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This story is a sequel to Meeting Mister and Missus Sparkle


The Grand Galloping Gala: the premier social event in Equestria. Well known as the most glamorous event of the year by ponies who have never gone, and known by those who HAVE gone as being awful, and in recent years, downright dangerous. Sunset Shimmer has returned for The Gala for the first time since she ran away to the human world, and she has brought a date: her girlfriend, SciTwi.

With the reputation The Gala has gotten in recent years, one pony is insistent on having at least ONE year where no guests are sent to the hospital, no new construction is needed on the castle, and no one is almost sent to another dimension.

This can...only end well, right? Right?

No...no it can't.

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Awwwwwww! Very sweet :heart: :pinkiehappy: and funny! :rainbowlaugh:

very good story i loved it this unvierse still needs more stories

a story with celestia telling scitwi embarrassing stories from sunsets child hood would be great

write it or else ill tie you up and trap you in a room with a drunk pinkie pie no wait BOTH pinkie pies drunk

7831020 Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!

7831029 Hehe, I'm glad you're enjoying this series! To be fair, there is a brief scene in the previous story with Celestia sharing some stories that Sunset's...less than proud of :rainbowlaugh: But you're right, it's not a complete story. Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

Since Sunset is living in the other world would it be possible if she has a pet?

The meta is strong in this one. I'm not sure where to even start with all the stuff that made me laugh in this story, but suffice it to say that you pulled out all the jokes and executed them perfectly. Especially the contracts and the name skits.

I'm also not sure if I'm glad or disappointed you didn't go with the other running gag of the Grand Galloping Gala; namely, Princess Celestia giving the exact same talk to Twilight at the end (I'm not sure if she was paraphrasing in the Smooze episode, but when I watched it I could've sworn that they copied her lines at the end word by word from "The Best Night Ever").

“Uppidy?” Applejack ventured.

P.S.: I think it's spelled "Uppity", unless it's her accent.

7831092 Yeah, I don't see why not...we never really see anything about her home in canon, so why not, right? Why do you ask?

7831103 Hehe, I really like meta humor, so I kind of went all out with it this time around...I was kind of afraid I was going overboard, but I just couldn't resist...I honestly hadn't noticed Celestia giving Twilight the same talk every time...I think the themes are pretty similar, buuuut...I'm just not sure how I'd work it in this time around :rainbowlaugh: Aaaaaand it looks like you're right about the spelling...thanks for pointing it out, I fixed it! Thank you so much for reading and faving! :pinkiehappy: I hope you continue to like what's coming!

"Can you imagine if you had to WRITE all this down? Like, you’d have to CONSTANTLY be specifying which version of us was talking at any given time."

I'm writing a story involving an infinite number of Twilight Sparkles right now.

I KNOW THIS PAIN.

I also greatly appreciated the meta-humor for the same reason. Another very fun entry in this ongoing story/ universe/ thing. :twilightsmile:

7831310 Hehe, as much as I love Equestria Girls, that's the danger in writing fanfic about it, unless you keep the universe completely quarantined from Equestria...sigh...at least in a visual medium, you can put in some simple visual cues to tell them apart (I'm lookin' at you, SciTwi with your glasses and distinctly different hairstyle!)

Anyways, I'm glad you enjoyed the story and the meta humor :twilightsmile: Thank you for reading, and for following!

7831166 Sunset's house would be kind of lonely and she needs a pet to feel like a part of her heart more whole. You get what I'm saying?

7831068 im getting the pinkies liqured up so you better write something in a few days

On one hand, poor Luna. On the other hoof, the sunlight was cute as hell. As always :twilightsmile:

7831524 Why thank you! :twilightsmile: And if it makes you feel any better, Sunset and Twilight really enjoyed her meteor shower for the night. That's gotta be worth something.

Sorry Luna, but you cannot beat Celestia. Also, Blueblood gets everything he deserves, you shouldn't stop it.

I like how Pinkie was the first to break her contract by breaking the fourth wall right as they arrived.

Okay TECHNICALLY it wasn't the ballroom's 4th wall, but Technicalities were pretty well covered in the contracts.

“‘In the past year, we have had to rebuild or repair three of the walls in the castle ballroom,’” Pinkie Pie read from her scroll, which was considerably longer than the rest of her friends. “‘Please keep from breaking the fourth one.’”

