• Member Since 18th Jun, 2017
  • offline last seen 16 hours ago


The Avatar is of a Sugarcane!

Comments ( 9 )
  • Viewing 5 - 9 of 9

Hmm...honestly I was thinking I did slightly rush the battle myself but am . unsure how to expand it without it losing some of the pacing as well as breaking the tension.

A Simple Legend's idea and plot are some of my favourite theme. The turn of events and details to the setting and action in the story especially. While not the most well written and well edited story, to me it is clear that you've create a good story from how you arranged the story elements.

Other than the improvable writing, I think the Final confrontation could use more expression and emotion for the nameless red shirt grunts. So that they left more impressions.

Sorry if seems like preaching. It's just an opinion of a novice, so please take it with some grain of salt. Hope it can help you improve.

Thank you for adding A Simple Legend to your Favorites. :twilightsmile:

May I ask what you enjoy about it?

Glad to help.
The fave is highly deserved.

Thanks for the fave and all your input on my story! I greatly appreciate it!:twilightsmile:

  • Viewing 5 - 9 of 9
Login or register to comment
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!