them, at times. Thanks for reading!

7796789 Haha, I can't seem to end a story without throwing in a lame joke at the end :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

7796803 Aww...I'm sorry the holidays aren't a great time for you :fluttercry: I hope you can enjoy them somewhat anyways...thanks for reading!

7796854 It's always a pleasure reading your stories... :pinkiesmile:

7797025 Aww...thank you so much :twilightsmile: Hope I continue to entertain you!

Sugarpie is now up there wish Sunlight. There's a lot of potential in it. (Man that sentence probably sounds weird without context :rainbowlaugh: ). Though maybe that's because Pinkie's my favorite and I love Sugarcoat a lot as well - especially when people stick to her character and have her be properly honest and blunt instead of just a jerk for the sake of putting everyone down or something (I've seen someone write her as some sort of robot early on, with overly stiff and formal speech... yeesh). I think you got all of these characters about as spot on as possible. :coolphoto:

7797272 I'm glad I could add to your list of ships! :pinkiehappy: I honestly started with Sugarpie just because I thought it'd be funny for Sugarcoat, who's not really overtly emotional, to have a crush on the energetic Pinkie Pie...and to have absolute zero conflict about those emotions :rainbowlaugh: And, weird as it sounds...I sorta feel like it works, you know? Pinkie Pie has shown on multiple occasions that she understands people who aren't as emotional as she is (she clearly adores Maud and Gummy, and loves her entire, much more traditional family).

I've got some rather...specific headcanon characterization of Sugarcoat that, yeah, puts her in the category of "blunt and honest, but not cruel". That may be giving her some benefit of the doubt as far as canon is concerned (if nothing else, she seemed to enjoy gloating about winning the carpentry section of the Academic Decathlon, and on close examinations some of her expressions seem to show a bit of a cocky streak that I'm overlooking here), but I like to think of her as someone who is, on the whole, good and decent, just completely incapable of being dishonest. Some people write her as being philosophically opposed to being dishonest, but I prefer if she doesn't even really understand the concept.

I'll be honest, I sort of do like to make Sugarcoat a liiiiittle bit more formal than the other characters. I sort of imagine her family's kind of traditional, and she got some training on old fashioned etiquette (I try to allude to this a few times, like by having her deliberately excuse herself from the table and push in her chair behind her, or talk very precisely about appreciating being included in the stone soup tradition). I'm...not sure why I have this characterization for her, to be honest :twilightsheepish: I think I read some other fanfics that had her as a part of the upper class, even by Crystal Prep standards, and maybe it stuck. I also sort of think she walks a little more formally than the rest (when she gets off the bus, her arms are folded behind her back and she's walking very stiffly)...it almost seems like she's been trained how to walk, and the rest of Crystal Prep doesn't seem to have that drilled into them, so it's probably not something they learn there...so maybe she learned it at home? idk, maybe I'm projecting :twilightsheepish:

Wow, that was a lot of crazy from me in one comment :twilightsheepish: Anyways, I'm glad you liked my story! Thanks for reading!

7797321 Yeah I would say Sugarcoat probably is slightly cocky and maybe has a bit of an ego. Though I imagine it only shows in specific situations when she points out people acting in stupid ways. (She seems kinda like someone who feels smart because mistakes are obvious in hindsight. But also is pretty smart as it is).
And a bit of formality definitely works for her, if nothing else, some sophistication in her manners. Though her speech was absolutely normal in the movie, regular teenager style, it was just the contents that were quirky. In my stories (well, she only appeared in one so far) I made it so her family is all lawyers, for some reason it seemed to fit, even if they're not known for bluntness or honesty :rainbowlaugh:

I felt like there were too many flashbacks. It did have a nice bonus of implicitly stating that Sugar and Pinks have been going steady for a while, and show that Sugarcoat has been trying to connect with the rest of the Pie family, but having so many disrupted the narrative pace.

7798919 I may be too fond of the Gilligan Cut for my own good :rainbowlaugh: I'm sorry to hear it was disruptive. I hope you were able to enjoy the story regardless! Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy:

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Aw nah they were funny/touching regardless. It was just that it made a sequence that probably should've felt like 3 or 4 minutes (Sugarcoat giving the sisters necklaces) and made it feel like it took 10, if you get what I mean.

Very sweet, appropriately enough. I especially like the personal details on the necklaces and how well Sugarcoat and Maud get along. More or less. As for Limestone, she makes for a great overprotective big sister.

7845263 :twilightsmile: The necklaces were one of my favorite parts to write. I know Sugarpie is a super rare ship...which makes sense, because, you know...they have 0 screen time together...but it's still so much fun to write :pinkiehappy:

Limestone here was tricky, too. I really wanted to preserve her original character, and in the one episode she appears in, she seems really aggressively defensive about her family and their traditions, so...the protective big sister role seemed sort of made for her. So, I'm glad you enjoyed that. :twilightsmile:

Thank you for reading!

Green liquid splashed into into Sugarcoat’s bowl,

The liquid seems overly enthusiastic about being in her bowl.

Aside from Sugarcoat seeming to teleport from the dining room to the kitchen.
Very well done.
And yes she really couldnt have done worse then Applejack, that was Twi levels of bad.
The that last bit with the pie pun, omg that had me cracking up.
This ship, there so made for each other and there familys.

7881944 Glad you liked it, thank you! :twilightsmile: When did Sugarcoat seem to teleport from the dining room to the kitchen? I'd like to fix it, but I'm not sure where it is...

Anyways,thanks for reading!

7884283 It was when Maud went into the kitchen to get boulder water. Sugarcoat got up and called out to her, but then after a short exchange she was suddenly in the kitchen. Pinkie then popped up to have her speak to Marble who was in the living room looking in.

I never thought about this as a ship before...and now I can't get it out of my head.

I'm not sure if I should curse you or bless you...

Have a fave and an upvote. :raritywink:

8123883 Haha, believe it or not, I didn't think much of this ship at first, either. It was literally just supposed to be a one-time joke, "Sugarcoat has a crush on someone completely, wildly different from her, and completely fails to see how it's strange." Then it just sort of grew on me, and now I just think it's adorable :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading, and for the fave! Glad you enjoyed it!

I feel conflicted about the Gilligan Cuts - like the commenter below, I did feel they were overused. But that said, they were really funny. The Maud one got a chuckle as it was kind of expected, but then going back to the idea with Limestone and ramping it up to suit her was hilarious. The reaction to the rock soup was brilliant, too. And I think you got the three necklaces spot-on, Limestone's in particular.

“Some dessert,” Applejack said with a wide smile. “Piece of pie. Thought you’d like it.” Sugarcoat looked back down at the white and brown, jiggling dessert, then back up to Applejack.

“It’s a sugar pie, isn’t it?” Applejack’s smile widened.

“Ee-yup.”

“Are you proud of yourself for that pun?”

“Very.”

“How long did you spend making this pie, just so you could make that joke?”

“Two hours.”

“I hate you.”

Took me a few reads to finally get it, but man oh man is it absolutely hilarious once you do.

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