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Losing a child is the most terrifying thing that can happen to a parent.

Sunset Shimmer had been gone for years. Celestia had never really given up hope that she would see her again, but the doubt had always been in the back of her mind: what if she never returns? The echoes of their last fight followed her all those years.

And now that Sunset Shimmer has returned, Celestia wants to see her again. She has an offer to make, to a filly she raised as a daughter.

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Moderately touching.

Momlestia is best Celestia. And I am a sucker for Sunny and Tia bonding

:ajsmug: Scenes like these show the potential that Sunset Shimmer had which the movies completely wasted. This really should've happened in canon already, but I feel like we're past that point now. Oh well!

Beautiful :twilightsmile:

A valid interpretation of the tableau, and stirs some feelings.

But Sunset's logic in the conclusion seems kind of murky, like she's elevating the type of amends she made at CHS to some sort of abstractly more worthy level than the amends she'd have to make to fit in in Canterlot. This seems to bloodless and rational a reason compared to the powerful emotions you depict in the feelings between the two.

You said Sunset Shimmer couldn't even answer letters she was so emotionally overwrought about her relationship with Celestia. So it's clear for Shimmer to overcome her fear, shame and guilt around Celestia would be a daunting task. She wouldn't be running away from anything or "getting off easy" by not having as _many_ bridges to mend in Canterlot. The bridge with Celestia would be a hard one to fix indeed....

Still, by all means, please write more!

Sweet, though at times overwrought. Still, when you aren't tugging too hard on the reader's heartstrings, this works well.

Awwwww.....very touching and great work! :pinkiehappy: :heart:

This is one type of Fimfic, done a thousand times over, that I will never get tired of seeing the interpretations that people come up with :pinkiesad2:

A cute, touching little story. Great job on pulling the heartstrings!

Ceslestia's suggestion of moving the portal mirror to Canterlot does work where ever Sunset stays, instead of living in Equestria and visiting the human world from time to time she can live in the human world and visit Equestria from time to time. That's the advantage of having a portal between worlds that can be opened on demand, Sunset can actually live in both worlds. In fact in cannon it could work, it really should, I'l like to see Sunset in some episodes of the show, she lives both far away and right next door.

Effective not efficient. If the mail was efficient then it would move packages at minimum cost.

7873619 Woohoo! Moderately! I'll take it! :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

7873908 Hehe, I do love the motherly Celestia too :twilightsmile: Glad you liked it! Thanks for reading, and for faving!

7874555 Oh, I completely agree. I'm really afraid that with SciTwi in the main cast now, we're never going to get the opportunity, either...I mean, I LOVE SciTwi, don't get me wrong! I just...hope that we still get more development out of Sunset Shimmer, even with her there. That's all! Anyways, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy:

7874574 Thank you so much! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading!

7874931 That's absolutely a fair criticism. I think what happened here is I sort of stumbled on that section. To be honest, there was a LOT that I wanted Sunset to say there. In my mind, she has a lot of reasons for refusing Celestia's offer here. A big one is, in my headcanon, she's just more comfortable as a human than she was as a pony. But a lot of what I had to say to that effect, I've said somewhere else before, and I didn't want to just retread old ground. But, the intention here wasn't that Sunset Shimmer was just staying in the human world to make amends. I didn't intend to imply that she's in some kind of self-imposed exile or something, though I can see how that may have come across. The thing I was more trying to get to was that she had found a place where she didn't want to run away anymore. A place where she actually wanted to stay and fix her mistakes, rather than escape them. There was also a little bit of asserting her independence in there as well, realizing that she was happier without all the obligations that Canterlot society put on her, and the thrill of being the first pony to really explore a whole new universe...but I guess none of this came across exactly the way I'd hoped :twilightsheepish: I'm glad you enjoyed it anyways! Thanks for reading!

7875134 Hehe, glad that I could make you cry! Wait...that's not what I meant! Gah! Stupid backspace key is broken, can't delete! :rainbowlaugh: Thanks so much! Thanks for reading, and for the fave!