... and on that day, a loud smack could be heard across all dimensions, which came from a single teen facepalming...

Luna lifted her muzzle proudly. “I think you’ll find, dear sister, that I have no need to do any such thing. I have this evening planned out to perfection. I have contingency plans within contingency plans. Every possible point of failure has been accounted for and addressed. I assure you, dear sister, that absolutely nothing will stop this from being the best-”
A bugle played a few, quick notes in the background. “Announcing-” a formal voice spoke from the entryway.

“-night-”

“-the Crystal Prep Academy Shadowbolts!”

*inhale*
... *exhale*

... FFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-

“You’ve got to be kidding me,” Twilight said, sighing and massaging the ridge of her muzzle over her glasses. “You guys would go this far to stalk me? Crash an event like this in another dimension?”

“Relax, Twilight,” Indigo Zap said, flapping her wings and lifting herself into the air. “We’re not here to stalk you.”

... Oh, that's nice...

Overall, an excellent story.

THE GRAND GALLOPING GALA SHALL FOREVERMORE BE RUINED

The Rule of Murphy has spoken...

“Did someone say ‘lawyer’?!” A male voice came from the panicked crowd, and a brown earth pony zipped up to the mare. “Hi! I’m Technically Legal, and I’m here with my brothers-and law partners-'Barely', 'Arguably', and 'Kinda'.”

Their mother, Minor Technicality, is very proud of her boys.

“Did someone say ‘lawyer’?!” A male voice came from the panicked crowd, and a brown earth pony zipped up to the mare. “Hi! I’m Technically Legal, and I’m here with my brothers-and law partners-'Barely', 'Arguably', and 'Kinda'.” As Technically Legal said each name, another brown pony ran up next to him, each sporting a wide, overly friendly grin.

He flipped down a business card, which read, “Law Firm of Legal, Legal, Legal, and Legal: No, we do not think we protest too much. Thank you for asking.”

I am SO stealing this. I don't even know what sort of fic I can use it in, I just know I have to use it. :D

This had a lot of funny moments. I don't often break out into a grin when I read something, even when I'm appreciating the comedy, but here I definitely did it a few times (at the "then who you gonna call?" bit and when the Shadowbolts arrived, and probably a few more times I forgot). I feel bad for Luna, though.

Though more than anything it does make me wish we had a more detailed account of how all of these ponies met, because IIRC the only previous story with them in Equestria was that date one, and it sorta glossed over everything too. Seems like a bit of a wasted opportunity when the Shadowbolts have all been in Equestria several times and yet we didn't see them meet the mane 6 and Starlight and others. And I don't think we've seen Sunset and Sci-Twi meeting the pony versions of their friends for the first time... Unless I'm forgetting a bunch of flashbacks or something.

Ah, I love the running gag of the Shadowbolts showing up. Though it really says something that Starlight can't be trusted to use any magic unsupervised- even Discord has more common sense (he knows the things he does are crazy).

Poor Luna, Trollestia got her. :trollestia: Well, they say plans don't survive contact with the enemy. At least Luna didn't get (Princess) Twilight's help in trying to prepare for everything possible, that would have probably led to everything be covered in bubble wrap.

This was hilarious. But poor Sci-Twi can't catch a break from her former schoolmates.

This can...only end well, right? Right?
No...no it can't.

Well now I know it isn't going to go well. So much for suspense. Meh, whatever...I'll at least check this story out.

Applejack considered this, tapping a hoof against her chin. “I guess if I was writin’ a story like that...I’d find some excuse to keep ‘em separate for most of the scenes. Which reminds me, it’s a shame our Twilight had to head up early to help Princess Celestia get The Gala ready. I’m sure she’d have liked to talk to you more.”

This right here is a beautiful use of a meta joke.

Applejack considered this, tapping a hoof against her chin. “I guess if I was writin’ a story like that...I’d find some excuse to keep ‘em separate for most of the scenes. Which reminds me, it’s a shame our Twilight had to head up early to help Princess Celestia get The Gala ready. I’m sure she’d have liked to talk to you more.”

“No, really, it’s okay,” Twilight said. “Princess Twilight and I caught up a few days ago. It was fun.”
“And conveniently offscreen,” Pinkie Pie said.

