Nondis is a man who managed to find himself Equestria. While Twilight and the other princesses try to find him a way home, he realizes that finding a way back is only a minor problem in comparison to his growing attachments to some of the Mane Six.
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Once more, this time with feeling.
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Jeez, man. It's Christmas. Tone down the MC torture. I know it gets worse before it gets better, but jeez. Great chapter nonetheless. Looking forward to more.
The narrative tension in this story is so way above the roof that we lost it in high orbit.
That being said: Romance, Dark and Comedy as the tags, right? Yeah they don't fit the content much. Comedy hasn't been really seen in a long time and the romance plot is lost in the absolute horror show that has been the bread and butter of the story for a long time. On top of that, the main character has suffered at the benefit of the antagonists so much that there is no retribution big enough to release all the accumulated tension. Seriously, I can't think of any end to this story where a reader can say they will be satisfied. It's been all highs upon highs of tension, not even the supposed lows were that because something, somehow happened to rail the reader back to the main course so we don't forget that there is no rest for anyone and none can rest unless they are one of the depraved antagonists.
As things stand you should think of adding tragedy or something similar in the tags, because I can't think of any future or end in which Nondis or anyone for that matter will get a decent conclusion. Not even a happy one, just decent. At this point there is no light at the end of the tunnel for anyone. Maybe just a big cave with no exit in sight is the best they can hope for. Honestly, you deserve big congratulations because you managed to create a group of antagonists and main villain so detestable that there is nothing that can be done to balance the suffering they brought to the world.
You pull chapters that are as long as some short novellas on a consistent basis and that's amazing, but I feel like this story isn't going to have a satisfactory ending regardless of the protagonists triumphing or not. Something similar happened to a then popular story here that will not mention and I also commented with my friends the possible unsatisfactory ending due to a narrative tension, and sadly I'm getting the same vibes with this one.
Kudos to your gargantuan work and for sticking to your guns regarding how the story is evolving, but I'll not invest myself in this story anymore. I'm dropping off at this station, but I honestly wish the best for you and this story and that you go with it where you want it to go.
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*sigh* Sorry. I just utterly despise the entire concept of a HiE named 'Anon'. It just strikes me utter laziness to not even bother giving the character a full and proper name. Maybe it's just my OCD acting up?
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Definitely agree with you there. Everyone involved is coming out scarred in this, it seems. From a minute degree, to the most soul-crushing anguish.
hot dam the ending was satisfying.
i find myself going num to the dark stuff
awesome chapter, marry christmess to all three of em awesome work
The Darkness is strong with this one. You have truly spoiled this lord of despair with all these back-to-back updates, yet I hunger for more, the story is so good.
Jesus fuck.
I want more
I speak for all of us here when I say this
DEATH TO UMBRA!
Poor fucking Nondis. Man won't ever be the same once he's rescued. I was really rooting for the boy to get outta there in time. What he's experiencing just ain't fucking right. I wish a very slow & agonizing death for this fucking demon come 2022! What a fucking chapter!
Did I mention that I love Cliff? I don't think I did. I FUCKING LOVE CLIFF!!!
Old fuck deserved all that action!!! I enjoyed that scene like a mothafucka!
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Dude, I cannot agree more. I didn’t envision things getting this bad for poor Non. I’ll take him getting stabbed and bedridden again over this kind of torment. Hell, even traditional physical torture would be a step up! But being violated and...used...so heinously. My god. It’s kinda making me sick to my stomach to read about it.
Umbra can’t die soon enough. And he needs to suffer. Firstly I want to see him horrified that he has no other bodies to switch to, no way out. And I want his wretched visage plastered across every corner of Equestria so ponies can see the worst monster their populace has produced. I don’t know which would make me more giddy with glee: seeing Umbra tortured physically, or mentally to the point he’s a broken, sputtering excuse of a sapient being.
And definitely agree with ya about Cliff too. Dude’s often the funniest one in the room, I love his reactions to the insane shit he’s caught up in! I’d love to see his and Sunset’s potential relationship hinted at a bit more.
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Agreed on everything,
I too wonder how Cliff & Sunset's little thing is going. They're definitely the strangest pairing. Funny how that whole scenario started from Sunset grinding her ass on him at a party....IN PONY FORM NO LESS.....which had my brain trying to visually see that image without being weirded out & damn did it definitely fail at it's job. Pinkie did the same to Nondis in the earliest chapters of this story & I was just like "........................what?" 😅
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Hopefully things end up better for them than it did for Nondis and Pinkie. Also I remember one of the fairly recent chapters mentioning Sunset and Cliff keeping in touch after that party and what they’ve been up to together, but I don’t remember which one. I’d go back to check but it’s such a small part in a comparatively massive chapter. Hell it could be 100,000 words behind by now lol!
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Spoilers should be in spoiler text, please.
Sweet fuck. I didn’t imagine things would get this bad, this personal, this...violating. Poor Nondis. Poor Gala. Poor Kali. Poor everyone, goddamn. This is just unrelenting hell for everyone involved that isn’t some demonically evil entity unworthy of being called a decent being.
It was entirely satisfying to see Damper’s punishment, especially with how personal he made things. Bitch talking all that good shit a second ago, and as soon as some teeth touch his cock he’s a fucking open book. Should’ve chewed it up and forced it down his throat for good measure. Umbra better get worse, much worse. His suffering must be deep. Personal. Everlasting. See his work crumble before him and every ambition he envisioned become impossible as he is shown to the world for the worthless monster he is.
SillyAnon, you deserve a salute. I have never seen antagonists in any medium that make me quite as sickeningly angry as the ones you write, nor any stories quite as dramatic as this that send my anxiety skyrocketing out of fear for the characters. But man, it’s hard to hang with all this suffering and anguish. I’m really missing the comparatively more lighthearted first dozen chapters, before shit hit the fan and then promptly exploded.
If things get any worse than this latest chapter, I’m likely gonna have to step away. It’s really not good for me to keep reading when I’m not one for all the grim and harrowing circumstances this story now entails, or any story with likeminded material for that matter.
I can only imagine what it must like to have such power wielding the pen. This chapter actually made me feel physical pain for a solid minute in the groin. I almost cried out.
Damn your impossible literary craftsmanship! I can't believe I'm reading this for free.
Nope nope noooo just ouch the nope.
I cannot begin to comprehend as to what happened to the Main Character these past few chapters but I can guarantee one thing it has gone WAY to far. What the antagonist has done to the MC cannot ever be made up and forgotten and not only adding the recent actions in these past 3 chapters but the total mental damages the MC had throughout the story is just too much and I personally think its way overboard. For instance how can the MC ever recover from THAT particular experience? he can't and the antagonist is gonna forever have that against him, which is severely degrading to the MC we knew for the past few years. I'm still gonna finish this story's Journey I but I heavily...no EXTREMELY disagree and hate this part of the story as of now. I never severely hated anything in this story until NOW which I hope in some way in the future it gets a revision or rework because the MC can only take so much trauma and mental scars that it becomes too much and is just overkill. same with other characters in the story as well too much of some form of trauma or any sort of similar action just becomes overused and implied way too much.
Again I will see this story to the end and await the next chapter to see this situation hopefully immediately resolved. Crossing my fingers to see if the next chapter is around the corner. And even in the future see this situation entirely removed from the story itself.