Nondis is a man who managed to find himself Equestria. While Twilight and the other princesses try to find him a way home, he realizes that finding a way back is only a minor problem in comparison to his growing attachments to some of the Mane Six.
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I am well, for now.
I've been reading this story for awhile I really like it but Twilight Sparkle needs to get her act straight. She's just not really trying to make it work. I really want those two to end up together but with Rarity, sunset and her equestria girl friends sabotaging it. It's making me wonder whhhhy should he even help the royals there's nothing in it for him if it works out. If anyone says it's the right thing to do I'd say then why hasn't Celestia just called the royal guards and had the nobles tried for treason against the crown and banished. This celestia is too soft she should have taken care of business a thousand years ago they needed her she didn't need them...... This has disrupted his life to help out a species which has only caused him pain. He should just let Cadence see his memory about the above instance just to prove his view of things .. don't wanna go into details incase someone hasn't read it yet. As far as I'm concerned the restrictions he stated did cause harm. Like I said I'd love for them to be together .... because if they win in the end and then for example flash fing sentry gets the girl I'd be soooo pissed after he ... read story...because he was afraid of the noble same for the equestrian girl version of flash were twilight's friends ....see story... because they had no idea of the sowing seed rule which she has not made them aware of and he hasn't slept with Rarity ..... yet. Sorry I'm ranting Twilight really pissed me off this chapter. Hey this is like my third comment ever I think this should only appear for this chapter but if it does appear in others feel free to delete it i don't wanna ruin back story for anyone.
I honestly can't get enough of this story
I seriously don't know if I can keep hanging with this story. Twilight's jerking Nondis around, Count's out to have him killed. For awhile now, these chapters have been nothing but constant negative stuff happening with no sign of a light at the end of the long tunnel. I really hope something positive happens soon.
Oh hey! You used my video!
Also, in regards to the Author's note: Misunderstandings huh? OK, I'm out of patience, could you PM me who he's gonna be with in the end, I'm really hoping it's Twilight. I swear I won't post any spoilers that you give me, and I'll still keep reading either way. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye.
Woo update, i love this story and the quality of your work, though something slipped by your editing it seems
methinks she called him a murderer not a murder
That's why you don't go into South Central without a tank!
Well, fuck me running.
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Women dont get men and men dont understand women. Nondis is being an indecisive prick and Twilight wants him to want her. So shes making him fight for it. In a world where she is the ultimate political prize she wants to make sure Nondis isnt just settling for her, but truly in love with her. Nondis on the other hand wants proof that his afeections are returned. A man will fight through hell for the woman he loves, but he needs proof of that love. And Twilight cant openly give it to him. Both share blame here, Nondis for flip floping. Twilight for closeing her heart for fear of being hurt. As painful as this is to watch it's going to have to get a lot Messier before it gets any better.
7792138 I know but it's just frustrating it's just if it wasn't for the human emotion of spite he would have no reason to even fight the parliament I mean she needs to 1 allow for multiple partners she can't be dumb enough to not realize a certain individual wants in and either tell them to back off or allow it or 2 lay down the law and tell him she's not comfortable with him seeing mares in a romantic setting it's her or its done. He's not guilty free either he shouldn't be antagonizing her by going on break then crying foul about it when Twilight gets upset she obviously has abandonment issues or something and is super clingy he knows this and he still rubs salt on the wounds by doing dumb shit. But man that cliffhanger gods I'm dying here. Technically if the areas off limits and your caught trespassing you can be arrested all photographs seized until reviewed and it's concluded that no classified info was documented even then you still might not get them back. Examples are war game areas like wed want people posting our boys formation lay outs so enemies can counter them and new equipment test sites such as when the stealth bombers and f22s were being developed you need to get military authorization to post photos and such. The paparazzi probably will get the photos back after the review in a couple weeks when hes out of jail after a judicial hearing ....maybe muhahahaha
Another great chapter, but one problem. You used 'sentient' when you meant to use 'sapient'. They're two often confused words.
You seriously need to start putting some positivity into this story. You're making it so bleak and hopeless that you're going to wrote yourself into an inescapable corner. That or you're going to keep a downward spiral of Nondis' life that's going to leave readers to leave the story.
Now I'm not saying give up your story line, or your current arc. But my god the poor fuck is just getting the shaft at every turn, like Cadences reaction, that was utter bullshit and pissed me off.
I really hope the light shows in the next handful of chapters or I may be dropping it. Just way to much bad shit happening.
Paparazzi pony reminds me of the one in Grand Theft Auto 5
7791664 ya but hopefully we will see some daylight. I want nondis to keep his word on that damn count
So, did a bit of reading after... a year or so.
... Really? The dial for soap opera drama was already at a solid 7 or 8. I think you broke the knob cranking it up since then. So glad I gave up on this story back then, I see that waiting for any semblance of romance or the drama being dialed back would have been a complete waste of time and hope.
Oh, you hate our current president? Good on ya! All the snowflakes that buy into his bs can go rot in their 'safe space' and drink themselves to death.
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I never said anything pertaining to the president-elect, the only reason I'm cool with the fact that he won is because I get to see Lacy Green and Anita Sarkeesian squirm. Those individuals are fighting on the wrong front, trying to lobby for special privileges, requesting equal rights for a country that already leans midways. Hell, I really didn't like Clinton after the fact that she and the DNC tilted the primaries.
However, his cabinet choices seem to be mostly those of the financially surplussed. Now that I actually disagree with. I would be fine if he had someone like John Kasich, Ben Carson, etc. for some of his positions, but I'm just gonna wait and see how this goes. Goes well, okay then. If not, then I'll express grievances.
Some conservative values, I agree with. Some progressive values, I can understand.
