Trying something completely different.

Reading so far it seems to be a very nice story, though in my opinion it seems to be rushed with the huge time skips. Other than that keep up the good work.

4506112 Well, you're doing very well.

Im working on a similar story. Check mine out for guidelines on how to execute some topics, if you feel unsure. Or maybe we could colaborate, if it pleases you.

Tp saves, are best saves. Gotta look out for one another.

You sir, are evil.
Evil!
I mean, that cliffhanger man!

Hmmm, this story's concept may be a typical, bland "human in Equestria", but I liked its execution so far
I will be eagerly waiting for more

Three minute party? Pssh, try five, kinfolk.

This is so ridiculously vanilla, I don't see how it could have gotten featured at all. The human is the usual unoriginal teen/young twentier, first contact is the unoriginal "waking up to ponies" scenario, and his conundrums... I'm not even gonna talk about how commonplace they are, and that's from the description alone.

I'll be waiting for something less formulaic and with a bit more invested creativity from you, author. You've already given us at least two of those.

4509839 Well, any criticism is good criticism. I'm just glad you commented. I'm actually surprised that this was even featured. In fact, I've got stories with well over 2000 views that haven't made it into the feature box once. So this is a bit of a surprise.

This is practically the first story I'm doing that introduces this kind of genre, so I should expect it to be vanilla to some. I'm not a writer, nor is it my strength, I just do this because it's fun to do. I'm learning as I go along (as you can tell from my earlier works). So once again, any criticism is welcome.

4509698 It's Pinkie, she could make it a 30 second party if she wanted to, which she has full capability of doing.

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Again, this is my first time doing a story like this from the ground up. So constructive criticism is appreciated.

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Thanks, I appreciate it.

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Cliff??? WHERE!?!

lol Nice so far, if a bit random. I like how his hands have such an effect on the ponies. XD I can think of a ways to make it interesting with that.

For one, if Rainbow is talking to Pinkie and says it can't feel as good as she's saying.... only for her to insist her to try, and once she does.... it feels so good that she, at the time, doesn't mind the fact that her wings are showing her appreciation... though the moment he's stopped, she'd blush red faced and flee, only to end up starting to spend more and more time with him due to it. XD

For another, well, he'll need bits to pay for necessities and stuff while there. He could easily do so by joining the Ponyville Spa... At first, it'd seem like things are going great... but as he leaves, he ends up finding himself being followed by lots of mares that have suddenly become interested in him after having finished experiencing his massages. He could then thank them for the affections after being cornered, but state that he can't bring himself to even consider it for those that aren't human..... and afterwards, some of the mares remember rumors that Twilight knows a species change spell(reference to the Breezies ep).... and need I state the chaos that results from that?^^

Though, these are just ideas. Your fic.^^

Moochers...

Ya know, I never really thought of it like that but yeah, no wonder Pinkie's so popular in Ponyville. They're all a bunch of bums and moochers. It explains how she keeps everyone so happy all the time.

4510218 You understood that it wasn't a flaming comment!

Nondis

This name is just as silly as your username. Just an opinion.

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Believe it or not, it's an actual name. There are a few people in the US named Nondis actually. So it's not all that bizarre.

This guy is a pussy and I really dislike him.

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Give him time...

This story looks like it's gonna be a wild ride so let the reading begin! this is gonna be fun

I was so enraptured by the fact that I was the furthest thing from home that I had forgotten the basic things needed for survival, with the exception of sleep and using the bathroom.

He forgot about the basic need of eating as well. Hard to go to the bathroom if you never eat.

Anyway, that whole bathroom scene in the eatery.

Hell, I'll spend all day at that so:

Very awesome! Looks very promising! Can't wait till update! Yay!

God, if you exist, if this is the exact retribution you had for me since I denounced my beliefs in a higher power, if this is the punishment for the blasphemous sin of my unbelief in you, then I have a few questions to ask. Does this please you? Does this hell I suffer give you a laugh? Are you content with the pain that I now endure? Are you not entertained by my suffering? Or is this just the beginning? I can only assume you're just laughing it up right about now.

Oh God, why? I can taste the smell.

While I find myself on the verge of vomiting, I hear yet another stallion walk into the restroom. As he entered, I heard him speak. "Yesh! What died in here!?"

I'm close to it, if that counts.

As his hooves clop to the nearest available stall, I can still hear the lava spewing out like a running faucet next door. Meanwhile, the fat guy is sitting here, making fun of him. "Hey boy, this is how a real stallion smells like!"

"I didn't think I'd need to wear my armor for this." He mumbled out. I suppressed a chuckle out of fear of me tasting and smelling the putrid air of this guy's exorcism. At this rate, we'd need a priest to cast out whatever demons this guy had because it smelled like the devil's unwashed testicles. I could only assume that our recently acquired party member was only going number one.