:rainbowlaugh::trollestia:

“You get a ten-percent pay bump for interdimensional travel, and any time you spent trapped in an alternate dimension counts as overtime, so it’s not that bad.” He reached into his satchel and pulled out another letter. “Maybe you can help me out with this one, though? I’m looking for, ‘The Smooze’. And the address is just a line of question marks.”

:rainbowlaugh: Awesome work, but you should have made it so that it was Derpy delivering the mail. :derpytongue2:

Once again I am remebered why I hate trolls, Trollestia and probably Celestia. What she did was pretty inconsiderate of her to ruin Luna's plan and just call it a "lesson".

Still it was a good one-shot and the ending was very sweet. Also, while I love the Shadowbolts running gag, their life must be pretty boring If they love so much to spy on Sci-Twi's love life and dates.

WOW, that's a lot more comments than I was expecting! Thank you all so much for your kind comments!

7831795 Hehe, maybe he does, but family is family...and Luna would rather the castle not be destroyed while somepony is trying to teach him some manners :rainbowlaugh: thanks for reading!

7831835 Haha, I was wondering if anyone would notice that. Though, to be fair, for most of the time she's just leaning on it...though her comment when Twilight and SciTwi are talking to each other probably crosses right into breaking it :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading, and thanks for the fave!

7831887 Hehehe...I really couldn't resist with the meta joke there, or having The Shadowbolts show up. I'm glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading!

7831942 I'm sure she is! :twilightsmile: Though she sort of wishes her daughter would mature a little bit, and stop worrying about little things like, "scruples" or, "whether or not this is ambulance chasing." :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

7832044 Go for it, made. I'm glad you liked the joke :pinkiehappy: I actually considered leaving it out, I was afraid it went on for too long...but I couldn't bring myself to do it! Thanks for reading, and thanks for the fave!

7832180 Achievement Unlocked: Made SuperBowl grin :pinkiehappy: For whatever it's worth, Luna's meteor shower was still enjoyed...even if it was, in many cases, from underneath rubble. Most of those moments you mention, you're right, they haven't come up yet...the only exception maaaaay be that it's mentioned that Starlight Glimmer gave The Shadowbolts directions to get out of Twilight's castle, but yeah, that's about it. There are a couple of reasons why a lot of those meetings haven't come up yet. The biggest one is pretty boring: I haven't thought of any good jokes to make about them yet :rainbowlaugh: And I like to write these stories at basically the pace I can think of jokes for them, figuring I can fill in the details. The second reason is the same reason why I didn't really show Sunset's reconciliation with Celestia: I feel like it's a concept that's been done a lot, and I'm not sure I have much that's new to add. Having The Shadowbolts meet them might be new, but there are a lot of stories out there with Sunset and SciTwi meeting the Equestrian counterparts of their friends, and I don't want to just copy that, if that makes sense. But, if I do come up with some ideas for it that I like, I'll definitely write them :pinkiehappy: Thanks again for reading!

7832201 Hehe, I imagine that Luna TRIED to come up with a complete, inclusive list of all the things Starlight wouldn't be allowed to do, then just went, "You know what? It's probably best if she doesn't use magic at all that night." And yeah, it's probably for the best she didn't enlist Twilight's help with this :rainbowlaugh: Things were getting obsessively checked enough as it was. Thanks for reading!

7832359 hehe, not at all! Though, in this universe, they're still her current classmates. I'm writing based off of the alternate ending to Friendship Games where Twilight goes back to Crystal Prep. I'm glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy: Thanks for the fave!

7832408 I sort of see The Grand Galloping Gala as being like a Roadrunner cartoon. No one really expects the coyote to win, but we keep watching to see him fail in an entertaining manner :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

7832425 Meta jokes are best jokes :rainbowlaugh: Well, some of my favorite, anyways. I'm glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading!

7832459 Hehe, those were some of my favorite lines to write right there...and Derpy would have made a good delivery pony for this section, but I also sort of wanted to make that callback to Parcel Post delivering Discord his ticket :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy: I'm so glad you liked it!

7832623 Awww, I'm sorry to hear that. My intention was for it to come off more as playful and comedic than inconsiderate, but I could see how it could come across that way. I'm glad you liked it anyways! Thanks for reading, and thanks for the fave! :pinkiehappy:

7832657 Oh... The extra scenes. Forgot about them.

7832657 And thank you for thanking me. now thank me for thanking you for thanking me and we can start a bizarre thank-ception here!

