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Orrm


"You don't forgive someone because they need it, you forgive someone because you need it," -Asura Kraken

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  • 44 weeks
    Not sure how i feel about this.

    I don't know why but I keep thinking that someone would drop a bomb and kill everything




























    Hey that's a good story idea!

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  • 47 weeks
    Preview of a One-shot In-Progress

    He stood there. At her side as the sun set for the final time in this millennium. He observed her weakened form. He gazed upon the mortal coil of she who was the sun, no, she who was the dying sun and he asked her.

    "Was it all worth it?

    She wanted to ask him to clarify but she knew. Mortal matters. Dealing with them, nurturing them as she did, simple interaction even.

    "Yes, yes it was,"

    And then she was no more.

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Mar
15th
2019

Not sure how i feel about this. · 11:32pm Mar 15th, 2019

I don't know why but I keep thinking that someone would drop a bomb and kill everything




























Hey that's a good story idea!

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Thank you for that! I do admit to worrying over my vocabulary during stories. Next time I'll aim to be a little more verbose. Thanks so much for the reply! :twilightsmile:

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To put it simply, your story was Greta however it lacked a thorough punch that I usually attribute to the 1 point before 10.



Overall you did a good job of portraying character emotions through actions and additionally the interactions between said characters were mostly smooth. Grammar and diction chekc sout, use of vocabulary is average, storyline, mostly solid, end, complete.

All I'd really ecommend you seek a wider range of vocabulary, the same of which, also applies to me.

Thank you for placing The Return of Sunset in your 8/10 folder! Please let me know what I could have done to get a higher score in your books! :raritystarry:

Thank you for putting The Voice of Reason in your 8/10 library! May I ask what you liked about my story?

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Your welcome, it was a pleasure.

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