You, however, are projecting a tad bit, buddy.
Chill.
7795484 you misunderstood. Trump is president-elect, but obama is still acting president. It was obama and crooked Killary I was talking about and their snowflake supporters. I vited for trump, largely because I didn't want hillary as president.
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No, I'm afraid that you misunderstood, sir. I don't hate our current president either, but I am willing to acknowledge his shortcomings on some international dealings, like the nuclear deal with Iran. You give the main country screaming "Death to America and it's citizens" full nuclear clearance to do whatever the hell they want. And the worst thing is that they already had nukes. Now they are making them and waving it in our faces.
But I also acknowledge that his domestic political failures were in actuality foils from a stagnant group of lobbyists and politicians who didn't agree with his proposals, who then responded by filibustering and killing bills in the committee, much less in the house or senate. I'm just against the dysfunction and political division that occurs nowadays as opposed to the more collaborative efforts seen in the government back when George H.W. or Bill took office. Politics have become akin to a pissing contest nowadays, with more arguing over extremes as opposed to finding a middle ground where both of the major parties can agree on. Government shutdowns were a lot less frequent in those days.
But it seems like that will forever be a thing of the past... until the next world war, I suppose.
7793673 Nah man, do what I did and give up before its too late. XD.
7795771 that's the problem, I'm so commited to seeing this damned soap opera play out its hard to not keep going. I seriously want to see Nondis be with someone, anyone, and it not be some fucked up drama. The story idea is good, it's solid. I like the rules that were put in for the politics but at every turn that seems to go good the author seems to say "oh shit I'm making it to good on him, better fuck it up in every way possible."
He's having everyone blame Nondis and treat him like he did wrong by not knowing these rules and the guy just can't catch a break. There's complicated and then there's "let's see how much shit we can pile on the perverbial Atlas protagonist and see what it takes to crush him completely."
7745466 yeah, you would be too if you kept getting fucked without lube too.
7795854 That's what makes it contrived and boring. Just wait until the story is completed. I myself am not a fan of needless drama and wangst. It always comes off as an author's crappy way of trying to make something 'deep' or 'realistic'. Needless cynicism drives things down because it makes it where eventually the viewers become apathetic to what amounts as a crapsack world with unlikable characters. The whole evil and cliche council/parliment that somehow interferes with the rulers (Nevermind what canon shows in the story the leaders can hardly do crap and are weak for some reason) thrown in also bogs things down. There's nothing wrong with character's having to struggle, but if there is no struggle or pay off and the stuff keeps getting worse and worse then it makes the journey a pointless chore.
The fact that the characters are shitting on and being mad at Nondis, an alien being from another dimension and species for not being aware of their customs and rules is especially mind numblingly stupid and out of character for several of these characters because common sense dictates you can not expect people to be able to find out how things work in your culture when they need to be taught said customs to even have a hope of understanding and if that person shows that part of their disposition is made of characteristics that don't show an adaptive streak then common sense dictates to set them down and educate them on the truly most important bits.
The fact that characters who are supposed to be highly intelligent and used to politics like Twilight or Celestia are not portrayed as having an inkling of brain power to even consider doing something like this early on to avoid issues like this just reeks of drama writing and diabolous ex machina for the sake of the plot.
Its just much easier for writers to write a lazy or idiot protagonist since it requires less work on the antagonist's/villain's part then the extra effort that it takes to actually plan and work thing's out when character's on both sides of the spectrum are moderately intelligent.
Well fuck!!!
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Frankly, I think the public needs to get in on the Act. Protest the Houses of those who want Nondis dead show the "nobles" they're tired of being stepped on. "We don't serve Murderers here." / Second. The Parliament saw what happened to the sword at short range and picture of the before and after of the atomic bomb. Maybe they should see what happened to the ponyquin or, better yet, have a live demonstration, up from and ponysonal, of some Weapons of Medium Destruction and what a Hollow Point rifle cartridge can do to an individual at over a mile to show they screwed over the wrong species. // Hell, I agree with the individuals who have posted before me. ENOUGH OF THIS BS. If the "Murderers in Control" of the Parliament don't get some serious S**T happen to them, I'm dropping this story.
Maann, just keep hoping for Nodis and pinkie to be in a relationship. Its so very much rare to show pinkie pie to be in a relationship. If you can rate or top ten list of charters to be in relationship Pinkie be at the bottom.
Im just going to wait until the story is complete. Like a few people said, it is starting to get repetitive and boring with the non-stop negative stuff happening. I honestly wont be surprised if it stays negative until the very end.
I love the story, but i just keep finding myself getting more and more pissed at the idiocy of some of these characters. Im waiting until it is complete.
7820360 You save yourself a lot of heartache.
While I'm still hoping that they pull through in the end, I have to admit that the relationship between Nondis and Twilight -due in no small part to a combination of the completely bullshit circumstances, and Cadance's 'romantic advice'- can be summed up from Nondis' point of view by the following:
I just hope someone slaps Twilight in the face with this before it's too late:
Edit: Shit, double posted.
Nooooo!!!! The next button vanished!!!! Black magic!!! Heroic!!!!! Bring it back!!!
Dangit! Every time I read one of these chapters, I want to go gun shopping!
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Okay, all in favor of slashing the cords connecting that balloon to the basket say 'Renegade Points FTW'.
Я быстро оборвал ее и остался тверд в своих указаниях. - Нормализовать, записать, сжечь, вернуться на базу. Таков приказ. Вы понимаете, капрал?"
Она же СТАРШИЙ СЕРЖАНТ! Я помню это!
Unlikely to get an answer, but where did you commission the art for Count DuMonée in this chapter? I love it!
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Oh that’s what he looks like!!? I pictured him with a red coat and a white mane.