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202 weeksNot sure how i feel about this.0 comments · 224 views
I don't know why but I keep thinking that someone would drop a bomb and kill everything
Hey that's a good story idea!
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205 weeksPreview of a One-shot In-Progress0 comments · 213 views
He stood there. At her side as the sun set for the final time in this millennium. He observed her weakened form. He gazed upon the mortal coil of she who was the sun, no, she who was the dying sun and he asked her.
"Was it all worth it?
She wanted to ask him to clarify but she knew. Mortal matters. Dealing with them, nurturing them as she did, simple interaction even.
"Yes, yes it was,"
And then she was no more.
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Thank you for faving a featurebox-winning tale like All the Time In the World. Keep sticking around, you won't wanna miss a moment of Vis.
Lemme know in the fic's comments just what drove you to it.
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Thank you for that! I do admit to worrying over my vocabulary during stories. Next time I'll aim to be a little more verbose. Thanks so much for the reply!
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To put it simply, your story was Great however it lacked a thorough punch that I usually attribute to the 1 point before 10.
Overall you did a good job of portraying character emotions through actions and additionally the interactions between said characters were mostly smooth. Grammar and diction checks out, use of vocabulary is average, storyline, mostly solid, end, complete.
All I'd really recommend you seek a wider range of vocabulary, the same of which, also applies to me.
Thank you for placing The Return of Sunset in your 8/10 folder! Please let me know what I could have done to get a higher score in your books!