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Next chapter: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oz-yo2UYHUKgerglDwEDlP2fDOaq2ZhOH8ZtOfhXyvo/edit
Lots of pieces moving this chapter, also Taya gone crazy
Cannot resist the song reference!
Man I fucking love this story
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why not post it here
I'm hoping Nav gets a knife pulled out on her, just so she can have a "My knife is bigger than yours" moment.
Now that is a way to get some revenge/ give punishment on somebody! Put them in a nightmare sequence in a world where you didnt exist because when you did exist it either helped them out extensively and/or saved their life any number of times. I can tell that from the dream where the gryphon assassin attacked them that Shining Armor probably for the most part got killed and it broke Cadance to the point where she was just barely holding onto life only for the sake of their foal. Then we got the ones with Chrysalis in them, she just straight up got broken down to the point of being nothing more than an eggbearer, and as for the ones with Sombra, one ended with her death, the other with her being a brainwashed into becoming Sombra's wife/slave. Now if only Nav can do this to a few other ponies who have irked him.
Best story - 11/10
I liked it, Nav is getting forced to confront pronoun-self still probably going to be fuck all but it is something. I forget, when did Nav end up with cat's eyes? was it when twilight tried the gryphon transformation, but it ended up being too much cat?
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I'm looking it over now.
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It was when Luna made him a knight.
I just had a thought, Nav bitched about not wanting to be Taya's dad, ended up being her dad out of protectiveness,. compains about being her dad, and that he'd be a horrible dad, he doesn't know how to be a dad because his parents never wanted him and were horrible, so thats why he'd be horrible, then when taya is a bitch, he's like well she's a total bitch and I told you I'd be a shitty dad so thats why she is a bitch You forced it on me. Except you know, theres a difference between being shitty and not putting in an effort or attempt. not to mention that since nav's parents were shitty, then nav should know what to give taya everything that he wanted in a father that he never had.
I kinda like how Aqua is taking her face and pushing her nose in the pile of shit she made and then says no, bad nav, don't do that.
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oh I didn't realize that stuck, neat.
Aww, I thought the introduction of Luna would've been the beginning of the end for Aqua.
Not gonna lie, never have seen a story with over 1 million words
I bet the "surprise" is a marriage proposal between Nav and Celestia.
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you must not have looked at the FimFic Library sorted by length...
the entire library sorted by length longest to shortest
https://www.fimfiction.net/stories?order=words
China no.1
thank god Nav didn't turn her into an enemy
oi, I'm sure revenge and Luna don't make a pretty combination
is it Nav...
Sex Slave?
oh Dash is totally going to be a tsundere
Fucking hell, finally no more sex for some time I'm surprised Nav isn't sick of it yet. Now I really want to see how you're going to victimize Aqua and if you are. I mean you managed to make some, if not the majority, of the audience forgive rapist Luna surely you can do that with Aqua? Unless everyone doesn't give a damn about her and she should die.
Can we get more of Carl, please? Love you
Bacon.
More pieces set to move. Though I'm curious to see just how dramatically those nightmares change Cadence
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Next chapter seem like its gonna be rather long buddy
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This is what I suspect along with the apparent announcement at some point that he took Aqua as a host which just makes me think this side plot with Aqua is getting dumber and dumber. Anyone who would think Nav would accept Celestia and Celestia would give him a real proposal is an idiot. Anyone who would think Nav would take a water, especially Aqua, as a host is an idiot. If anyone believed Nav would back out of the finding-self coma, they’re an idiot.
Then again, that’s been my problem with this subplot the entire time. I personally think it’s an uninteresting development for the story and took too many contrivances to have happen. It further is going to extend the time before we finally get to Tartarus as we have to resolve the reveal of Celestia (probably a proposal) then everyone’s reactions and either the plot finally gets killed or it continues until someone realizes how stupid all this is and takes measures to remove Aqua.
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No, nav still has the slited eyes from being lunas knight
...these last few chapters, I have gotten the distinct feeling that my enjoyment of the Aqua subplot is in the minority...
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Oh yea, Aqua would be heavily evicted by the force of others very quickly if that was the case, because EVERYONE would know something was up by that point.
I was actually thinking the surprise was gonna be Aqua forcing Celestia and Luna to be involved with the vault's excursion, to make the odds of survival greater.
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No you fail to see the point, Aqua even if she would fail has done a lot of good. She has become the common enemy of Navi and Celestia and somehow mended the rift between them which might have torn Equestria apart in a civil war. I am unsure if she understands what she is doing, but could be all is going towards her plan.
Even if she would be destroyed in the end, if she was able to bring Celestia and Navi to peace and unified against Discord would it not all be worth it from her point of view? And at the same time she can attempt to drive in as much realizations as she can into the Navi's Psyche.