7875150 Thank you so much :twilightsmile: I'll admit, drama's not my usual style, so it may have gotten a little heavier at points than I intended...still, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!

7875440 I'm so glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading, and for the fave!

7875796 Yeah, the core idea here isn't really original...okay, not at ALL original :twilightsheepish: And I really wasn't going to do it...but I couldn't get the story out of my head! And I like to think this implementation is at least a little different than what's been done before, so hopefully I've at least added a little to the "Sunset Returns to Meet Celestia" story. Maybe...or maybe not :twilightsheepish: Thanks for reading!

7875894 I'm glad I could get an emotional reaction! :twilightsmile: I'm so happy you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!

7876007 I like to imagine that Sunset actually is visiting Equestria fairly often...just not onscreen :rainbowlaugh: I mean, in a deleted scene from "Friendship Games" she talks about visiting Twilight in Equestria rather casually ("You can pay me back when I come to see you.") Not explicitly canon, but still! I like to imagine that they keep the mirror in Twilight's castle so that 1) Twilight can visit easily and 2) Sunset can visit her easily. And I hope we get to see some Sunset in Equestria in canon one day too...maybe in an upcoming EG movie? Hopefully? Thanks for reading, and for the fave!

THESE ARE MANLY TEARS

That was the first story that made me cry in a long time. That's just so sweet. Please, take some favorites and a follow.

I get the feeling the only dislike is someone missing the like button.

7876681 I'm glad you liked it! :twilightsmile: Thank you so much for the fave, and for following! I hope you like what's coming up!

7877089 Hehe, that'd be nice, but I can understand that this story might not be for everyone. I'm glad that you liked it, though! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading!

Rather well-done, and very big of Sunset to refuse to just turn her back on her mistakes and who she has become.

This is a very good one-shot.

Seems like something that would happen. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.

7876237 I do think Equestrian Girls has drifted bit too far from it's parent series and needs an infusion of Equestrian characters and cross dimension interactions. Also haveing Twilight call apon Sunset to help her in Equestrian seems like a great plot device to use. Having things from the human world leek into Equestrian the same way Equestrian magic leeks into the human world perhaps?

7876237 A charming little read, I enjoyed it. :trollestia:

Nicely done. However, Celestia failed to remind her, "True, mistakes cannot be undone. I know, I've made plenty of mistakes, myself. However, I also learned that rebuilding relationships doesn't require mistakes to be undone. It only requires the courage to reach out reforge those relationships. You would not be running away from there to continue our lessons here. But you can still always come home."
And as Xanderfox mention, it wouldn't matter which world she resides in, SS could easily have both!

“This room in unoccupied.

That N has misplaced aspirations of being an S.

Otherwise a rather enjoyable little fic.

7877322 Thank you so much! :twilightsmile: I'm glad you liked it! Yeah, I think it's a sign of her development that she really tried to make amends back in CHS in the EG universe, even when it was difficult. Considering that a lot of her start of darkness was from her taking shortcuts...idk, I think it's a sign of growth! Thanks for reading!

7877368 I'm glad you think so! :raritystarry: Thanks for reading!

7877904 Thank you so much! This is how I've sort of been visualizing the meeting of Celestia and Sunset Shimmer for a while now. Call me a sucker for a happy ending :twilightsheepish: Thanks for reading!

7878354 I'm glad you found it charming! :twilightsmile: Thank you so much!

7878368 That is true, there are plenty of good responses that Celestia could have had there. The thing is, I didn't want to make it seem like she was pressuring Sunset Shimmer into coming back. That's why she accepts and respects her decision, before even asking why she made it. I totally subscribe to the theory that Sunset Shimmer visits Equestria frequently...I mean, she talks about it so casually in that one deleted scene, it just seems to make sense! Anyways, thanks for reading!

7878580 D'oh! :derpytongue2: My bad, thanks for catching that! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!

And for anyone who happens to be reading this...thank you so much for reading. This story has been performing much better than I ever thought it would, and I'm really grateful that people seem to be enjoying it. Thank you!

