Nondis is a man who managed to find himself Equestria. While Twilight and the other princesses try to find him a way home, he realizes that finding a way back is only a minor problem in comparison to his growing attachments to some of the Mane Six.
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4760144 I really was not expecting an update today
Cheese is here
Me: Oh for fucks sake dude!!! *Throws up arms*
The line pissed me off. Nondis asked Pinkie straight up how she felt and she said she wanted to be just (best) friends. What the hell is he so dense about?
4761040 Allow me to clarify. It took her yelling at him to get her first point across. He insisted that she did and she shot it down. So it was really more in response to his persistence. So if it did annoy you, then I've done my job.
Yeah, it seemed a bit harsh. And going on in the chapter, you'll find out why she keeps him at a distance.
As a geologist I just can't take it! It's Hematite not Hermantite, if you changed the name on purpose sorry, but I had to say something or turn in my geology hammer.
4761477 Whoops. Dammit wikipedia!
Well things just don't get easier for our lovely protagonist.
So we don't really know what the deal is with Cheese Sandwich. Is he also romantically inclined to Pinkie? Who would she pick?
And what's the deal with Twilight? It's been made clear to her that this whole affair is taking its toll on Nondis, and yet she followed him into the train, didn't say a word, avoided eye contact, and then passed him a note saying she's sorry? Talk about mixed messages here.
NO FUCK YOU CHEESE
4761529 Go back to chapter three for the background of this situation.
Nondis just can't catch a break.
Another excellent chapter.:D
4760834 agreed
So.much.cockblock
Still love this story, keep up the good work
Is it me or are all the stallions in this story cock blockers?
And I thought I was the only one who knew the counter to that saying
In the immortal words of the antagonist from Heavy Metal 2000:
What does it take to get laid around here?!
Freakin' Cheese Sandwich poppin' outta nowhere like this, making things even more complicated than needed. Man you totally pegged it with the title
oh boy... Pinkie kissed him in the open. however he didn't really seem to return it, he doesn't know his feeling with pinkie so i'm guessing it related more to his confusion.
cheese sandwich.. well pinkie is whimpering because he either broke up in the letter or said he needed more time. him showing up... well I think pinkie has to sit down and think things through.
Twilight needs to sit down and decide if she loves him and wants to be with him. the more things gone on like this between non, Twi, and pinkie. the more likely he is just going to leave, no matter if it's back home or to move away.
he really should have moved in with zecora.
4761529 she followed him into the train station not train. i smell soap opera! my worry is more about that fact that he crumpled to the floor in pain and began bleeding.
This chapter reminds me of an old buddy I had, back in my highschool days. He'd invite me to hang at his crib, for like a day or so. By the time we arrive at the destination, I'd have to help them with housework. Learned that everytime I was invited, was when there were alot of crap to clean, fix, build & etc. Since they were the ones with the vehicle, I couldn't go home until I helped with all the work. It was a "you only get a ride back home if you help us," situation. That buddy has been happily dropped from my list.
Well, this story has earned its title many times over.
4762143 yes, yes they are
*Reads half the chapter*
Fuck, I gotta go to school!
*Comes home, reads rest."
...Oh, my God
Ahhh...the drama.
Oh man.
STUPID CLIFF HANGERS!!!!!!! STUPID!............CLIFF!........FUK!...............
I love this story too much! Stop it! Just stop it! You're killing me!
I'll let you in on a little secret. One of my pet peeves is the "Anonymous" type story. Granted, this story somewhat skirts this, with the "Nondis" name, and the fact that it's written in first person, but normally, you'd have a strike against you right off the bat.
Despite this, this is an honestly entertaining story. It takes a tired genre (HiE) and an even more tired subgenre (AiE) and does it so well that it becomes new just from what a sterling example it is. Your narrative voice is witty, amusing, and surprisingly down to earth. There are some honestly, funny parts. I read the whole thing in two sittings, and only then because I had to go to work the next day.
There were a few minor spelling errors, or cases of misused words, but they were so sporadic and rare that I can't recall any exact specifics. As far as characterization goes, everyone is a reasonable facsimile of themselves. Shining Armor comes across as a trifle dickish, but this is largely a plot contrivance. Less a heartfelt interpretation of the character, and more a characterization done out of convenience for plot purposes. I'm willing to forgive that sort of thing.
You are walking a very shaky tightrope, and doing so with panache, my friend.
The next question is, how well do you juggle? You've got my attention. Even my interest. Can you make me feel it?
4769789 Let's just say that the story was more of a fanfic of the series that poorly executed the fetishes that it tried to convey. It's like writing a fanfic following OC's as the main characters and writing about a fetish that you have limited knowledge of.
And from that example alone, I always research a specific fetish (sensations, smells, reactions, movements, etc.) beforehand.
So yes, it is a Twilight fanfic. No, it doesn't have the cast of the actual series.
4761129 Didn't the time to keep distand expired already? It is over a month now.
4770252 I am unsure on what you're asking.
4770257 the punishment twilight put herself in after "breaking the law" that she has to keep distand from him for a month.
It is over a month now, right?
4770269 It has been a month. But the question is why did Twilight acted the way she did when they met? And I could tell you the answer, but that would be a bit of a spoiler.
4770588 Oh you evil troll you LOL
We will wait and see in the next chapter then.
:)
There seems to be a lot of conflicts in feelings coming up lately...
If he decided to stay, bring on the drama between Pinkie and Twillight i say! If he still want to go home, give every mare that's interested in him the "Let's be frinds" card, it makes things so much easier.
sounds like someone knows my friend josh
"curiosity brought it back" is something he says all the time
A new chapter for this story is like my birthday. And funny thing is that my birthday is soon too!
...screw it. No one deserrves Nondis; he consistently puts his ass on the line and gets jack shit for it.
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4956111 I hate it too but ya gotta stick it out the worst that could happen is that he leaves with the feeling of a broken heart!
Starting to think you should change the name of this story to The Great Equestrian Cock Block
5490848 I didn't know they made rooster shaped childrens blocks.
God dammit pinkie.
God dammit cheese
God dammit everybody.
You weren't kidding when you named this story. Did you watch a lot of soap operas as a child?
What's the term for a girl getting cock-blocked? Cunt-clogged? I don't remember. Whatever it is, it just happened to poor Pinkimena.
FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCKKKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
6770172
Clam-jam, Twat-swat, bush whack, beaver dam, box-out/block, and clitorference are the ones I can think of.
Holy shit the poor guy CANNOT catch a break! This is like some kind of dark humor here. Rather than be upset or angry with Cheese's sudden appearance I just laughed and facepalmed.
I curse your chapter and its roller coaster of emotions¡¡¡¡..........chapter ............. too good to process, my friend got me'll finish reading this till the end no matter how you finish.
DIAMONDS!
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