:rainbowlaugh: Oh my goodness, this one was enjoyable!!
Especially the Shadowbolts showing up AGAIN!
Cheers to another great story before the New Year!
Cheers!

There are very few times I actually laugh out loud at a fanfic, and this is one of those times.

My favourite part is probably…

“So,” Twilight said, turning to Starlight Glimmer, “I take it Luna made you sign some comically long and detailed contract too?”

Starlight smiled proudly. “Actually, my contract is very short.” She levitated up a small piece of paper, containing only a single line, written in intricate, blue cursive:

“No magic.”

That's one of the reasons I just love Starlight Glimmer!

Who would it be more entertaining for Blueblood to come across: Sugarcoat or Sour Sweet?

I personally would have liked to have seen more of the damage caused by the Shadowbolts, but it's still a pretty entertaining story overall.

7832711 I'm glad you liked it :pinkiehappy: And that The Shadowbolts gag apparently hasn't overstayed its welcome. Thanks for reading, and for the fave, and a happy new year to you!

7832943 :twilightsmile: I take it as a personal point of pride if I'm able to make a reader genuinely laugh, so I'm glad I managed it with you! :pinkiehappy: I was building up to that joke from the very beginning, in my mind, sort of with the imagery that Luna's been getting more and more specific with each contract, until finally she gets to Starlight Glimmer and just gives up on trying to solve every problem that can possible come up, and just gets to the root of it. Thanks for the fave! :twilightsmile:

7832961 I'd think Sour Sweet, and I'd toyed around with Blueblood being the one she's yelling at near the end there, rather than just some random stallion. I ultimately ditched the idea because I think it would have cluttered the scene, which already had a lot going on, but I imagine it'd be entertaining to see him get chewed out by a girl who's just having NONE of his horse apples :rainbowlaugh: I'll fully admit that The Shadowbolt's rampage got kind of cut short, partly because I wanted to move on to the Sunlight moments, and partially because a lot of the damage they could do would be mostly physical humor that's tough to get across in the written word. Anyways, I'm glad you liked it! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading!

“I believe it’s called a ‘running gag’,” Sugarcoat said.

Pinkie's been letting Sugarcoat in on trade secrets while sneaking off with her :pinkiehappy:

7833121 Oh yeah :rainbowlaugh: I've been writing Sugarcoat like Pinkie's ability to lean on/break the fourth wall has been rubbing off on her. Thanks for reading, and for the fave! :pinkiehappy:

It's funny how people hate and flanderize Blueblood and completely obvious to a fact that Rarity back then behave like a stupid and shallow golddigger.

7832657 I actually don't remember reading any stories where the Shadowbolts go to Equestria, maybe I'm forgetting something, but most Shadowbolt stuff I can name is Jay-the-brony's series of short stories, then the "Shadowbolt Adventures" series and that one series of second person stuff with Sour-Sweet. If you know of good stories where the Shadowbolts go to Equestria that you don't want to copy, maybe you can direct me to them? :trollestia: (you're right about Sunset making up with Celestia though, it's pretty predictable how that would go and it's been done by everyone in almost the same way).

This was a good one!

I enjoyed the meta jokes quite a lot, and I really didn't expect the Equestrian Inquisition the Shadowbolts to show up. Score this one for Trollestia! :trollestia:

7837476 I think I may have worded that poorly, I more meant that I'd read a lot of stories about the CHS crew from Equestria Girls making their way to Equestria/meeting their alternate counterparts. I don't actually think I've read a lot about The Shadowbolts actually visiting Equestria, and it's a concept I'd like to explore more...just ideas for it haven't been flowing yet :twilightsheepish: Sorry I don't have any fiction like that!

7837854 NoPONY expects The Shadowbolts! Their main weapon is fear snarkiness. Fear and surprise Snarkiness and stalking. I'm glad that you enjoyed it! Meta jokes are my favorite...and I was sort of afraid I was going overboard with them here, so I'm glad you enjoyed them! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading and for the fave!

7838028 Come to think of it, I haven't read many (any?) stories that heavily featured the mane6 meeting the humane6. At most what I encounter is the Twilights and sometimes, weirdly, Celestias. I feel like I remember, like, one story with the whole gang from sometime waaaaaaaay back, but that doesn't count.