No you can't. Neat story though.

This was a beautiful story to read, I actually cried at the end. Thank you so much for posting this.
BTW, it helps to listen to some good music while reading the second half. I chose this.

Home is the place you make for yourselves. In the end, all children move away; it doesn't change their love for their parents but it does change the place and people they consider their true home.

No I'm not crying! YOU ARE CRYING!!

I'm not a fan of artificial feels by means of dead parents, but this is relatively inoffensive as they go, and honestly the orphan angle would explain a lotof Sunset's sense of entitlement. So I'm in favor of this.

7879095 Awww, I'm sorry to hear you feel that way :fluttercry: I'm still glad you enjoyed it, though! Thanks for reading!

7879228 I'm glad that my writing was able to touch you! :pinkiehappy: Thank you so much for reading, and for the music suggestion!

7879877 Wonderfully put! Thank you so much for reading! :twilightsmile:

7880131 Aww...well, I'm glad you liked it, no matter how much you're NOT crying! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading!

7880448 I'm glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile: This is a failing of mine to get my point across effectively, but my intent wasn't to paint it so it seemed that Sunset Shimmer actually had insecurities about being an orphan. The reason I have her be an orphan in my fics is that it seems to (to me) to be the best explanation for a few things we see in the movies. She ran away at what appears to be a very young age, but stays in the human world of her own free will, and the only real reference she makes to a life she left behind is Princess Celestia. It's possible she has a family back in Equestria that she's just not visiting, but...idk, it felt a little too sad for her to have actually run away from an unrelated family because of a fight she had with Celestia. Put on top of that some interactions that I think seem to indicate that she and Celestia have a mother/daughter relationship and...it fits, at least for me. I imagine, though, that she has absolutely no angst over it, and really considers Celestia to be her real parent. Anyways, thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

Um, one issue. In the Author's notes you say Celestia asked how Sunset was at the end of the Friendship Games. I think you meant to say the first Equestria Girls :rainbowwild:

Other than that, I dig it :moustache:

7881303 D'oh :twilightsheepish: Seems like I have Friendship Games on the brain...but it's just so good! :pinkiehappy:

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for faving! :raritystarry:

I reviewed this story as part of Read It Now Reviews #101.

My review can be found here.

This was good.

7884702 Thank you so much! :twilightsmile: I'm glad you liked it!

This reminds me of a song I heard (just last night, I think) as I was coming home from work. It's a song by Bon Jovi and featuring Jennifer Nettles. Who says you can't go home?:twilightsmile:

So Silfoe recently finished up a nice Celestia Sunset picture. Feels apropros for this story. You should ask her if you can use it for the cover art.

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7886125 Haha, I'll admit, that song went through my mind a few times when writing this story :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

7887387 Wow, that really is a nice piece...I may reach out to her and ask, I'm just a little nervous about reaching out to a talented artist like that and asking if I can use their work for a random story :twilightsheepish: I have...social anxiety issues, heh...thanks for reading!

finally got aorudn to reading this godo story loved it wont even threaten you this time

7964095 Well, thank you so much :twilightsmile: I'm glad you enjoyed it! Don't worry, I don't need threats :rainbowlaugh: Working on a new story now, so I hope you enjoy what's coming! Thanks for reading! :raritystarry:

8006816 I'm glad you liked it! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading, and for the fave!

I can just imagine Princess Celestial grounding Sunset Shimmer now lol

8163570 "Young lady, you know better than to turn into a demon and try to conquer the world on a school night! You are grounded!" :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

i loved this. i cant think of anything else to say really.

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I'm so glad you did! :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading, and for the fave!

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Your welcome man. i love this story when im not working on my own stuff.

So this is a bittersweet one, huh? It hurts. OTL

Aw...No Solar Flare from Sunset saying no? I mean, if it had been my daughter...

Not that I plan on having a daughter, mind you, but still...

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