Then again she could just be insane too.
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Does Nav still have the cat's eyes?
Aqua was noticeably less evil in this chapter.
I think that if it weren't for the past threats to give Nav a heart attack if he didn't obey, I wouldn't be as noticeably creeped the fuck out by her. At least she's settled into a more Flo-ish creepy possessiveness.
Glad to see some wheels in motion for the next arc, the festival was fun at first, but I was about done with it. Dreamwalking sections are always fun as well.
After the Google Doc was posted in the comments of the last chapter, I was really tempted to read ahead, but I just made myself wait. Good chapter, cheers!
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Uhm. No? They patch up and rift like eatch ark more or less.
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I kinda hoped the sex would make alot of red flags pop up with nav (since that was something he woundt do) and cadance actualy gave a shit about nav. But this makes it intresting with whats gonna happen with her mentaly and her oppinion of nav
Hmm, well at least 2 ponies have caught Nav "talking to herself" now. They may not figure it out, but it's encouraging that Aqua seems to be getting sloppy.
I do kinda hope Nav gets the tree sister wings, that's a transformation I've been looking forward to.
*later, when everyone just converges in Canterlot to murder Celestia*
Luna: “Do you think I should get a water elemental like you have, Navarone?”
Everyone: “...”
Water Elementals: “...?”
All Present Fire Elementals: “...!”
Aqua: *slowly starts backing away*
These words should switch places.
So it looks like we have something interesting to look forward to after the bunker. Cadance's nightmares would have been interesting to watch play out. Even if they would have been overly gruesome. Nice to get a follow up on all the characters we have not seen in a while. Taya becoming a tree pony will be neat.
~KBO.
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But I liked the build up of that conflict between Nav and Celestia. This resolving that makes it an unsatisying anticlimax for me. It also would make me dislike this arch even more.
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Congrats, you're part of the .1%. Many of us don't even know why we're reading anymore since It bores us to tears.
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I know that feeling, but it would make a lot of sense for someone 'adult' to stave that off with firm hand. Celestia and Navi are indeed like children who are co-dependent and pathologically aggressive. If Aqua is indeed not insane she has a point, it does not make her good on any level but she WOULD have a point. (And lets be honest i do not think either have any moral high-ground to say that mind/body control is somehow worse than what EITHER of them has done in the past.) Then again not sure if that would be the kind of chaos which makes Discord stronger or not.
Dramatic build-up like that could be a lot of fun i am sure and it would release a lot of tension. But for it to be staved off with something like this would be so cynical that i think it would fit the story better. But then again, she likely is as nutty as presented so point is moot.
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Depression. That was the ending of the nightmare where her baby is murdered by assassins. Shining would've died of old age, leaving her alone; or maybe was also murdered by assassins. Shining could've disappeared to hunt down the assassins; or maybe he ordered a divorce?
Not that it's too important, being a dream sequence.
This shit is still cash.
I can't wait for it to blow up in Aqua's face.
Out of all the possible ships that can be done with Nav in this story, I have to say that Princess Gilda is now one of my favorite. Sure, it probably wont happen, but it's a nice thought. I've never really liked the Twiggles ship though. Something about her relationship with Nav just feels... off, in a way. There's also the option of a harem but i don't see this story falling into that chategory, at least not yet.
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Ah I thought it was the Sombra scenario
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Nav would wear that poor girl out.
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Apparently we have a long wait.
Should be "wanted" to maintain past tense (from "refused"). Or, if you don't care about Aqua's dialogue, leaving it's fine, too.
This on purpose?
I may or may not edit this if I find more things to pick on. Depends on laziness.Just story comments:
Surprised Aqua didn't prevent this.
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It is Aqua controlling all of this. And even with her intelligence we have seen that she's not all there. Perhaps this is how Aqua is meant to be found out without some divine intervention. Or Nav dieing.
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"That's noit a noife." *Shhhhhink* "This is a noife..."
Makes me happy to hear that Nav is treated with respect in Gryphus an not groveling or fear :3
You know, now that Nav is a tree people.. without a normal human circulatory system. I bet her periods are hella wierd. Honestly, I'm kinda surprised her body still works that way.
I guess she's just not allowed to have nice things..
one cannot truly love the one who mistreats them so. Stockholm Syndrome requires actual imprisonment. Any other method requires some form of mental manipulation, which cannot produce actual love, merely addiction and fondness
I straight up instantly thought of Anne Frank, ngl
Jane, Nav's sister probably
Man, I still think Cadence got off way too light for having Nav raped.
Like Nav put pinkie through straight mental torture for raping him, and she wasn't someone Nav called sister. One night of bad dreams is nothing.
How many more chapters will this Aqua shit go on for? I've loved this fic so far, but it's becoming unbearable.
EDIT: She's removed in chapter 184