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Foals Errand


Not who I was before. But, I'm slowly becoming a new me. Maybe even a better me.

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It was a bright sunny day when Princess Celestia was taken from us by three very familiar fillies... Or was she?

Idea from Rated Ponystar and Edited by Jumbled

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Just....:rainbowkiss:

just too funny.. hehehehwhehehehaaaa!!:rainbowlaugh:

Short, sweet, and extraordinarily silly. Well done! :twilightsmile:

Thank you for this.:rainbowlaugh: :trollestia:

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Glad you enjoyed! This one was a lot of fun to write!

“My one and only weakness! The one thing able to smite me where I stand… nerf darts! Oh I beg of you, I have a little sister who needs me!” Celestia brought her foreleg to her forehead, sighing dramatically.

:rainbowlaugh: Further reason as to why Celly is my fave

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You are very welcome!

My only regret, is that this was not released around Halloween... Whelp, nothing to it! *jumps in a coffin* Tombstone Cutiemark, here I come!

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*falls over giggling!*

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She is awesome isn't she?

This was mostly sillycute. Only thing I can see that'd have gotten it better would be a poison joke smoke bomb dropped at the funeral as the would-be assassins attempt to escape.

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Oh, that would've been good... next time!:pinkiecrazy:

This was just way too adorable. :pinkiehappy: Nice Sanford and Son reference, too.

Their cutie marks would have been a gravestone, a skull, and a rotten leg.

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Thanks, Rk! Glad you enjoyed the reference! I just felt it had to be added.:twilightsmile:

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*nods* Yeah, I don't think they'd enjoy having that on their flanks. :trollestia:

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At this point they'll take anything. Their sisters may not find it as fun, though. Perhaps Rainbow Dash might find it cool if Scootaloo gets the skull.

Judging from the reaction of the guard...I get the impression that something like this has happened before. :rainbowlaugh:

This is a very cute story.

I do suggest an editor tho to look over it as I did noticed some more obvious things.

Okay this whole thing was comedy gold! And I just kinda want to quote everything and make funny remarks on them but I don't have the time nor patience. So I'll compromise with only one quote which I really like.

Celestia gasped, her eyes going wide “Noooo, you got me… Right where I was most vulnerable!” She clasped a hoof to her heart and stumbled back and forth on just three legs, making a horrible groaning noise before reaching out towards the sun. “I’m coming Lizabeth!”

I so totally get that reference. I loved that show. Good times, good times.*reminisces for a short time*

Thanks for the smiles and laughter!:pinkiehappy:

Childish shenanigans ensue. :pinkiehappy:

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I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!:twilightsmile:

Cute story. Although it could use a bit more of an editing job.

Comedy gold right here, great job XD

I can see that happening. Oh how can I see it :rainbowlaugh:

Silly and funny. Just what I like. :twilightsmile:

Secretly the did kill Celestia

randomly cute!:rainbowkiss:

Well, this filled my daily cute quota.

This was a cute little story. I like the guard's reaction. You did have a couple small errors I saw while reading through.

She set her cup down and took a bite of her cookie It let out a small crunch as her right ear flicked.

cookie. It Missing period.

Princess Celestia! We ask, you are you prepared to die today?

ask you,

As she said that, a rose, seemingly

appeared

from nowhere, appeared to be held to Celestia’s chest by her right hoof.

appearing Normally, I'd suggest not using the same word twice in the same sentence like that, but I think it fits with the somewhat corney nature of the story.

Saw the title of the fic. Then saw the description.

Knew immediately Rated Ponystar was involved in its creation. XD

:trollestia: Spike are you finished?
:moustache: nice deep and square.
:trollestia: this should stop their little quest - Rest in peace my little ponies , You may lower the caskets...
:unsuresweetie::applecry::unsuresweetie: Cutie Mark Crusader ZOMBIES YAY!
:raritystarry::applejackconfused::rainbowhuh:

:moustache: ALL THAT DIGGING FOR NOTHING! I'm going to get me some of Celestias chocolate cake

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Hahahaha! Yes, just yes man, nicely written, hehehehe.

Good show.

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Hahahaha! Yes, just yes man, nicely written, hehehehe.

Good show.

Awesome job, my friend! Well done!

Maybe you could make a sequel, where the CMC become "Zombies" to get their Cutie Marks in "Being Corpses"?

It would look like a corpse.

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“I’m coming Lizabeth!”

For those who didn't grow up during the 1970's:

This was a very fun read!

So sweet and hilariously funny :rainbowlaugh: Amazing work!

Delightful! And one really has to give the Cutie Mark Crusaders points for persistence in playing dead all night: most kids would be bored into surrender in much less time.

And as for a "corpse" cutie mark, might I suggest this?

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This is a very good one-shot. I loved the Sanford and Son bit.

This story is all kinds of bonkers and I like it.

:rainbowlaugh: That was great.

“Princess Celestia! We ask, you are you prepared to die today?”
Celestia blinked before smiling “Hello girls, would you like a cookie?”

Okay, that killed the mood; but that is actually something Celestia would say.

My one and only weakness! The one thing able to smite me where I stand… nerf darts!

Ha! I knew it!

Sadly, they were unable to get their cutie marks as corpses...

Awwww...


Nice story!
I wonder how long they stayed 'dead'.
Long enough Celestia ate all the cake?
And I wonder how they explained the whole thing to their sisters.



Found a typo:

took a bite of her cookie. It let out a small crunch

Missing dot.

This is too funny

=^-^=

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