7838194 The one I recall most clearly is "The In–Between Place" by "Voidbinder" (though it's on hiatus): https://www.fimfiction.net/story/326177/the-inbetween-place

For some reason I'm having trouble finding them right now, but there was one featured a little while back that had Sunset Shimmer visiting Equestria again, and smuggling her friends from CHS back with her. And there was one really funny one I read where Sunset Shimmer gets turned into an Alicorn, and her friends went with her to her coronation and...well, apparently insanity happened :rainbowlaugh: And the whole story just takes place in a fast food restaurant with her any Twilight reflecting on what happened. For some reason I'm having some trouble digging them up...

So, maybe those stories aren't written as often as I thought :rainbowlaugh: For some reason I was under the impression that they were way more popular than they seem to be.

Dammit Celestia, can't you let your sister have just one nice thing?

It's no wonder the whole Nightmare Moon thing happened.

7838221 If you remember the titles of those stories, I'd love a link :derpytongue2: Or you can just go ahead and write about that stuff yourself! :coolphoto:

“Can you imagine if you had to WRITE all this down? Like, you’d have to CONSTANTLY be specifying which version of us was talking at any given time. Whenever anypony did something, you’d need to make a note of exactly which one did it, or the audience would get confused. You couldn’t even really rely on visual clues, because they don’t really come across in writing.”

The struggle is real Pinkie.

“‘In the past year, we have had to rebuild or repair three of the walls in the castle ballroom,’” Pinkie Pie read from her scroll, which was considerably longer than the rest of her friends'. “‘Please keep from breaking the fourth one.’”

“‘You already have your cutie marks,’” Applejack read. “‘Therefore, there is no need to attempt to become any of the following: Cutie Mark Crusaders Demolition Experts, Cutie Mark Crusaders Artillery Experts, Cutie Mark Crusaders Ghost Busters…’ Wait, no Cutie Mark Crusaders Ghost Busters?” Applejack asked. “Then who you gonna call?”

YES! Love the comedy! That was really funny.

Very good story, very funny. Well done:twilightsmile:

7838686 So...very...real...

Glad I was able to make you laugh! Or...smile, at least, hopefully! :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading, and for faving!

7838735 Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy: I'm glad you found it funny! Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

7838769

Oh it most defiantly made me laugh. I love the fic! Keep up the great work!

“You think THAT’S bad?” Pinkie Pie asked. “Can you imagine if you had to WRITE all this down? Like, you’d have to CONSTANTLY be specifying which version of us was talking at any given time. Whenever anypony did something, you’d need to make a note of exactly which one did it, or the audience would get confused. You couldn’t even really rely on visual clues, because they don’t really come across in writing.” Pinkie Pie looked up to the ceiling, considering something. “I mean, I guess it wouldn’t be too bad with the two Twilights. You could call the one from the human world, ‘Twilight’, and the one from here, ‘Princess Twilight’, to keep it straight...but that may sound weird coming from her friends from Equestria, so I guess WE’D have to call the human Twilight, ‘SciTwi’ and our Twilight, ‘Twilight’. And I guess you could be constantly be making references to THIS Twilight’s glasses, or OUR Twilight’s wings, just to give the audience hints as to who’s talking. But it’d still be a pain.”

As fun as it would be, this is a perfect explanation about why it would almost never work.

7839825 Yeah, there are just some logical limitations when you write fanfiction like this...especially with a cast of characters this long. Doubling it, and making them nearly impossible to tell apart, is a really difficult juggling act, sadly. Not that no one could ever pull it off, but it'd be really difficult, I think.

Thanks for reading, and thanks for the fave! :twilightsmile:

7840188 So you wouldn't write it if someone dared you to write a story involving thirteen different Pinkie Pies from varying universes with the story name being 'The Baker's Dozen Bakers?' :pinkiecrazy:

7838333

I know what the one with the fast food restaurant is! It's called "The Coronation". Short, but worth a read. Most of the chaos is left to the reader's imagination.

7840283 Haha, that's oddly specific. But that's exactly the sort of problem that comes up with using duplicates. Normally it's fine in cartoons, when you can give one a hat or something an the audience will at least recognize that character as being the same one so long as it has that same, identifying feature, but it's harder to get across in print...not to mention, having to say their names so often: "So Pinkie said to the other Pinkie, 'Pinkie, I feel like you, Pinkie, Pinkie, and I should...'" Thanks for reading!

7840853 That's the one! Thank you! :twilightsmile:

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