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What...even?

Another thing I managed to discover about the young princess. She had one hell of an appetite.

Though the only difference was that I had an internet connection that furthered my distraction. I remember a certain video where there were two guys saying what they were going to do. One guy stated that he was going to do an 'internet', which was followed by a flash of rainbow light and 8-bit music. The other guy stated that he was going to do a book, which did absolutely nothing. Same case here.

Asdfmovie BEST...YOUTUBESHOW...EVER

I loved this chapter it had me cracking up I cant wait to see what happens between them all next and what happens to them next.but then end was funny /nasty in a way that some how made it funnier.

I love the plenty of terms used to describe the "content of disgusting nature" ! XD You anglophones are way much creative than frenchies to describe how "horrible" or "great" things are ! And that's why I love reading fictions in English ! X)

That fic starts like a basic HiE, but it seems that the author knows and avoid usual clichés (yay, french word !).
Anyway, for now, It's fun all the chapters long, and I feel... Humm... Maybe not yet empathic with Nondis, but yeah, I feel sorry for him ! X)

By the way, I know that maybe was already said but... Is Nondis a reference to "non dit" who actually means "not said" in french ? =o
Like, you now, the name is "not said" because of immersion. I totally approve anyway.

I'll read the next chapters with good pleasure.

I laughed so hard this chapter......mostly at the part when he said "MY UNDYING SAVIOR!"
Lol well done writer

Silver Octave 8/13/1997 - 2/15/2015

Death By Laughter

I was tired of living off of straw and hay like I was some sort of animal.

We can't eat that. Well, actually, that's wrong. We can eat it, we just can't digest it properly.
So why isn't he eating, well, I don't know, Vegetables and fruits? Or fish? Fish are meat, and if he asked Fluttershy for them, I doubt it would bug her.
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Oh, he is.
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This chapter had me roar in laughter. Kudos.

"I wanted some meat inside of me and I didn't care how I was going to get it."
.... WOW! Okay.. umm you want to take a moment to reword that there buddy?

Seriously, humans can't survive on hay. Oats are fine cooked (I like groats) though.

Incidently, I've been in that toilet situation before, on both sides... hot peppers ain't so fun going out.

Brb just pissed myself laughing....I'm back.

I've read this before and I still died laughing at the bathroom part

I died laughing. shining just saved private Ryan.

6963107 I know you're pain bro

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This was the guy that was in the stall next to Nondis.

Warning: This chapter will include content of disgusting nature. Read it anyway.

Well if you say so.

I found the content. Where is disgusting nature, though?

im allergic to funny shit

Sweet lord. I was expecting something terrible. Instead I found potty humor. And I laughed uncontrollably. I could only keep thinking of Austin Powers and Fat Bastard. XD

THAT POTTY HUMOR WAS PRICELESS !!! I have often wondered what their restrooms would look like. Apparently, they are similar to ours. There aren't too many stories that address this issue.

I'm just gonna leave this here...
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With a book, you can read all the pages and be done with it by the end of the day. With a computer, you'd find yourself on so many sites where one page leads to another, to another, to another, to another. It was an endless cycle, at least until the power went out or the internet connection went bad. Either way, I was religiously browsing on it for whatever, be it comedy, abridged series of my favorite shows, memes, YouTube comments or porn. So... much... porn. I mean, you can read porn, but who wants to do that when you can just watch it?

I feel attacked...

Damn this girl for keeping herself busy. I give up. "Tonight?"

Shame he haven't figured out he can postpone the party for at least a few weeks if he proposed to give her more belly rubs. Or at least he would have a chance with this. XD

"I know one thing that's already dead: the thing you just ate." I mumbled as I tried my best to hold my breath. If there was a reason why the 'gas-chamber' method of execution was discontinued back in The States, this guy's picture would be sitting right next to Adolf Hitler. While he continued to grunt and I continue to hear the ploshing of toilet water, I tried to speak into my shirt so that I didn't taste what this dude was unleashing. "Excuse me, sir?" Oh God, I could taste it even in my shirt. "Do you happen to have some toilet paper in there?"

Me: On the plus side, at least there was no musical number...

Discord: Stranded... sitting on the Toilet Bowl... what would you do when you're stranded, and you have no roll...

Me: FY FAEN!

Why am I in such a rush anyways? I can't seem to remember.

This is concerning. 'I can't seem to remember' is usually an author's tell for 'something's fucking with this guy's memories' rather than 'this guy has a poor memory' or 'no good excuse'.

"I'm afraid that you are unable to eat any sort of pork, beef, lamb, buffalo, ostrich or rabbit." Yup, my choices are narrow as hell. "But your diet can consist of any sort of poultry or fish."

I thought the rule of thumb is that things with hooves are sapient. Ostriches and rabbits would fall under beasts rather than beings, and as such be fair game.